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09-03-2014, 01:41 PM
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The Destruction was feeling better now, her paw no longer bothering her. As soon as she had gotten better, or a few days after, she had set out. She would explore, unless she found Scorpion and the others, then she would stay with them as long as she could. The white female limped along, until she smelt Scorpion, and a few strange wolves. What was this? There was even one that didn't smell like a wolf. What was it? With a tilt of her head, Ballad narrowed her hazel eyes, her voice a soft growl. "A cat that will grow to be bigger than you? Do you have a death wish, brother?" Rage and fear burned in her stomach, and the ivory female lifted one lip. She would tell her brother exactly what she thought about this.

Ballad sat down heavily, closing her hazel eyes, and lifting her crown in a long howl, cutting it off with a snap. With that, the female struggled to her paws and paced around angrily, low growls escaping her as she waited for her brother to come. She leaves to see if a pack will take them, so she could possibly recruit them, and Scorpion adopts a tiger? The thought made the girl growl again, and she finally stood still, her fur bristling.
"Speech"




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09-03-2014, 03:31 PM


maybe i want to do what bunnies do



Scorpion would stifle a yawn as he came into consciousness, his tiger cub was nestled close as the heat of the day passed over head. He?d smirk proudly at the still small cub, he was gaining weight and gaining confidence slowly. He followed him everywhere, just as he wanted. Little Viru would be a powerful ally someday, the rate of growth within the cat had been astounding. Clearly he?d made the right decision. He?d laze about within his underground cave, his attention becoming focused with the clear note of summoning that had obviously come from his sister. He?d tilt his head curiously, he?d lost Ballad?s trail long ago, but not after finding a pool of her blood. He?d been concerned, but obviously she was alive.
He?d try to escape from the den without disturbing any of the residents, his tall form rising out of the ground gracefully. His long limbs would carry him in the direction of his crippled sister, her smaller form coming into view easily. Her fur was all in a heap as he approached, his features would reflect a slight curiosity as he stopped before her. "What?s got your panties in a bunch?" he?d growl roughly with his words as his eyes narrowed to look her over.

"Speech"



with you if you know what i mean





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09-03-2014, 04:20 PM
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Her brother's scent would fill the air, and Ballad glared in his direction, her lips twitching in a snarl. "What?s got your panties in a bunch?" At those words, Ballad moved closer to him, her hazel eyes filled with fury. "You! You're what's making me so mad! I leave to see if there's any packs that would take us in, and you get a cub! A tiger cub! What if you offend it as it grows up! it'll take your head off! You don't even visit me when I was half dead, but you get a fucking tiger cub! When you get your face ripped off, don't come crying to me, Scorpion. I warned you. Still, a tiger cub? A wolf pup would have been fine, I mean...You must have a death wish! You might think it's an ally, but if it ever wants to turn against you, it'll kill all of you! You don't even ask how I'm doing, or if any sudden movements hurt my paw. Well, brother, I have exactly what made me so mad looking right at me."

The ivory female backed away, her chest heaving in ragged breaths as she glared at her brother. "You know, I was going to live with you. But because of your stupidity, I will not." Ballad was calming down, but she still shook with rage. Then it came back, and the female glared at him. "You can get mad at me, for all I care. I was just telling you what I really thought about your idea. Goodbye, Scorpion."

And with that, she would attempt to walk away, but the sudden movement hurt her leg and she bit back a yelp, not turning to her brother.

"Speech"




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09-03-2014, 04:55 PM



Immediately Ballad would snarl furiously at him and without a second thought Scorpion?s hackles would raise defensively. He?d narrow his eyes as she began aggressively, something in her had changed, and it wasn?t just that now instead of having a deformed foot she only possessed a stump. She?d spit venomously at him about Virtu, the tall male would feel himself grow impatient with her quickly. Virtu was his, and she had no right to speak of him in such ways. He?d saved the tiny cub, he was his son. She would finish her rant and back away from him, obviously giving more bark than bite. He?d roll his shoulders protectively over his neck and would growl deeply, his lips pulling away from his brilliant canines as he snapped at her, "What do you think you?re my mother?"
She would speak again, telling him that she had originally intended on staying with him, but after the display she?d given him he wasn?t so sure he was ready to let her go. He had taken their father?s place as the head of the family, she would listen to him and not the other way around. "I don?t know that I?m ready to say goodbye sister..."She would rage one more before turning away, he?d notice her attempt to cover the stumble. With the weakness shown he would take that opportunity to pounce.
Scorpion?s chin would tuck as he felt his toes splay and claws dig into the ground. He?d align his tail with his spin as his weight would distribute evenly over his four paws. He?d attempt to jump at his crippled sister, wanting to approach her right hip. He?d aim his pointed shoulder towards her lower thigh, wanting to massively bruise the muscle and incapacitate her leg. His jaws would open menacingly and aim for her lower spine, wanting to sink his fangs deeply into her flesh on either side of the bone. His ears would be laid back against his skull while his stomach tightened and flexed. As a last measurement of need, he would aim to grasp her right lower hind ankle with his left wrist. He?d wish to pull the limb from under her and cause her to become completely unbalanced.
Scorpion v. Ballad for Claiming round one of (one, two?)

"Speech"





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09-04-2014, 01:48 PM
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The girl's hackles rose as well, narrowing her hazel eyes so that he could not get any blinding scars on the female, knowing her brother all too well. She would flatten her ears to her skull, tucking her tail in between her legs, but not in submission, her chin tucking slightly as she distributed her weight. She watched as he crept towards her right, and, with a low growl, the girl attempted to bite him. But, regardless of that, pain went through her, and the ivory female stumbled. She whipped around, her brother's fangs sinking into her left shoulder, pain and blood coming from her. Ballad was shocked, because her oldest brother had never hurt her before; the ivory female tried to limp away, but she fell, because of her brother. She glared up at him, her hazel eyes gleaming with tears as she spoke, her voice harsh. "You're like father, you know that? I hoped that none of my family be like him. I guess that wasn't enough."

Pulling herself away from Scorpion, she rose slowly to her paws, balancing the best she could. She was getting used to it, but she could still be pretty unbalanced. She lunged at her brother, hoping to sink her fangs into the flesh, any flesh, although she probably wouldn't win. She had never fought, and her brother probably had experience.

BALLAD VS. SCORPION for CLAIMING Round 1 of 2

Attacks: Attempting to bite Scorpion anywhere she can get a hold on.

Injuries: Inch deep puncture marks on left shoulder, bruised right leg

Defenses: Tucked ears, narrowed eyes, tail between legs, and weight even on all four paws.
"Speech"




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09-04-2014, 02:24 PM
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Wow, what a conversation! This lady looked a lot like his brother Revenge. Maybe they were siblings! But she was so much older than his mommy's gang. Maybe she was another one of daddy's siblings. He had a lot of those. She was really mad, like pissed off badly about something; she was talking about him. She had smelled him! Oh no! The striped child stared quietly up at a tree, slithering from his dad's legs and gripping the bark with unsheathed sharp claws. He had sharpened them himself on a rock, which made his dad pretty proud that he was ready to train and become a good fighting machine. He needed to be able to fend for himself when he was older, right? He would worm up the tree and poise himself on a branch, trying not to make too many creaking noises that the white lady wouldn't hear. Big black ears flicked fervently, awaiting the continuation of the conversation he had missed, but it was already getting to the fighting part. Oooooooo! Daddy was gonna fight and claim somebody! The ways of the outside world was so cool, and it filled him with glee.

Big multi-colored orbs took in the action, watching the two begin their battle. His jaws parted in delight, expecting his daddy to own this girl, and it looked like he could! The girl didn't seem to know how to fight, and she was a victim of his daddy, who was the best wolf ever! He'd always side with his daddy, but he wanted his daddy to show this lady who he was; he didn't want to interfere, and he feared for the worse if he did, because his daddy would be worried sick about striped child being hurt by fighting a random wolf for the first time in his life. At the sight of his dad's teeth, he almost gave a tiny squeal of delight, simulating a clapping motion with his forepaws, whilst gripping the branch he laid upon in a death grip. "Look at the size of daddy's teeth! Go daddy go!" As his delightful chatter would end, he would place his paws back down and rest his head upon them, elongated tail swinging about two feet from the branch's underside, dangling clearly like a vine; a orange and black striped one.



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09-04-2014, 02:51 PM



His form would quickly draw upon Ballad, she would turn her jaws grasping for his flesh. His shoulder would slam into her, causing her form to stumble forward protecting him from the impending bite. As she whipped herself around his jaws would come into contact with her shoulder, blood would fill his mouth as the flesh tore open. He?d release her and the girl would stumble forward, his paw causing her to trip and stare up at him. His jaws would part once more as he glared at her through narrowed eyes. His breath would release as he tightened his stomach once more, his tail re-aligning with his spine as he balanced himself on his four paws. As she spoke his claws would dig into the earth from his splayed toes. He?d roll his shoulders and tuck his chin as he watched her rise from the earth weakly. She?d cry about him being like their father, unfortunately for her he thought it a compliment. Adrenaline was an impressive man, a fine example of the Destruction line. Though Scorpion had not always agreed with him he?d never think being called similar an insult. She?d again try to bite him, and he?d let her. With his weight braced her jaws would curl around his left mid-shoulder. He could feel her rage carving into his skin, her teeth drawing a bit of blood and creating smaller puncture wounds. He?d cackle as he aimed to take hold of the middle of her scruff with his parted jaws. He?d also try to bring his forelegs over her shoulders. The left at the base of her neck and the right on her spine. He?d want to push his weight onto her and force her to the ground.

Scorpion v. Ballad for Claiming round two of two

"Speech"




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09-11-2014, 05:27 PM
Default to SCORPION

Due to Ballad not posting in the allotted time, Scorpion is the winner, and Ballad now belongs to Scorpion.

Ballad must give up by either passing out, submitting, or running away.

On a side note, I will post again once I get the feedback done.



SCORPION V BALLAD for CLAIMING



Round 1
SCORPION:

9 for clarity. ?He?d aim his pointed shoulder towards her lower thigh...? What leg is he trying to bite? -1

10 for powerplaying. none seen

9 for defences. hackles raised +1, shoulders rolled +1, lips snarling +1, chin tucked +1, toes splayed +1, claws digging into the earth +1, tail aligned with spine +1, weight evenly distributed +1, ears pulled back +1, stomach tightened -1 (all muscles should be tightened, this doesn't aid much in attack or defence.)

6 for attack. +2 for bruising to the thigh, more points for severity, +3 for bite to lower spine, more points for severity, +1 for ankle grab, points lost for not balancing for tri-pod stance

10 for injuries.First round

Round one SCORPION Total: 45/50

BALLAD:

8 for clarity. ?her brother's fangs sinking into her left shoulder? He aimed his teeth at her lower spine, not her shoulder. -1 ?oping to sink her fangs into the flesh, any flesh? Where is she trying to bite? She simply can't flail her teeth about. -1

5 for powerplaying. ?Pulling herself away from Scorpion...? This needs to be attempted, because he tried to bite her and did not say if he let her go or not. -1 No mention of his attacks to her spine or his ankle grab, or the bruising to the shoulder. All attacks were not mentioned, nor was the severity of the attacks -4

6 for defences. hackles raised +1, eyes narrowed +1, ears pulled back +1, tail tucked +1, chin tucked +1, weight evenly distributed +1,

1 for attack. +1 for bite, lower points because no specific area was tried to be bitten.

10 for injuries. Moderate bruise to her left back leg (determined by judge) -2, major puncture wounds on the base of her spine (determined by judge) -3 , minor bruising to right back ankle -1 (determined by judge)

Round one BALLAD Total: 30/50


Round 2

SCORPION:

10 for clarity- All clear

10 for powerplaying. None seen

7 for defences. eyes narrowed +1, tail aligned with spine +1, weight evenly distributed, +1, claws dug into earth +1, toes splayed +1, shoulders rolled +1, chin tucked +1

2 for attack. bite to the scruff +1, pushing on her shoulders +1, lost points for not adjusting balance.

9 for injuries. small puncture wounds on shoulder -1

Round two SCORPION Total: 38/50


BALLAD:

for clarity-

for powerplaying.

for defences.

for attack.

for injuries.

Round two BALLAD Total: /50

Totals:


SCORPION: 83/100

BALLAD: 30/100



And the winner is...


Fight was already defaulted to Scorpion, this is just for feed-back

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Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes

For Kat - Good attacks, all diverse and well rounded. Just watch to make sure your attacks are specified and not vague, including what legs you are trying to attack. And defence, its the easy points for the fight and getting 10 out of 10 in every post should not be hard. Careful to adjust your balance whenever you are raising one paw, you will lose points for that.


For Croatoan - I can edit some in if you want to hear.

- By [Evelyn]