Round 1
CATALEYA:
10 for clarity: All clear
10 for powerplaying. None seen
10 for defences. eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, head aligned with spine, chin tucked, neck scrunched, shoulders rolled, legs spread, legs bent, toes spread.
5 for attack. Shoulder slam to chest +1, bite to side of neck +3, paw swipe +1
10 for injuries.First round
Round one CATALEYA Total: 45/50
AERNDIS:
for clarity: All clear
for powerplaying. None seen
10 for defences. eyes narrowed, ears pinned, head aligned with spine, chin tucked, shoulders rolled, neck scrunched, hackles raised, tail aligned with spine, legs spread, legs bent.
6 for attack. paw slam +1, bite to throat + grip attempt +4, shoulder slam +1
for injuries. First round. Minor bruise of front right left shoulder, moderate bite to left cheek,
Round one AERNDIS Total: 46/50
Round 2
CATALEYA:
7 for clarity: “seeking to land across her opponents shoulders,” Where on the shoulder? Is she trying to drape it across her shoulders and over her back, or is she simply resting her paw on her shoulder blade? -2 “The wounds could potentially tear more with her attempt to rear up.” She had attempted to rear upwards before this was stated, so it doesn't make sense to have it tear if she was already on her hind legs. -1
8 for powerplaying. “weighting shifting fractionally more to her left so that she may drive her full weight into the womans left shoulder and force her to hold her own hefty weight.” Must be attempted. It sounds like you are forcing Aern to accept holding all of Cat's weight. (ps I told you she was a fat ass) -2
10 for defences. eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, head aligned with spine, chin tucked, neck scrunched, shoulders rolled, toes spread, claws dug into earth, tail aligned with spine.
4 for attack. Bite to base of head +3, paw slap thingy +1, weight pushing +0 (no points due to pp issues.)
6 for injuries. Minor bruise on left shoulder -1, moderate bite -2, minor bruise to lower left of chest -1
Round two CAYALEYA Total: 35/50
AERNDIS:
10 for clarity: All clear
10 for powerplaying. None seen
10 for defences. eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, head aligned with spine, tail aligned with spine, chin tucked, shoulders rolled, neck scrunched, legs spread, weight spread.
5 for attack. head shake + severity(maim points) +4, shove +1
7 for injuries. Minor bruise to top of right shoulder -1, minor wound to scruff (further damage pending) -1, minor bruise to front of chest -1
Round two AERNDIS Total: 42/50
Totals:
CATALEYA: 80/100
AERNDIS: 88/100
And the winner is...
Aerndis! Cataleya must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
CATALEYA: Minor bruise on left shoulder will take 3 OOC days to heal, moderate bite to side of neck will take 1 OOC week to heal and may scar, minor bruise to lower left of chest will take 3 OOC days to heal, pending damage to chest.
AERNDIS: Minor bruise of front right left shoulder will take 3 OOC days to heal, moderate bite to left cheek will take 1 OOC week to heal and may scar, minor bruise to top of right shoulder will take 3 OOC days to heal, minor wound to scruff (further damage pending) will take 1 OOC week to heal, if made worse may take up to 2 OOC weeks to heal and may scar, minor bruise to front of chest (pending further damage on chest slam) will take 3 OOC days to heal, 1 OOC week if made worse.
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For SAFFIEYour first post was really good, but your second post was a bit shaky. Just watch to make sure you are being clear in what order the attacks happen and fall on your character. Also, Cata will always be a fat ass. xD
For LUNAR Really good fight, solid attacks. Really good on your attack positions and all that jazz.
- By [Evelyn]
