Nothing Says Bonding like Blood
01-05-2014, 03:53 PM
IMPRA vs AROS for PRACTICE Round 1
impra ? clarity ? 1 out of 10 ; failure to specify which of impra?s shoulders aros? managed to hit (-2). in regard to impra?s injuries to aros? attack, you state that aros impacts her shoulder and yet moderate bruising blossoms upon her chest as a result (-2). failure to specify which of impra?s shoulders is aiming for aros (-2). failure to include what impra wanted to achieve with her attack (-2). while you state that impra is aiming for the ?same place that aros? aimed for,? it should still be clarified in your post (-1). powerplay ? 8 out of 10 ; ??as she pushed herself forward.? given aros? and impra?s close proximity, this needs to be made an attempt (-2). defenses ? 10 out of 10 ; eyes narrowed, ears pinned, teeth exposed, chin tucked, limbs spaced evenly, weight evenly distributed, balanced upon toes, tail out, hackles raised, limbs bent. attack ? 2 out of 10 ; shoulder-thrust to aros? right side (+2, points not awarded in full, refer to clarity section) injuries ? 10 out of 10 ; first round ? moderate bruising to chest. round one impra total ? 31 out of 50 aros ? clarity ? 0 out of 10 ; failure to specify where on aros impra managed to hit (-2). failure to specify the damage dealt upon aros from impra?s attack, i.e. moderate bruising, etc (-2). failure to specify how aros is falling, i.e. to his left side, etc (-2). failure to specify which forelimb aros is aiming for (-2). failure to specify where on impra?s forelimb aros is aiming for (-2). in regards to aros? intentions behind the bite to impra?s forelimb, you state that he wished to ?pin her? and yet it didn?t make much sense that he would pin her by simply grabbing her forelimb ? in order to pin her he would need to utilize his weight to drag her down and then manage to find his way on top of her (-3). failure to specify which direction aros would roll in order to regain his footing (-2). powerplay ? 3 out of 10 ; ?As her body [w]as over his?? you may not assume anything of the opponent?s position (-3). ?The odds of her pushing up against his weight if he pinned her was low enough?? you may not assume what is or is not likely for another character (-2). ?Eve[n] if she sailed over him and broke his grip?? the wording here makes it sound like you assumed he managed a grip upon her forelimb as intended (-2). defenses ? 0 out of 10 ; although you state that aros falls back into his stance, you need to clearly reset your defenses in every post. attack ? 2 out of 10 ; bite to impra?s forelimb (+2, points not awarded in full, refer to clarity section) injuries ? 10 out of 10 ; first round ? unspecified damage from impra?s shoulder attack. round one aros total ? 15 out of 50 Round 2
impra ? clarity ? 8 out of 10 ; failure to specify exactly where impra intended to bite down upon aros, i.e. upper or lower jaw (-2). powerplay ? 10 out of 10 ; ??as she stood over him.? while no points were taken away from your score for this since aros assumed impra was positioned over him in the previous post, I would have taken points here otherwise for it is an assumption of the opponent?s position. to avoid this, you could include in the previous attack that she intended to position herself over him or something of the like. defenses ? 10 out of 10 ; ears pinned, eyes narrowed, jaws set agape, skull lowered, hackles raised, weight evenly distributed, tail out, limbs bent, toes splayed, claws gripping soil. attack ? 2 out of 10 ; bite to aros? jaws to stop his attempted bite from occurring (+2, points not awarded in full, refer to clarity section). injuries ? 10 out of 10 ; counterattack to aros? bite, pending damage. round two impra total ? 40 out of 50 aros ? clarity ? 7 out of 10 ; in regard to aros? kick to impra?s stomach, I didn?t feel this would be very realistic, considering the fact that wolves don?t pack very much power behind their limbs ? especially not enough to kick upwards very well (-3). powerplay ? 0 out of 10 ; ??Aros found that his teeth managed only to graze the fae's limb?? impra?s previous post never stated that aros? attack managed to hit at all (-3). not only did aros manage to avoid impra?s attack to his jaws without a specified reason, but he managed to completely avoid the attack altogether. there needs to be a specified reason as to how aros would have been able to avoid impra?s bite, i.e. ducking (-4). ?With the fae's momentum driving forwards?? from this point on, too many assumptions are made about the opponent. you may not depict what your opponent is doing nor can you state what your attack against your opponent would do. these can, instead, be made as what your character intends to achieve with their attack (-5). defenses ? 0 out of 10 ; again, your defenses need to be clearly reset with every post; they do not carry over throughout the whole fight. attack ? 2 out of 10 ; kick to impra?s stomach (+2, points not awarded in full, refer to clarity section). injuries ? 7 out of 10 ; while no injuries were specified in this post, I am deducting points here for the unfairness of aros not receiving an injury at all (-3, refer to powerplay section for explanation). round two aros total ? 16 out of 50 Round 3
impra ? clarity ? 4 out of 10 ; failure to specify where on aros? jaws impra is aiming for (-2). failure to specify the damage done to impra?s underbelly (-2). failure to specify where impra positions herself in relation to aros as she retreats from overtop of him (-2). powerplay ? 7 out of 10 ; the success of aros? attack to impra?s forelimb depended on the success of impra?s attack to his muzzle. as there was no mention of the hit in the first post since it was a counterattack, the attack should have been responded to in this post since her counter was not a success (-3). defenses ? 9 out of 10 ; eyes narrowed, ears pinned, jaws set agape, abdomen tensed, weight evenly distributed, limbs bent, toes splayed, raised hackles, tail out. attack ? 2 out of 10 ; attack to aros? jaws (+2, points not awarded in full, refer to clarity section) injuries ? 8 out of 10 ; unspecified damage from aros? kick ? judge deduction for moderate bruising (-2). round three impra total ? 30 out of 50 aros ? clarity ? 1 out of 10 ; failure to specify damage done from impra?s bite to his jaws. while you did a better job at stating that her bite broke his skin, it?s still vague (-2). ?Aros would charge the fae?? as impra had a hold on aros? jaws, this seemed entirely unrealistic ? feint or not (-2). failure to specify which paw was aiming for impra?s muzzle and where on the muzzle aros was aiming for with his swipe (-3). failure to mention what aros would hope to achieve by swiping his paw along her muzzle (-2). powerplay ? 4 out of 10 ; ?The fae was flung off of him?? aros did not manage to fling impra off of him, she merely stepped off (-2). there was also too much movement in this post, what with aros ?charging forward,? stopping, sitting down, and then lifting his paw to swipe at impra?s muzzle (-4). defenses ? 4 out of 10 ; tail out, toes splayed, ears pinned, head lowered. I didn?t understand what having his ?feet braced? would do, and therefore I did not count it. attack ? 2 out of 10 ; swipe to impra?s muzzle (+2, points not awarded in full, refer to clarity section). injuries ? 7 out of 10 ; unspecified damage from impra?s grip to his muzzle ? judge deduction for quarter-of-an-inch deep puncture wounds to upper and lower jaw, bleeding moderately (-3). round three aros total ? 18 out of 50 Totals:
impra ? 100 out of 150 aros ? 49 out of 150 And the winner is...
impra! aros must give up by either fleeing, passing out, or submitting. Damage:
impra ? moderate bruising to stomach and chest, mild lacerations to left forelimb (will take three ooc days to heal). aros ? moderate bruising to right-sided chest, fourth-of-an-inch deep puncture wounds to upper and lower jaws (will take five ooc days to heal). Notes:
i understand this is a spar so attacks weren't meant to be that great, and therefore i won't say too much about them. overall, there was a lack of clarity upon both of your parts so be sure to include as much detail as you can throughout your attack posts! this makes it easier to understand on both the judge's part and your opponent. fox, do not be discouraged about your score! fighting through roleplay is something you get better at through experience, so just take what judges say to heart if you want to improve! c: be sure to reset your defenses with each post and try to include as many as you can think of to improve the defense score. |
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