I'LL LOAD THE GUN, YOU PLACE THE BETS
09-27-2014, 12:30 PM
Artemis v Novocaine for Maim Round 1
Novocaine: 0 for clarity- -2 what angle is he approaching her at? -2 what part of his chest is he trying to collide with hers -2 where on Artemis' chest does he intend the blow to land? -2 where is he aiming with his paw sweep? is he trying to catch her paws? her wrists? maybe the middle of the foreleg? -2 what is he hoping to accomplish with the chest slam? bruising? knock the air from her? push her back? Make sure to specify your force and intent or your opponent may go for the least amount of damage or result. 8 for powerplaying. -2 you need to attempt to close the distance between them 4 for defenses. +1 for each seen -3 not readjusting balance when lifting right forepaw 3 for attack. +1 chest slam (points lost for clarity) +2 paw sweep (point lost for clarity) 10 for injuries. none, first round Round one Total: 25/50 Artemis: 10 for clarity-clear- 10 for powerplaying. none seen 10 for defenses.+1 for each seen 8 for attack. +2 shoulder slam (+1 maim attempt), +3 bite (+1 maim attempt) +2 paw sweep + 1 maim attempt -2 for realism (I don't find it realistic that she could see and pin his sweeping paw, considering how her head is currently angled and that she's already involved in a lot of movement. 10 for injuries.none first round Round one Total: 48/50 Round 2
Novocaine: 3 for clarity--2 how much damage was done by Artemis' shoulder throw. Will it leave bruising? did something strain? did she succeed in dislocation? -2 how is Novo moving his head to get at Art's throat? is it tilting to the left? the right? where will his upper and lower jaw hope to land? -2 what angle is his head approaching Art from? -1 what does he hope to acheive with this attack? tear flesh? crush her windpipe? strangle her? (note I see it in the notes below but we need it in the actual post too) 6 for powerplaying.-2 you need to address Art's attack on his paw. Again judges can't assume even though it's pretty obvious he stopped the paw swipe to stabilize himself so her paw would hit nothing. Even so you much make note of this in your post. -2 you need to attempt this "With a growl the male risked further damage to jut his gaping maw upwards and to his left, fangs seeking the soft flesh of her throat." 10 for defenses.+1 each seen 3 for attack.+2 for jaw attack (-1 clarity issue) +1 aiming for vital 3 for injuries.-3 severe blow to shoulder joint -1 dislocation, -3 moderate severe mauling to face Round two Total: 25/50 Artemis: 8 for clarity--2 sorry but I can't visualize this, I don't know quite what you mean "towards the middle portion of her right-sided neck { and along the actual side portion of her neck }" do you mean smack dab in the middle? like equidistant between head and shoulders and equidistant between ventral and dorsal? 10 for powerplaying.none seen 10 for defenses. +1 each seen 7 for attack.+3 bite (+1 vital) +3 paw swipe 7 for injuries.-1 moderate bruising to shoulder -2 moderate puncture wounds to neck Round two Total: 42/50 Totals:
Novocaine: 50/100 Artemis:90/100 And the winner is...
Artemis! Novocaine must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Novocaine - Dislocated shoulder will need to be tended to quickly to avoid complications, should heal within a few ooc days [really feels immediately better once they pop it back in place, I speak from experience xD] Facial wounds will take an ooc week to heal. Damage to right eye will result in permanent blinding in that eye. Artemis - bruising will clear up in a few ooc days. Punctures to neck will take 5 ooc days to heal. Notes:
For Novocaine Don't get discouraged! You have a huge amount of potential. Your writing style is very clear, straightforward and easy to read. Just be sure to list all your defenses, and work on the technical clarity portion of your fight posts. Do that and I think you'll approve in leaps and bounds. For Artemis Great job! Nothing of note. - By [Lunarcat7]
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