-2 "seconds before impact he…" This partially assumes he closed the distance as he intended to. You opponent may have moved in this time.
Total: 8
DEFENSES
+ 1 for each seen
Total: 10
ATTACK
+2 chest slam
+2 double paw slam
+4 bite + grip
Total: 8
INJURIES
- First round!
Total: 10
Total for Round One: 46 / 50
VOLTAGE
CLARITY
-2 how is Volt trying to collide their chests? Is he hoping to line them up center to center? upper to lower?
-1 you say he didn't want a throat grip but it sure seems like the target is the throat and you mention trying to choke Valen out. It's lead me to doubt I understand this attack.
-2 how severe is the damage to Volt from the bite?
Total: 5
POWERPLAY
none seen
Total: 10
DEFENSES
+ 1 each seen
Total: 6
ATTACK
+1 chest slam (point removed for clarity)
+1 paw wrapping
+3 bite
Total: 5
INJURIES
- First round!
Total: 10
Total for Round One: 36 / 50
ROUND TWO
VALENTINE
CLARITY
all clear!
Total: 10
POWERPLAY
none seen
Total: 10
DEFENSES
+ 1 each seen
Total: 10
ATTACK
+5 bite + grip + worsening damage
+1 chest slam, they're very close quarters will diminish the force of this attack.
Total: 6
INJURIES
-1 moderate bruising
-2 moderate bite wound to throat
Total: 7
Total for Round Two: 43 / 50
VOLTAGE
CLARITY
all clear!
Total: 10
POWERPLAY
none seen
Total: 10
DEFENSES
+ 1 for each seen
Total: 10
ATTACK
+5 bite + grip + worsening damage
Total: 5
INJURIES
-2 severe bruising
-3 severe bite to back of neck
Total: 5
Total for Round Two: 38 / 50
Totals:
VALENTINE
89 / 100
VOLTAGE
74 / 100
And the winner is...
VALENTINE
Voltage must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out.
Damage:
VALENTINE
-moderate bruising to chest will take1 ooc week to heal
-moderate bite wound to throat will take 2 ooc weeks to heal
VOLTAGE
- severe bruising to chest 2 ooc weeks to heal
- severe bite to back of neck 3 ooc weeks to heal
Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
Good work guys! Anything that needs to be said can be found in the deductions. My apologies for the brevity but I'm under the weather and have to get to town.
