I'm all about that bass

The Judge · 09-11-2014, 05:27 PM

Default to SCORPION

Due to Ballad not posting in the allotted time, Scorpion is the winner, and Ballad now belongs to Scorpion.

Ballad must give up by either passing out, submitting, or running away.

On a side note, I will post again once I get the feedback done.

SCORPION V BALLAD for CLAIMING

Round 1

SCORPION:

9 for clarity. ?He?d aim his pointed shoulder towards her lower thigh...? What leg is he trying to bite? -1

10 for powerplaying. none seen

9 for defences. hackles raised +1, shoulders rolled +1, lips snarling +1, chin tucked +1, toes splayed +1, claws digging into the earth +1, tail aligned with spine +1, weight evenly distributed +1, ears pulled back +1, stomach tightened -1 (all muscles should be tightened, this doesn't aid much in attack or defence.)

6 for attack. +2 for bruising to the thigh, more points for severity, +3 for bite to lower spine, more points for severity, +1 for ankle grab, points lost for not balancing for tri-pod stance

10 for injuries.First round

Round one SCORPION Total: 45/50

BALLAD:

8 for clarity. ?her brother's fangs sinking into her left shoulder? He aimed his teeth at her lower spine, not her shoulder. -1 ?oping to sink her fangs into the flesh, any flesh? Where is she trying to bite? She simply can't flail her teeth about. -1

5 for powerplaying. ?Pulling herself away from Scorpion...? This needs to be attempted, because he tried to bite her and did not say if he let her go or not. -1 No mention of his attacks to her spine or his ankle grab, or the bruising to the shoulder. All attacks were not mentioned, nor was the severity of the attacks -4

6 for defences. hackles raised +1, eyes narrowed +1, ears pulled back +1, tail tucked +1, chin tucked +1, weight evenly distributed +1,

1 for attack. +1 for bite, lower points because no specific area was tried to be bitten.

10 for injuries. Moderate bruise to her left back leg (determined by judge) -2, major puncture wounds on the base of her spine (determined by judge) -3 , minor bruising to right back ankle -1 (determined by judge)

Round one BALLAD Total: 30/50

Round 2

SCORPION:

10 for clarity- All clear

10 for powerplaying. None seen

7 for defences. eyes narrowed +1, tail aligned with spine +1, weight evenly distributed, +1, claws dug into earth +1, toes splayed +1, shoulders rolled +1, chin tucked +1

2 for attack. bite to the scruff +1, pushing on her shoulders +1, lost points for not adjusting balance.

9 for injuries. small puncture wounds on shoulder -1

Round two SCORPION Total: 38/50

BALLAD:

for clarity-

for powerplaying.

for defences.

for attack.

for injuries.

Round two BALLAD Total: /50

Totals:

SCORPION: 83/100

BALLAD: 30/100

And the winner is...

Fight was already defaulted to Scorpion, this is just for feed-back

Damage:

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Notes:

Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes

For Kat - Good attacks, all diverse and well rounded. Just watch to make sure your attacks are specified and not vague, including what legs you are trying to attack. And defence, its the easy points for the fight and getting 10 out of 10 in every post should not be hard. Careful to adjust your balance whenever you are raising one paw, you will lose points for that.

For Croatoan - I can edit some in if you want to hear.

- By [Evelyn]

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I'm all about that bass

The Judge