Mine, mine, MINE
08-10-2014, 04:54 PM
Esti v Laufey for Dominance and the bone Round 1
Esti: 0 for clarity- -1 I'm not sure how her pulling on the bone would topple him, now letting go of it sure, make sure to mention though that she let go or she wouldn't be able to attack with her jaws -2 what angle is she approaching Laufey, I know it's probably straight on but you have to specify so no one makes assumptions xD -4 how's she planning to pin him? with her legs? her body? flip him on his back? his side? -2 where specifically on his neck is she aiming? -2 what is she trying to grab his neck with? again i'm assuming jaws but you can't leave it open for me to assume you must state specifically -2 which side of his neck is she attacking? 10 for powerplaying. none seen, nice work 4 for defenses.+1 for each seen 2 for attack. +1 for pin attempt (points deducted for numerous clarity issues) +1 for bite (points deducted for multiple clarity issues) 10 for injuries. first round Round one Total: 26/50 Laufey: 1 for clarity--2 what part of Esti hit him? if your opponent fails to be specific its up to you, an excellent time to use their move against them! -2 where on his neck did the bite land? -1 what do you mean "snaked his head to the left"? how is he twisting his head? minor thing that bugs luns xD -2 what side of Esti's neck is he aiming to bite? -2 a little more clarification for "below ribs" would nice. that's a wide area. are you aiming right below the sternum? ribs on the left? the right? 7 for powerplaying.-2 you need to attempt to wrap his forelegs around her neck -1 not sure I find it believable or not that the bite did not break skin did he move in some way to avoid the attack or cause it to not be fully successful? 1 for defenses.+1 for each seen -2 for not readjusting balance when front paws lifted 4 for attack. +1 arm wrap (points deducted for pp) +2 for bite (-1 for clarity) +1 kick (points deducted for clarity) 10 for injuries. first round Round one Total: 23/50 Round 2
Esti: 3 for clarity- -2 how is she jolting downward? like straight down? Is she dropping completely? or is she crouching suddenly? -2 which way is her head twisting? -2 which side of his neck is she aiming for? -1 how would this grip strangle him? 7 for powerplaying.-1 the fur is thin near the base of the ear so the damage would likely be greater but good job with realistic damage to the other attacks! -2 watch the "if" statements at the end. you don't want to assume anything til your opponent actually reacts. 4 for defenses.+1 for each seen 3 for attack.+1 dropping weight down (points deducted for clarity) +2 for bite (points deducted for clarity) 7 for injuries. -1 bleeding near base of ear -2 kick to gut/ribs Round two Total: 24/50 Laufey: 2 for clarity- -2 how exactly is laufey positioned in relation to Esti? his back legs are on either side of her but where in relation to her? either side of her hips? her shoulders? -2 what part of her is pressing on him, you mention jaws hit fur? or is this just your previous attack? later you mention he released her ear -2 where on his neck did her attack connect? -2 what side of his neck? 8 for powerplaying.-2 still need an attempt for the front limbs something like "he attempted to keep his arms around her neck" or something 7 for defenses.+1 each seen, much better! 6 for attack.+2 for kick +2 attempt to roll her over the side +2 for bite (point deducted as the ears are pinned so this attack will be particularly tricky but overall good work!) 8 for injuries.-2 damage to middle of neck Round two Total: 31/50 Round 3
Esti: 2 for clarity- -2 how is she positioned over laufey? you say her legs went out from under her is she spread-eagle? xD -2 which way did she twist her body -2 where are his forelegs around, again I can probably assume around her neck but you have to specifically say, just part of how it's done on ala. -2 attacking his legs? I'm not sure what to make of that sentence at the end 7 for powerplaying. -3 this could be a clarity issue but you have her try to bite his neck then say she let go this is assuming the attack landed 5 for defenses. +1 for each found 3 for attack. +3 bite to nose 7 for injuries. -2 kick to the gut -1 light bite wound Round Three Total: 24/50 Laufey: 5 for clarity--2 what angle is he at in relation to Esti? -3 how his he getting a paw against her shoulder blades when she's on her side? Do you mean right next to? Same with the other paw is the paw actually "on" Esti or just near? If they aren't on her how is the positioning intended to keep her pinned? -2 what is his intent with the bite to the nose? is it for a grip? just a nip? 6 for powerplaying.-4 you need to include an attempt to have your paws positioned on her otherwise it negates the whole point of him attempting to stand over her. 6 for defenses.+1 for each seen -2 for not adjusting balance when leg lifted 5 for attack. +2 for butt scratches (lol) +3 bite to nose 8 for injuries.-2 bite to nose, extra point removed for damage to sensitive area Round Three Total: 30/50 Totals:
Esti: 74/150 Laufey: 84/150 And the winner is...
Laufey! Esti must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Minor bites will take a few ooc days to heal the deeper ones will take an ooc week. Overall not many serious wounds so you're wolves should be up and going in no time. Notes:
Fun fight guys! I think "hugging? really violently" is my favorite line I've read in a fight thus far. Both of you just really need to focus on clarity, I know a lot of things can be more or less assumed but judges are not allowed to go on assumptions. Also note that if your opponent fails to be specific it's up to you to do so. I know this can be tricky but it's important to avoid later confusion in a fight, it's also an opportunity to turn an attack against your opponent. - By [Lunarcat7]
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