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08-15-2014, 12:11 PM

Nephele v Galahad for Spar



Round 1
Nephele:

9 for clarity- Mostly clear!

6 for powerplaying. [-2] you assumed she was successful with closing the distance. [-2] 'it would be hard for him to see down there' thats for him to decide and not you.

10 for defenses. +1 for each seen

7 for attack. +2 for barge +2 doe trying to unbalance him +3 for attempting to bite

10 for injuries.First round

Round one Nephele Total: 42/50


Galahad:

3 for clarity- [-3] how did she hit the shoulder? the size difference would make it fairly hard to do so. [-2] ' to face her a bit more directly,' how directly? [-2] how did he attempt to slam into her? With a shoulder, chest, side?

6 for powerplaying.[-2] 'to face her a bit more directly,' you need an attempt here to. [-2] when he grabbed the scruff, it seemed like you assumed it was successful as you put ' and then release of his hold.'

10 for defenses. +1 for each seen

6 for attack. +3 for biting scruff + 2 for barge +1 for trying to worsen scruff be pulling upwards

10 for injuries.First round

Round one Galahad Total: 35/50

Round 2

NEphele:

8 for clarity- '[-2] where abouts did she ram his throat' in the centre, more to the left etc.

7 for powerplaying. [-3] refrain from telling us on what would happen if the land was successful, thats for the opponent to decide.

10 for defenses. +1 for each seen

6 for attack. +2 for attempting to hit neck +1 for vital area. +3 for trying to bite on the sensetive part of leg.

5 for injuries. [-2] for bruising [-3] for bite to scruff

Round two Nephele Total: 36/50


Galahad:

8 for clarity- [-2] where abouts on the right hip did he try to bite, the hips are a rather big area.

6 for powerplaying. [-2] there was to much movement with head throughout. [-2] you need an attempt when he scrambles back.

10 for defenses. +1 for each seen

10 for attack. +3 for toe slam, +3 for bite +3 for body slam downwards +1 as this can crush the opponent and limit movement.

4 for injuries. -3 for bite -3 for barge to neck [delicate area]

Round two Galahad Total: 38/50


Round 3
Nephele:

8 for clarity- [-2] i dont see how she can ram his right and bite it withought a lot of struggle with his weight

7 for powerplaying. [-3] she should of struggled a lot more under him, the weight would be very heavy.

10 for defenses. +1 for each seen

5 for attack. +2 for barge +3 for bite

4 for injuries. -3 for bite - 3 for break in toes

Round three Nephele Total: 34/50


Galahad:

8 for clarity- [-2] where abouts on the shoulder did he try to grab

6 for powerplaying. [-2] you need an attempt when kicking forward. [-2] 'he would throw his jaws at the left side of her body' you need an attempt here

10 for defenses. +1 for each seen

6 for attack. +3 for attempted bite +3 for attempted stomp

5 for injuries. -3 for bites -2 for bruising due to the barge

Round three Galahad Total: 35/50





Totals:


Nephele: 112/150

Galahad: 108/150



And the winner is...


Nephele! Galahad must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:


Nephele- theres no need all would have healed due to delay.


Galahad- same here


Notes:



Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes

For Canttina
Defenses where strong, you have improved a lot lately, congrats!

For Keno
Same to you really, you did very well and you've improved so much. just watch for clarity, but i have really nothing more to say



- By [luisiana]