Blow Me Away [MAIM]
09-20-2014, 05:44 PM
Lyonovei v Anzhelika for Maim Round 1
Lyonovei: -2 where on the shoulder is she aiming for? front? side?4 for clarity- -2 what angle is he in relation to her, you say he's off to his own right but is he launching straight on or at an angle? -2 how is he applying his weight to her? With what part of his body? -2 where is he aiming to push his weight into her to try and knock the breath from her lungs? I imagine it has to be more than just a jaw attack to the shoulder 10 for powerplaying. none seen 7 for defenses. +1 for each seen 3 for attack.+2 jaw attack (-1 for clarity) +1 weight throw (-2 for clarity) 10 for injuries. First Round Round one Total: 34/50 Anzhelika: 0 for clarity--3 how does a tight chest lessen injury from a shoulder? How does a fang attack result only a bruise? I'm not quite sure how the attack landed that such results were achieved. -2 what angle is she approaching him at? how are they positioned? -3 what part of her chest is she knocking into him? The upper? the whole chest? as he's taller how is she raising herself to accomplish this? -2 where on his shoulders is she aiming to latch onto? 3 for powerplaying. -2 you need an attempt here "she would lunge herself at him, protruding herself into his body with all of her force to his body" -5 definitely need an attempt phrase here, this is a major power play and a major no no " anzhelika lashing her head around as her jaws clamped onto his flesh," whether the attack succeeds and the amount of damage is up to your opponent not to you. 10 for defenses.+1 for each seen 1 for attack.+1 jaw attack (-2 for clarity and pp issues) 10 for injuries. first round Round one Total: 24/50 Round 2
Lyonovei: 0 for clarity--2 which way and how did he move that her chest attack missed? "He had passed her by scant inches, she was only an instant late to make her target" -2 how did he move when he reared up and away? "would rear upwards and away from the remainder of her momentum" away where? how? -2 what damage was done by Anz's jaw attack? -2 how is he positioned in relation to her? what angle? (I know I asked you on this but I was really struggling to tell if he was on his back legs over her or on four and approaching from the side) -2 what part of his body is he trying to slam into her? His chest? His paws? I wasn't sure what you meant by "straight outward" -3 you must pick a target when attacking "His jaws snapped, just waiting to latch onto any part of her that might get too close" 6 for powerplaying.-1 you mention he tasted blood but Anz stated only bruising was done. Confusing I know since it was a fang attack but you have to run with it. -3 I didn't see any mention of Anz's jaw attack in your post, you need to respond to all your opponents attacks 4 for defenses.+1 for each seen -2 you also need to shift your center of gravity to the rear legs when rearing up, the tail alone probably isn't enough. 2 for attack.+2 throwing weight into her (-1 clarity issue) +0 claw attack (wolf claws really aren't sharp enough to do any sort of damage in the area you're aiming where the skin and fur is thicking. Eyes, nose, those types of areas are really the only places where a claw attack would do any good. 8 for injuries -2 moderate bruising to shoulder Round two Total: 20/50 Anzhelika: 0 for clarity--3 How did she move so that she got out from under him? which way? -2 what angle is she approaching him at when she attacks? -2 where on his shoulder is she aiming? -2 which paw is aiming to land where? "dig into the male's right shoulder and right side of his scruff" Or are you attacking with both? -2 Front or back claws? I can't assume so be as specific as you can. 7 for powerplaying. -2 "and pounce onto him" you need to attempt that -1 it's a minor one but the "if then" statements are usually a minor power play. The ripping of the ear depends entirely on the attack succeeding. 5 for defenses. +1 for each seen -3 you need to compensate for your balance when your wolf rear's up 3 for attack.+0 claw attack (again unless it's to like the eyes or the nose a wolf's claws aren't really sharp enough to sufficient damage through fur and into flesh) +2 jaw attack (-1 for clarity +1 for maim attempt) 6 for injuries.-2 severe bruising -1 minor lacerations, and neck strain Round two Total: 21/50 Round 3
Lyonovei: 2 for clarity--2 how far does he pivot? what angle is he at compared to her now? -2 i'm a bit confused as to which attack landed where? something grazed his flank then the other hit his shoulder blade to midsection? -2 how is he moving to get at her tail? is he twisting his head to the side, arcing his body around? -2 where on her tail is he aiming for? 10 for powerplaying.none seen 8 for defenses.+1 for each seen 3 for attack. +3 for jaw attack (-1 for clarity but +1 for maim attempt) 7 for injuries -3 for lacerations Round Three Total: 30/50 Anzhelika: 6 for clarity--2 how much damage was done by his jaws? -2 front or back paws? I know this is soooo annoying but again as a judge I'm not supposed to assume. 8 for powerplaying.-2 as Lyo has a hold on her tail she needs to attempt to whirl around to get at him 6 for defenses. +1 for each seen -3 you need to adjust for balance when you rear up 1 for attack.+1 paw attack (again wolves don't attack with their claws for a reason they aren't sharp enough to do significant damage) 7 for injuries. -3 grip possible break to tail as that was Lyo's intent Round Three Total: 28/50 Totals:
Lyonovei: 84/150 Anzhelika: 73/150 And the winner is...
Lyonovei! Anzhelika must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Bruising and minor lacerations will take a few ooc days to heal. Moderate wounds and lacerations will take an ooc week to heal. The maim to Anzhelika's tail will be permanent. *to clarify Anzhelika's tail is now docked, Lyo can perform the full maim in his next post as I understand it. Notes:
blargh I hate this part, my notes are pretty much up above. If I have one thing I want both of you to take away it is ANGLES. I got really quite lost throughout this fight b/c I wasn't sure where your chars were in relation to each other. - By [Lunarcat7]
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