You mentioned Tinaro pivoted to the right when approaching Einarr, but pivoting requires rotation of the body which didn’t seem to be what you were describing later on.
9 for powerplaying.
I think it was more of a wording thing, but you said “he would pull the foreleg to Einarr's left in a quick and fierce yank in an attempt to pull or strain the muscle and limit his opponent's usage of it” which didn’t include any form of attempting, trying, hoping, etc.
10 for defenses.
7 for attack.
+2 attempt to drive chest into shoulder, +3 bite to foreleg, +2 pulling the foreleg
10 for injuries.
First round.
Tinaro's round one total: 45/50
Einarr: 7 for clarity:
You mentioned that Einarr moved by snapping his jaws downward and thus missed Tinaro from pulling his limb too far, but that doesn’t seem to add up. You also didn’t mention how bad Tinaro’s bite was to Einarr’s foreleg.
10 for powerplaying.
10 for defenses.
3 for attack.
+3 attempting to grab/hold Tinaro’s scruff
10 for injuries.
First round.
Einarr’s round one total: 40/50
ROUND TWO
Tinaro: 9 for clarity:
Need more info on how bad the bite is to his scruff.
8 for powerplaying.
I find it hard to believe that he could push his neck upward to slam Einarr’s chin and simultaneously bite Einarr’s chest. That seems like a lot of head/neck movement for one post.
10 for defenses.
5 for attack.
+1 attempt to claw Einarr’s underside, +2 attempt to slam his neck into Einarr’s chin, +2 attempts to bite Einarr’s lower chest
8 for injuries.
-2 moderate lacerations to scruff
Tinaro’s round two total: 40/50
Einarr: 9 for clarity:
Side stepping refers to stepping to the side without rotating, this is a wording issue that was slightly confusing to imagine.
10 for powerplaying.
10 for defenses.
4 for attack.
+3 shaking Tinaro’s scruff, +1 paw slam
9 for injuries.
-1 bruising to chin
Einarr’s round two total: 42/50
Totals:
Tinaro: 85/100 Einarr: 82/100
And the winner is...
Tinaro! Einarr must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
Tinaro:
Moderate lacerations to scruff, will heal in 1 OOC week.
Einarr:
Moderate bruising to chin, will heal in 1 OOC week.
Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
For Millie: see below
For Keno: see below
For both: Really all of my notes are for both of you, so I’m writing them here. You guys had a good fight, it was easy to read save for a few minor issues. Most of your loss of points came from attacks that weren’t complex enough or serious enough. Really elaborate and think outside of the box when it comes to attacks. Also, watch your wording because it can be tricky when you write one thing and really mean another.
