- 2 “He aimed towards her left flank” Is he head to head with her? Perpendicular?
- 2 “To bruise her side” Where? There’s a LOT of space along the side.
- 1 moderate bruise to left shoulder
- 2 moderate lacerations to left neck
- 2 moderate fractures to left forepaw (missed)
Total: 5
Total for Round Two: 36 / 50
ESTI
CLARITY
- 1 “he reared up to wrap his paws around his neck, but Esti had another plan” Wy put this here when you aren’t going to continue on this hear? It tripped me up, and if it weren’t for your OOC note (which is invisible to me) I would have been confused.
- 2 “to his ribs” Ribs is a huge area, please specify
+ 2 shoulders to ribs
+ 3 bite to his…sensitive area
+ 1 severity
Total: 6
INJURIES
- 2 moderate lacerations to left ear/skull
Total: 8
Total for Round Two: 41 / 50
Totals:
DIABLO
36 + 42 = 78 / 100
ESTI
41 + 44 = 85 / 100
And the winner is...
ESTI
DIABLO must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out.
Damage:
DIABLO
Moderate bruise to left shoulder – 1 ooc week
Moderate lacerations to left neck – 2 ooc weeks
Moderate fractures to left forepaw (missed) – 1 to 2 ooc weeks
ESTI
Moderate bruising to chest (missed) – 2 ooc weeks
Moderate lacerations to left ear/skull – 2 ooc weeks
Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
BOTH
Guuuuys! Pay attention to your opponents attacks! You both lost a lot of points by not acknowledging an attack even if it missed or wasn’t valid anymore because movement. You must reguard it…reguardless! Clarity is key, as well.
