LET'S TAKE THE CHANCE RIGHT NOW AND SCREAM
09-18-2013, 08:13 PM
Artemis vs. Ares Round 1
Ares:CLARITY: 9 / 10 Fairly clear, would have liked more detail in what angle he was coming from in his attack. POWERPLAYING: 10 / 10 No powerplaying found. DEFENSES: 1 / 10 Pinned ears. ATTACK: 2 / 10 Single move attack, bite at her muzzle. INJURIES: 10 / 10 First round. No injuries. Round one Ares Total: 32 / 50 Artemis: CLARITY: 9 / 10 Post was fairly clear, would have liked to know a few more details on the directions of her dodges and attacks. POWERPLAYING: 9 / 10 Took one point for assuming that his attack missed completely and hit above her eye instead DEFENSES: 2 / 10 Pinned ears, aligned spine. ATTACK: 7 / 10 Multiple move attack, attempting to knock his chest up with hers, is making a move to bite his throat/cheek INJURIES: 10/ 10 Shallow bite above her right eye. Round one Artemis Total: 38 / 50 Round 2
Ares: CLARITY: 6 / 10 This seemed a little muddled to me. It didn?t seem clear as to what he was doing with the leap and I had a hard time figuring out not only where exactly he was trying to attack, but how he was doing it with Artemis attached to his cheek. Also, nothing was mentioned in your post in regards to Artemis attempting to hit his chest with hers. POWERPLAYING: 9 / 10 Took a point off for ignoring her move to hit her chest against his. DEFENSES: 1 / 10 Pinned ears. (Didn?t see how even breathing was a defense, so I didn?t count it as one.) ATTACK: 4 / 10 One move attack, leaping and twisting to bite at the base of her neck. INJURIES: 7 / 10 Bite to the left side of his neck/cheek. Round two Ares Total: 28 / 50 Artemis: CLARITY: 6 / 10 I had several problems reading this post. I needed to see some more direction in where she was attacking, when she released him, ect. Really just some more clearly stated things would have helped. POWERPLAYING: 10 / 10 No power playing found. DEFENSES: 2 / 10 Ears pinned, lowered to the ground. ATTACK: 3 / 10 Single move, biting at his shoulder while trying to hit his chest with hers. INJURIES: 7/ 10 Light bruise on her chest, bite right behind her skull. Round two Artemis Total: 28 / 50 Round 3
Ares: CLARITY: 7 / 10 Fairly clear post. But, I was a bit confused by how he was bumping her with his hips, the angle of everything wasn?t very clear. POWERPLAYING: 9 / 10 It seems like you?re assuming that she releases his shoulder from the angle I?m picturing him attacking from, but I only took off one point since you didn?t blatantly say it. DEFENSES: 1 / 10 Front paws planted firmly ATTACK: 4 / 10 Multi-move attack, bumping her with his hip and biting at her muzzle INJURIES: 8 / 10 Biting to shoulder/chest Round three Ares Total: 29 / 50 Artemis: CLARITY: 9 / 10 Your post was much more clear this time, still just a few directional issues for me. POWERPLAYING: 10 / 10 No power playing found. DEFENSES: 2 / 10 Ears pinned, spine aligned ATTACK: 4 / 10 Single move attack, attempting to bite down on the lower half of his jaw, possibly interlocking their jaws INJURIES: 10/ 10 No new injuries Round three Artemis Total: 35 / 50 Totals:
Ares: 89/150 Artemis: 101 /150 And the winner is...
Artemis! Ares must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Ares - Has a fairly deep bite to the left side of his face/neck and also a deep bite to his shoulder that could impede his walking a bit. Artemis- A shallow bite above her right eye and a deeper bite to the area behind her skull Notes:
Aly: I love how descriptive your writing style is, but sometimes it?s really distracting when I?m trying to read it and I keep having to look up words (no offence meant, your vocabulary is impressive.) Also, I would suggest pointing some of that descriptive power of yours toward the actual attacks and add some more to angles and directions and the like.Kat: My only suggestion is to keep more realistic fighting angles in mind. It was hard for me to picture what you were saying in Ares?s body position, especially in your last post. So just be very specific in the angles. Other than that, good writing. - Shelbs |
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