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03-26-2018, 07:41 PM


The dark-pelted woman strode through the land, her half-tail swishing irritably. The sun hung low in the sky though there were still at least a couple hours left of daylight. Her fiery eyes scanned the area, ensuring no one else was hanging around the area as she searched for a satisfactory spot for a well-earned nap.

The last few nights had only offered a few hours of fitful, nightmare filled 'rest' if you could even call it that. She was cranky, angry, and more than ready to have some alone time. Curling up beneath one of the cypress trees Mara nested herself among it's roots, a soft sigh escaping her as she relaxed a bit. Reentering these lands had only made her nights worse, but she hoped that maybe finding her children again might help her with whatever was wrong with her. It was clear to Mara something was amiss, though at the time she would not know it was because of some awakening sense of morality deep within her crying out to punish her for the things she'd done before having her children.

The woman shivered a bit as the wind rolled over the sand, ruffling her thin pelt and making her shiver. The sky was clouded over and it looked like rain was a possibility. Great. Add cold to tired and irritable and Mara was a far cry from a happy camper.

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Mara is rude, lazy, and really likes to swear sometimes. She is not pleasant in the slightest.



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03-26-2018, 08:09 PM
#2

 The man had been looking for herbs, or something to eat. He had been bored latley and he decided he wanted to do something, anything really. His companion circled his up above him with the slight chips as she, looked down at him.

 Hmm what was she so annoyed about, he responds with a low growl. Before he takes a few feet off between a tree and himself he lowered his crown, smelling herbs. He found a few clovers and he was pleased with that. Before he took another sniff, and at the scent he picked up made his hackles raise and ears pin topped off with narrowed eyes.  

 His eyes resembled slivers, and his toes splayed as he traced along the roots he let out a huff. As he spotted a scared woman had she been in a bunch of battles, or had she been a omega? But he spoke, "Hello ma'am? Are you alright?" he questioned.
"Talk." 'Think.' "Others."
Made for Xander. Made by Bear



Mara

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03-26-2018, 08:41 PM


The soft, barely noticeable sound of paws hitting sound would alert Mara to the approach of a stranger. A soft growl rose in her throat, eyes closing tighter as she tried to make the other leave simply by willing them to disappear. It clearly didn't work as the man came closer and spoke to her. Fantastic, now she really wouldn't get any rest, and with her foal mood this was really not the time to interrupt an attempted nap.

Lifting her head Mara eyed the man who spoke and sneered at him as she hissed, "I'd be better if I was left alone. Unless you're looking for a scrap, in which case I'd be happy to oblige and forgo my rest." After all, she woudn't be Mara if she wasn't itching for a fight despite her condition. A good brawl superseded her other needs the majority of the time. Would the man take her up on her thinly veiled challenge, or was he a coward? If he was she might just lash out anyways. It was just one of those days.

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Mara is rude, lazy, and really likes to swear sometimes. She is not pleasant in the slightest.



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03-26-2018, 09:00 PM
#4

A low growl arose from the woman, before she hissed a long thread of words. "I'd be better if I was left alone. Unless you're looking for a scrap, in which case I'd be happy to oblige and forgo my rest." he smiled, his hips moving backwards.

 His lips pulled back as his snarl grew teasingly as he reformed his frame so his skull was alined with his spine, tail aligned with spine. Weight spread evenly across all of his limbs, and toes splayed  and claws digging into the earth. He made sure his tail was tuck to protect his 'gift of the gods'. He tucked his crown, so his scruff protected his neck. His eyes narrowed, and ears pinned.

0/? Rounds
 Xander vs Mara?
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Made for Xander. Made by Bear



Mara

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03-27-2018, 12:08 AM


The other wolf moved back and set his defenses, and that was all the answer Mara really needed. Unfurling herself from her place nestled among the tree roots, Mara took a position away from the tree, aiming to stand roughly ten feet away from her opponent if he’d allow, facing the grey brute and pulling her lips back into a snarl. Now was as good a time as any to work off some pent up aggression and get started on working her body into fighting shape again. Even if she was a little fatigued, she wasn’t going to let the challenge go unanswered.

Legs spreading equidistant, weight settling evenly over all four limbs and knees bending to lower her center of gravity Mara began her preparations. Ears fell back, chin tucked, eyes narrowed to slits to protect them from the fangs of her opponent. With head and tail aligned with her spine she was ready, and wordlessly surged forwards in an attempt to close the distance between her opponent and herself.

Since he was seemingly the same height as herself she expected no weight advantage to abuse. A fight on roughly equal - if you didn’t account for her tired state, though the adrenaline was quick to get her blood pumping - physical footing was an interesting change of pace. She sought to come at him head on, aiming to slam her chest into his dead center. If she did it just right she would leave behind some moderate bruising, or at least that was the goal. At the same time her head snaked over to her own left, aiming to bite into the right side of Xander’s face. Her upper jaw aimed just above his right brow spot, while her lower jaw sought to dig into the flesh above the right corner of his mouth. If she had her way she would draw her jaws together and leave a fair amount of facial scarring with the wounds she aimed to inflict.

Mara vs. Xander for maim - Facial Scarring
Round 1 of 2
Height: 36 inches
Build: Medium

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Mara is rude, lazy, and really likes to swear sometimes. She is not pleasant in the slightest.



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03-27-2018, 08:02 PM
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 He watched the woman set her own defense's, as she at least was very thin and lwan he would have only a slight advantage. But she'd have had fought more than him, as she finished and the equally amount of ten feet spaced between them.

 He shifted to the left and at her attempt to slam into his body, missed. As she did these he reared onto his back limbs, lowering his front left limb in attempt to grab ahold of the right side of her neck and sought right frount limb to wrap around her left side. At these her jaws missed there set spot, but ended up giving minor wounds to his shoulder, he winced at the feeling.

 He felt his jaws unhinged and he fell from his opponent and at the force, he hoped to rip a large gash on the side of her face. He stepped back and steadied himself.

 Xander vs Mara for maim - Facial scarring
 Round 1/2
 Height: 36 inches
 Build: medium



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03-28-2018, 08:27 PM
OOC: Clarified directions a bit with Bear. Also woo, last round and we can have it judged.



Her chest slam missed it's mark, and she growled as she shifted her weight back to stop her momentum as there was nothing left to stop her as she stood with him slightly to her right. Her bite wasn't wasted though, as she re-angled herself and ended up managing to sink her fangs into his left shoulder. The success was satisfying, and it drove her as she pressed on, intending to put up a vicious, merciless fight. Her legs  re-positioned to sit equidistant apart, snarl reforming as she pulled her head back from his shoulder, half-tail flagging out for whatever balance it could add, aligning with her spine along with her head at the same time. Chin tucked, ears flattened, eyes narrowed and snarl reformed as she prepared for a second assault.

He aimed to wrap his arms around her neck, and succeeded, by her design. As his jaws parted, coming in for a bite that would surely leave scars over the previously unmarked right side of her face, Mara's own jaws opened once more, angling upwards and seeking to grasp his lower jaw as it came in for the bite, upper jaw aiming to sink in over his tongue while the lower jaw aimed to grasp under his chin. She sought one thing - control.

At the same time Mara would shift her weight to her hind legs, lifting her front end in an attempt to stand rearing before her opponent, also lifting her left paw and hoping to wrap it around his right side just below his right elbow. Her right front leg would seek to wrap itself around the left side of his neck and grip the male. Then, Mara would violently twist her body to the right, hoping to knock the man off balance and send him to the ground beneath her, toes splaying and claws sinking into the ground for added traction.

Mara vs. Xander for maim - Facial Scarring
Round 2 of 2
Height: 36 inches
Build: Medium

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Mara is rude, lazy, and really likes to swear sometimes. She is not pleasant in the slightest.



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03-28-2018, 08:44 PM
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The man, missed his mark as the woman tried to wrap her jaws around his lower jaw he'd move his crown away snapping his jaw shut and trying to lower his form as the woman wrapped her leg around him the other was missed as he moved his leg. He lowered his front half power and momentum held in his back legs, as he sought to ram into the woman solar plexus. He opened his jaw in hope to drive his lower fangs into the lower part of her ribe cage, and sought for his upper fangs to slash a severe wound in the woman's stomach. He would then push up with his back legs, to shove his fangs deeper in what ever was there.

The man let his tail wave for any extra balance as he took, a step forth as he tried to slam his chest in between her right shoulder in hopes to dislocate the muscle. He took a sharp turn to make them into a crooked "/\" shape with his head pointed at her rear, he opened his jaw, and sought to get a grip on her rump to weaken her at least at the point where she would be in pain to set her hip down. He turned his crown and sought to dive under the woman, and rear to knock her over.

Mara vs Xander for maim - Facial scarring
Round 2/2
Height: 36"
Build: Medium


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MARA vs XANDER for MAIM (Facial Scarring)


ROUND ONE


MARA:


WRITING

10/10 for Power Play:

  • Attempts
  • Godmoding
  • If/Than Statements
  • Excessive Movement
  • Realism
10/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -1 "her chest into his dead center" center of his what?
  • Positioning
  • Directions
  • Movements
  • Damage
6/10 for Attacks:
  • +2 chest slam
  • +3 bite +1 severity
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 each seen
10/10 for Injuries:
  • no deductions (first round)

Status

4/12 for Experience:
  • +2 Novice Fighter (you'll want to get staff to fix this. At 15 points she should be Novice not Beginner)
  • +2 Novice Intellectual
4/5 for Health:
  • loner
  • unhealed event status - none
  • unhealed fight status - none

MARA’s round one total: 49/62



XANDER:


WRITING

9/10 for Power Play:

  • Attempts
  • -1 make sure to be clear in your attempts, I wasn't sure on the bite attack if it was attempted.
  • Godmoding
  • If/Than Statements
  • Excessive Movement
  • Realism
0/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -2 where on her face is he aiming his attack? How will he position his jaws?
  • Positioning
  • -2 "font limb to wrap around her left side" where on her left side? The whole left side is a big area to cover and could drastically change how far Xander is reaching.
  • Directions
  • Movements
  • -2 "He shifted to the left" this needs to be elaborated on. Is he just leaning to the left? Stepping? Leaping? -2 "and he fell from his opponent" how is he falling? His he falling forward, back, down? Make sure to be specific in how your wolf is moving.
  • Damage
  • -1 "minor wounds to his shoulder"  which shoulder? -1 how bad are the injuries he received?
5/10 for Attacks:
  • +2 arm wrap
  • +3 bite
0/5 for Defenses:
  • Good work on them in your Round 0 but judging doesn't start til Round 1 so you'll need to list your defenses in this post to to get points.
10/10 for Injuries:
  • moderate lacerations to left shoulder [clarified by judge, no deduction in points because its first round]

Status

2/12 for Experience:
  • +1 Beginner Healer
  • +1 Beginner Navigator
4/5 for Health:
  • loner
  • unhealed event status - none
  • unhealed fight status - none

XANDER’s round one total: 30/62





ROUND TWO


MARA:


WRITING

8/10 for Power Play:

  • Attempts
  • Godmoding
  • If/Than Statements
  • -2 watch these, the way the "twisting to the right" line is worded she would need to succeed in her attempted arm wrap for this to even be possible.
  • Excessive Movement
  • Realism
9/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • Positioning
  • -1 did she return to all fours?
  • Directions
  • Movements
  • Damage
5/10 for Attacks:
  • +3 bite
  • +2 armwrap
5/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 each seen
10/10 for Injuries:
  • none

Status

4/12 for Experience:
  • +2 Novice Fighter
  • +2 Novice Intellectual
4/5 for Health:
  • loner
  • unhealed event status - none
  • unhealed fight status - none

MARA’s round two total: 45/62



XANDER:


WRITING

0/10 for Power Play:

  • Attempts
  • Godmoding
  • If/Than Statements
  • -2 "he would then push up" this move depends on the bite succeeding which you don't know if it did until your opponent replies. If you do succeed then in your next post you can try for worsening the damage.
  • Excessive Movement
  • -3 way to much movement! You need to give your opponent time to respond to your first set of attacks before making another. First he's under her then he gets behind her, then he's back under her? Its very confusing. -2 the majority of the time you can only make 1 attack per body part, more than that is almost always excessive movement.   -2 his head is above her for the attack and without waiting for it to succeed he tried to dive under her. Again, it is very important to allow your opponent to respond. Stick to a single set of moves per post.
  • Realism
  • -2 I don't think it's feasible for him to try and slam his chest into her right shoulder while he's trying to bite underneath her, also at this close range he won't be able to do enough damage to dislocate it.
0/10 for Clarity:
  • Attacks
  • -2 what part of his body is he trying to ram into her solar plexus and how? - "between her right shoulder" between her right shoulder and what?
  • Positioning
  • -2 where on her rump is he trying to bite? -1 what damage is he trying to do with that bite?
  • Directions
  • -1 "he took a sharp turn" which way?
  • Movements
  • Damage
  • -1 so did her bite miss completely? -2 which of Mara's legs connected and where? -2 which leg missed and why?
5/10 for Attacks:
  • +1 body slam?
  • +3 bite
  • +1 shoulder slam [close proximity]
  • +3 bite to rear -2 for excessive movement
1/5 for Defenses:
  • +1 for each seen
10/10 for Injuries:
  • none

Status

2/12 for Experience:
  • +1 Beginner Healer
  • +1 Beginner Navigator
4/5 for Health:
  • loner
  • unhealed event status - none
  • unhealed fight status - none

XANDER’s round two total: 22/62



Totals:




MARA: 94/124
XANDER: 52/124




And the winner is...



MARA! XANDER must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Mara's maim is successful and Xander now has permanent scars across the right side of his face.


Damage:

MARA:
  • no injuries
XANDER:
  • moderate lacerations to shoulder - 2 ooc weeks
  • severe facial scarring - 1 ooc month to scar over, will leave permanent scars

Notes:

I do my notes above next to the deductions so it's more clear on why I'm taking off points. Good work Monster, you're getting the hang of the system! Bear, this was a bit rough for you but it's your first fight. Just work on making sure your attacks are clear and remember to list your defenses in each post.  Also watch for that excessive movement! An easy way to avoid this is to only have one attack per body part in a post.

Thanks guys!

- By Lunarcat7