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09-12-2013, 08:35 PM




Determination would seep from her pores, skull bobbing with the impatience of her gurgling blood; dainty paws would shift continuously beneath her, weight changing as she grew anxious. So thirsty she was for a fight, so hungry to fulfil her desires to be the best; and well, practise makes perfect? Tail would whisk behind her, jaws parting to emit a call for one of Glaciems assailants. She had heard of two males, and she didn?t want this to be a baby spar. No, she wanted real muscle and skill to go against. She would prove to her father that she was worth her rank.




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He felt that rumble in his bones, that constant urge pressing against the back of his skull. That feeling that his father had keenly, and ever so delicately moved to hatch into a killer. There was a call though, one that he could have been waiting forever for. The dark male made his way across the land in a favorably fashion. There presented in front of him was a female, and heir and kin to the king Isar. How wonderful, his teeth pulled back in what seemed to be a sheepish smile. He wasn't rather lustful, as he was happy to back up muscle on him. A healthy spar among members was a wonderful thing he had yet to experience.
"You called, mistress?" Oddity said in a gentleman like tone. The scar across his chest and shoulder ached. He had no problem fighting with a woman, after all, he was sure Isar would want to see how his children did. Just by her scent, and word got around quickly. Though he was to comply to females wishes, after all that was Glaciem who served under the dark angel isar.





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09-12-2013, 08:54 PM




The ebony would arrive, respectful though still apparently confident. The way he addressed her were to be somewhat unexpected, it seemed she was still not used to her higher rank. Though it would grow on her proudly, for the way he spoke would already be enough to tickle her ego just that little bit. The strangely marked youth would square as he stood before her, evenly distributing her weight on all limbs, skull dropping as an invitation whilst her ears would pin, ?I want you to hit me,? a low growl would escape her lips, focus presented within her gaze as the barely mature girl would raise her tail, ?And yes, that?s an order.? Why not take advantage of his compliance then, hm?

Satis vs Oddity - Round 0 of 4

For Practise!


Defenses:

Attacks:

Injuries:




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09-12-2013, 09:16 PM





Oddity wasn't really conflicted, he was rather happy that she had actually wanted a fight. After all, he hadn't been able to attack anything but prey as of late. He was equally balanced, tail up, legs spread his ears pinned against his skull and head down to protect his throat. All the vital things in order for him to make the perfect attack. It was an order, he couldn't disobey it, so his king wouldn't be mad. The excitement rushed through him as he felt a built up he charged forward full force. Remembering this wasn't to kill her. Aiming for her right foreleg in a position where he could possibly throw her weight to automatically get the upper hand.
His head was twisted to the side with his jaws firmly open and paws spread for the balance on the impact. Fighting was about quick choices, not about what came next or after, spur of the moment as Oddity was throwing his weight to try and make this a good attack. Even if he did miss, he wouldn't be upset, his muscles contracted as the effort was made. Bi colored orbs ready for a good earned fight.

Attack:; Oddity has gone for a low blow, tilting his head slightly to the side with jaws parted to try and get a hold on her right front leg. He wants to grab and try to shove the leg under her causing her to lose balance.

Defence:; Neck scrunched close to body, head down(and sideways slightly) and ears pulled back. Paws forward for balance and tail up.

Injury:; N/A


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Satis vs Oddity - For Practice





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09-12-2013, 09:43 PM (This post was last modified: 09-12-2013, 10:13 PM by Satis.)




He would need no persuading. As quickly as she had requested he would launch, racing for her form as he fed from the thrill that seemed to so pulse his veins. A kick of adrenaline would offer the youth similar, golden eyes narrowing as her mind would slow his approaching form, attempting to pinpoint any weaknesses the fae could potentially counter. Defenses. Weight already evenly distributed, toes splayed, stance square, tail lowered to align with her neutral spine, ears pinned. She was prepared, no? As he grew nearer the girl would attempt to drop her body, to push her small frame low enough to the earth that he would be unable to affect her fore-balance.

Success. Partially. The beast would clash with her lowered shoulder, jaws closing around her right blade as the woman would let free a vicious ripping; voice box shaking as she would howl with displeasure. But she would see an opportunity, skull rotating to her right Satis would part her jaws, aiming rapidly for the mans scruff she would attempt to close her fangs around any loose skin she could grasp, to gain control over his larger form and put her position into preventing further damage. Here, she would drop her weight more so, attempting to keep him at bay until she were able to re-coil; pulling her fangs from her potential target and re-calculating a swift regrasp to the underside of his neck. If she could get close enough, she could hold the ebonies jugular within her molars and prevent circulation to his brain. If she could make him pass out, she could win.


Satis vs Oddity - Round 1 of 4

For Practise!


Defenses: Toes splayed, weight even, stance squared, tail level, aligned spine, eyes narrowed, ears pinned. Satis drops her fore-weight upon Oddity's approach in an attempt to keep her balance earthed as she believes he is going for a low attack.

Attacks: Satis aims to grasp Oddity's scruff as he attacks her shoulder, hoping to prevent him inflicting further damage until she can recalculate. Then, dropping her weight lower than he, she will re-aim to grasp at the underside of his neck, presuming his chin can't be dropped during such an attack, she hopes to grasp the airways or the jugular, wanting only to cut off circulation or breathing long enough to cause him to pass out.

Injuries: Shallow skin wound to the right shoulder



THIS IS A reference sei and i discussed as a rough idea where oddity and satis are, and where satis aims to attack. he would probably be more towards her head since he got her blade, but I suck at drawing xD this change would also have made it easier for her to get his scruff etc.
adited to add above.



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09-12-2013, 10:19 PM





Oddity felt the change happen, the sudden drop as his fangs reached the shoulder. He was already getting pumped up as the same effects became apparent in him. The displeasure cry made him more excited, his paws on the ground as he felt flesh and blood come into his mouth. Though as she was lowered his teeth letting go. As her head and weight came up to his scruff then lowered due to her weight dragging him down. Oddity let out a small painful growl as her teeth drew up flesh. Not entirely on target, but enough to give a nasty sting of pain and wound. As Oddity pulled his shoulders up in a shrug. His eyes moved up to her neck. She was putting him in such a position of being locked and unable to escape either of them for that matter.
His neck scrunched with the pain as he opened his jaws and went for the flesh between her shoulder and neck. Not in a vital spot in order not to kill her. Oddity did not know the meaning of suffocating without death. Trained in the way he was. As he made an effort to push his weight against the front of her. All this on the right side of her body, facing in such a way. He could feel the heat rising within his body. He set his paws deeply into the ground he wanted to get back up so he pressed his weight upward.


Attack:; Oddity is trying to get a hold between her shoulder and neck. The trapezius area where that muscle is. While doing this he is pushing upwards.

Defense:; Oddity is pressing his legs under him in order to keep from being pushed down and being over thrown. Placing his weight against Satis, possibly for more support as well. His ears still pinned back.

Injury:; A tear near his scruff and back of neck area.



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Satis vs Oddity - For practice



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edited to change summary area, witnesses in chat box and yumps.



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09-12-2013, 10:39 PM (This post was last modified: 09-12-2013, 10:40 PM by Satis.)




She must have missed, for suddenly the larger male had retracted from her shoulder, a violent thrust sent towards the area between her neck and shoulder. Her throat would gurgle, voice-box managing no more as the rising determination would seethe her lips. It seemed he would begin to straighten, his weight pulling her slightly upwards, sending the woman snapping misaimed fires towards any ounce of flesh she could reach. What could she do? Was she helpless? No, not yet. She took advantage of his raised position, taking into account her smaller size she would let the imbalance of his pulling roll her onto her left side, an efforted shifting sending her onto her back. Her shoulders would attempt to shuffle beneath her, chin pushing towards her chest as she would keep her vitals guarded, ambitiously she would try to get underneath him; taking a huge risk, though finding no reason as to why it would account for a defeat.

Here, attempting to scoot under his weight and his frame, she now had a clearer access to his throat. Attempting also to withdraw from his grasp, she would feel the ripping of her coat as it was torn from her pores, an angered yelp simmering the chilled atmosphere as the marked beast would recoil. Haunches coiling, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, abdomen tense, tail tucked beneath her legs to guard abdomen and genitalia. Then, she would strike, hoping for a clearer view at his throat, where she would repeat her past attack with higher precision. Hoping to grasp at his vitals just firm enough to waver his consciousness, or make him submit. But that wasn?t all, swiftly she would aim an upper kick at his abdomen, hind limbs reaching ambitiously for his body as she would try to throw the male off balance.


Satis vs Oddity - Round 2 of 4

For Practise!


Defenses: Eyes narrowed, ears pinned, abdomen tense, chin tucked, tail between her legs to guard genitalia and lower abdomen.

Attacks: Presuming her last attack missed, Satis would take advantage of Oddity's climbing position as he attempts to lift his body higher. She uses the uneven weight on her right nape to roll her body underneath him, hopfully breaking free from his grasp, she re-aims a vital attack to his unguarded throat, hoping to hold off air or blood to make him light headed or submit. She then aims an upwards and slightly left-wards kick towards his body, to try and throw him off balance.

Injuries: Skin tear and significant hair loss to the area between the shoulder and neck.



edited to change round number!



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09-12-2013, 11:02 PM





Oddity had put himself in a very bad position, but it was better than doing nothing and giving in. Though now he was in a lose lose situation. He had to take a lesser hit or one that could render him useless. Deep painful growls filled his throat as the side of his neck throbbed from the former would. Being pushed farther up he acted quickly and tucked his chin down. The girls jaws scrapped his face just below the eye. Blood swelling at the tender flesh there as the teeth scraped. Oddity let out a painful groan deep in his throat as he backed up he brought his head forward to slam it against hers. The kick she brought up coming to his attention as he tried to dead weight himself opening his jaws to grab her foot.
Oddity didn't know if this would work or not, mainly it would judge on his weight, but still even then there was no telling if he could recover from it or not. He could grab her leg and pull her down from there, but it was an attack he only thought of from the top of his head. Adrenaline kept from the pain stopping his ability to attack though.

Attack:; Oddity has dropped himself once more in the attempt to stop her kick with his jaws or plain fall on it and attempt to quickly recover. Thus aiming mainly for the leg that has kicked. He's also attempted to try and headbutt her.

Defense:; Tucked his chin down to protect his neck sacrificing part of his face. Tail tucked and body lowered to avoid getting her underneath him. Front legs folding for his falling body weight.

Injuries:; Tear on left side of neck and gash under his eye on his face.


3/4 Satis vs. Oddity - For Practice





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09-12-2013, 11:32 PM




It seemed he would somehow manage to manoeuvre his skull in a way that would send her jaws clashing with his face, frustratingly missing her target yet again. How exactly she didn?t know, but he seemed to be quick enough to counter her. Or was it just luck? Though she saw an open window opportunity, if he?d sacrifice his eye, she?d make sure he really sacrificed his eye. Though with no real desire to permanently maim her fathers assailant, the girl wouldn?t hesitate to take a dirty risk or two. She was after all, a cunning and perilous fighter, as she always had been. Small size didn?t allow for brute force. And so with his crown faced downwards she would restrike for the tenders of his eye, hoping to worsen the small injury she had inflicted or atleast shock him enough to throw him.

Though the downward motion of his skull would clash with her jaws, bashing the marked vixen on the end of her tender snout and sending forth a surprised whine. It hurt, but she wasn?t injured. Honestly? Suddenly the beast had managed to twist himself just enough to hook her hind foot within his jaws. A shrilled bark of pain would flee shuddering orifice, the woman retaliating instantly as she would rock her fore-weight forward just enough to hook his own left forelimb, engaging the duo in an awkward game of twister as she would attempt to tighten around his limb, rotating her skull in a manner to allow only the top of her head exposure to any future attacks. Tail still tucked, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, abdomen tight, chin tucked, the hair along her nape also attempting rise beneath pressure.


Satis vs Oddity - Round 3 of 4

For Practise!


Defenses: Eyes narrowed, ears pinned, abdomen tense, chin tucked, tail between her legs to guard genitalia and lower abdomen, hackles raised.

Attacks: Because Oddity sacrifices his eyes to her previous attack, she siezes the opportunity to reattack at his face/eyes in an attempt to worsen the injury or throw his focus. She then rocks her quarters back, and attempts to lock onto his left forelimb with her jaws and tighten around the bone.

Injuries: Snout bruising, minor cuts to her right hind foot?




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09-12-2013, 11:51 PM





Oddity could feel the heat coming to an end, yet still he wanted to get in his last inches of energy. They both were in an awkward turtle dance as she moved. Oddity pulled his head forward by instinct he didn't want to lose his eye. There could have been scarring on it though with how deep the gashes were getting. Her teeth scrapping against the top half of his eye as he growled opening his jaws wide. Now she was aiming for his leg giving it one last shot the brute pushed himself onto her. His teeth aiming for the top of her head that was exposed to the most of his ability.
Though feeling the teeth on his leg, added to pain as his lips curled. Trying to cause any sort of damage to the top of her head. This awkward dance was probably over though. She was a keen fighter, Oddity could see why Isar was such a good father. Train train and train again as every day things had been put.

Attack:; Oddity has gone for the top of her head and pushed his full weight into the attack.

Defense:; He ducked his body lower to avoid his eye being taken out completely, then rose when she went for his leg to try and aim a final blow to the top of her head.
Injury:; Gashing under and above his left eye tearing on the side of his neck and a left forelimb wound.

4/4 Sartis vs. Oddity - For practice





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09-13-2013, 12:09 AM




He would release as quickly as he had grasped, freeing the womans now tender hind limb. Without a second thought she would again take advantage of the man?s shift, sending several continuous hind thrusts towards the man?s abdomen in yet another attempt to topple him; somewhat oblivious to the aching within her toes. With her jaws clasping his forelimb he should have struggled to keep his balance. Though he wasn?t done, for a rapid attack to the top of her skull would waver the womans focus momentarily. But good, let him have it. Apart from her flattened ears there wasn?t much the dark beast could do, other than cause minor inflictions of grazing pain. So she would make no efforts to counter him, instead rather satisfied and confident within her final attack, shaking her head from left to right violently as she would attempt to cause further pain and injury to the tissue of his left forelimb. Despite the end drawing near as the duo would gradually bring themselves to unlikely positions, the woman would maintain her defences; ears back, eyes narrowed, tail tucked, abdomen tense, hackles raised. She would be happy to finish on that note, confident her rag-doll motions would be enough to arouse finalizing discomfort.


Satis vs Oddity - Round 4 of 4

For Practise!


Defenses: Eyes narrowed, ears pinned, abdomen tense, tail between her legs to guard genitalia and lower abdomen, hackles raised.

Attacks: Oddity releases her hind paw and immediately Satis uses her limbs toa gain send several unbalancing kicks towards his abdomen, hoping to throw himf or the second time. She also shakes her head violently whilst attached to his limb, hoping to inflict further damage.

Injuries: Grazing to the sides of her head




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ODDITY v SATIS for PRACTICE



Round 1
Oddity:

9 for clarity- I got the general moves he was making, but you need to add more to your posts. What direction was he turning (right, left?) which direction was his head angled?


10 for powerplaying- None.

6 for defenses- - Good starting defenses, but they need more explanation. Equally balanced including tail up with legs spread. (this would count as one defense, since both of those are applied to equaling balance). Ears pinned back. Head dipped down to protect throat. There should be at least four to five defenses in every post.


5 for attack- Charging forward, twists head with jaws open, aiming for her right foreleg. Paws(including toes correct? Don't forget to add that!) spread open, prepared to take impact. The attack is good, but once again, more clarification needed. What angle is his head at? Is it toward his right, or toward his left? (her inner, or outer foreleg?) This can all determine how Satis would go about her counter attack. Also, in your attack section, it says he wants "to shove the leg under her causing her to lose balance" in your actual post, you did not explain that. Make sure you do, because the post is what matters! You should also have two attacks in each post, that way if one completely fails, he has something to fall back on.


0 for injuries-First round

Round one Oddity Total: 30/50


Satis:

9 for clarity- Everything was pretty much clear, but when it came to your attack, it was a bit confusing seeing that she might not be able to move fast enough to get his throat, unless she was biting the side of his scruff, as opposed to the direct middle. Exactly what part of the scruff was she going for?

10 for powerplaying- None.

9 for defenses- Eyes narrowed, weight evenly distributed including toes splayed, stance square, and tail aligned with spine. (counted as one defense, since it is all explaining how her balance is distributed) Ears are pinned. Drops body to protect fore-balance. One or two more defenses add would have boosted you up a point.

8 for attack- Tilts head to the right, jaws aiming to grabs Oddity's scruff, attempting to gain control over him. Drops her weight more, attempting to keep him at bay until she were able to release, then she would go for the underside of his neck, or his throat. If she could get close enough, she would pinch his jugular and try to make him pass out. (Attempting to do everything is a must, I just can't see how she could go from his scruff to his throat. What part of his scruff was she going for? Direct middle, or toward the side?) The picture makes sense, but you need to explain it in your post as well. I also did not know she was angled, I assumed they were head on.


0 for injuries-First round

Round one Satis Total: 36/50

Round 2

Oddity:

4 for clarity- The grammar and explanation in your post was off. Make sure you clearly write out your posts, and read them before you post. Rights and lefts also need to be taken into more consideration.

10 for powerplaying- Points taken for ignoring Satis's full attack from injuries.


5 for defenses- Paws set firmly against ground, trying to push his weight against Satis. Ears pinned back. Again you need a few more defenses for a perfect ten. What is his tail doing at this moment? His eyes, are they open or narrowed? His toes, are they splayed? You MUST redo ALL defenses in every post.

6 for attack- While she has his scruff, he released her shoulder, recoils, and goes for the area between her shoulder and neck. Again, you need more than one attack in each round. Jaw movement, and possibly claws, some attempt at blinding, ect.

2 for injuries- Tear near his scruff. He should have taken a lot more damage than this. You did not take into consideration Satis's recoil if her attack were to succeed. What happened then? Is she in the middle of going for his throat as he is moving to get his target? Technically, Satis could have assumed her full attack hit, and pp to get his windpipe since her attack was disregarded. Be careful with this!

Round two Oddity Total: 27/50


Satis:

10 for clarity- Everything was clear.

6 for powerplaying. In your post, you had Satis use his weight to push her over. That was fine, but having her try to scoot beneath him without giving him any time to react was pp. It was a fairly large move with almost no consideration for how Oddity would instantly react. Remember, each move would only last a few seconds or so before the opponent acts against it.


10 for defenses. Chin tucked to protect throat, haunches coiled, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, abdomen tense, tail tucked beneath her legs to guard her abdomen and genitalia. Perfect defenses!

10 for attack. Allows his weight to push her toward her left, she lands on her back, then tries to get beneath him. If she manages to get beneath him, she will strike, repeating her attack, going to his jugular so she can suffocate him until he passes out. While doing so, she is attempting to kick his abdomen with her hind legs. Great attack, but, points were taken off in pp.


7 for injuries. Skin tear and significant hair loss to the area between the shoulder and neck. I feel like his attack should have at least punctured the skin, since he was pretty close to his target.


Round two Satis Total: 43/50


Round 3
Oddity:

7 for clarity- Again, not very clear writing.

8 for powerplaying. You don't give her the opportunity to either hold onto his face, or release in her next attack.

2 for defenses. Chin tucked down. That was the only actual defense you mentioned in your post. Remember, always redo them!

2 for attack. He was attempting to bite the leg that was kicking, but it was her back legs that were kicking, and with him lowering his body, how could he possibly reach beneath him to bite her paw? Make sure you read your opponents posts all the way through before you write yours.


5 for injuries. Though the scraping along the eye would be correct, you cannot assume that Satis will instantly release and wont instantly attack. Remember, fights happen on a few second pause between each attack. Watch a video of wolves fighting. See how fast they move?

Round three Oddity Total: 23/50


Satis:

10 for clarity- Post was clear.

8 for powerplaying. " the woman retaliating instantly as she would rock her fore-weight forward just enough to hook his own left forelimb" you can't assume she would hook his leg.

10 for defenses. Tail still tucked, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, abdomen tight, chin tucked, hackles raised.


10 for attack. Going for his eye again, hoping to do further damage. Pushing her back leg into his left back leg, then recoils and goes for his left forelimb.

10 for injuries. snout bruising, minor cuts on right hind foot. More damage to be determined with Oddity's next attack.


Round three Satis Total: 48/50



Round 4
Oddity:

8 for clarity- Watch your wording.

10 for powerplaying. - None.

0 for defenses. There were not defenses explained in this post.

4 for attack. Going for the top of her head. There should be at least one or two different attacks added with this one.


7 for injuries. Gash under eye, tearing on scruff and left forelimb. Her teeth would have done more damage than a tear around his forelimb.

Round four Total: 29/50



Satis:

10 for clarity- Clear post.

10 for powerplaying. None

10 for defenses. Ears back, eyes narrowed, tail tucked, abdomen tense, hackles raised.


10 for attack. Kicks back limbs into Oddity's stomach again, shakes her head violently while attached to his limb.


8 for injuries. Grazing to the sides of her head. I feel like his teeth would have at least torn her flesh a bit more, don't be scared to let your character take some damage.

Round four Satis Total: 48/50



Totals:


Oddity: 109/200

Satis: 175/200



And the winner is...


Satis! Oddity must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:


Oddity- Gashes under and above his left eye, tearing on the side of his neck, rough tearing on left forelimb. One OOC week for all injuries to heal. Gashes under eye may result in permanent scarring.



Satis- Shallow skin wound/ tearing to right shoulder along with significant hair loss between shoulder and neck, snout bruising, minor cuts on hind right foot, grazing to the sides of head. One OOC week for all injuries to heal.



Notes:



Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)

For Seimei You really need to read your posts before you post them. Make sure to work several defenses in every post. Also, make sure you remember that each attack happens in a matter of seconds, so movement will be limited.

For Yumpy Watch your powerplaying and movement. Remember, too much movement will knock you down!



You both did very well! I enjoyed using this spar for my first judging lesson. The beginning is a lot more detailed than the end, but that's because I was learning off of it :) - By [Aislyn]