LILLIANNA vs AVALON for SPAR
ROUND ONE
LILLIE
CLARITY |
- 2 “left upper canine (…) right eye” What side awe you on?
- 2 “starting from an inch above the center of the eye” Which eye?
- 2 “aiming to grab avalon’s face in her jaws” Which side?
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Total: 4 |
POWERPLAY |
- 2 “Her lower left canine scraping the bone” You must always state attempt, even if it’s implied with an earlier movement.
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Total: 8 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 (neck) + 1 (tail) + 1 (ears) + 1 (eyes) + 1 (legs) + 1 (knees) + 1 (toes) + 1 (claws) + 1 (hackles) + 1 (lips)
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 3 bite attempt
+ 2 scratch attempt
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Total: 5 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
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Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 37 / 50
AVALON
CLARITY |
- 2 “Lillianna’s windpip (or beneath her jaw)” Which one? Be specific.
- 2 “Avalon would raise her left forpaw and attempt to pin Lillianna’s forepaw” Lilli is reared up and so are you. There’s no way this is possible. This would be a touch of PP as Lillie’s paws aren’t on the ground.
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Total: 6 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 (eyes) + 1 (ears) + 1 (tail) + 1 (knees) + 1 (legs) + 1 (toes) + 1 (claws) + 1 (head) + 1 (teeth) + 1 (hackles)
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 3 bite attempt
+ 2 chest thrust
+ 2 shoulder thrust
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Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
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Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 43 / 50
ROUND TWO
LILLIE
CLARITY |
- 2 “snarling as the flesh ripped” How strong was Avalon’s grip? Would her just throwing her head back really dislodge the bite?
-2 “Slip right under Avalon” How exactly? Are you crawling?
- 2 “smash into Avalon’s back hind paw” Which one?
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Total: 4 |
POWERPLAY |
- 2 “lower right canine scraping the rib” Attempt
- 2 “causing moderate bruising” Attempt
- 2 “the weight of her left hip against right leg” Attempt
- 2 WAY too much movement. You need to provide your opponent time to respond. You can’t dive, spin, twist, bite, stomp and expect your opponent to be able to follow any of it. It’s powerplay, assuming your opponent stayed in one spot long enough for all this. It’s forcing them to stay in that spot as well and it’s not fair.
- 2 Ignored Avalon’s stomp. Even if it wasn’t realistic at the time, because it’s be stated you must acknowledge it in some way, even if it’s to say it missed entirely.
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Total: 0 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 (eyes) + 1 (toes) + 1 (claws) + 1 (fur) + 1 (ears) + 1 (tail) + 1 (teeth) + 1 (shoulders) + 1 (knees) + 1 (chin)
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 hip thrust
+ 3 bite to belly
+ 1 severity
+ 1 paw stomp
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Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
- 2 moderate bruise to chest
- 2 moderate lacerations to neck
- 2 minor fractures to left forepaw (missed)
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Total: 4 |
Total for Round Two: 25 / 50
AVALON
CLARITY |
- 2 “as she sought to continue her charge” What charge? Wasn’t she standing still? Is this the start of her charge?
- 2 “avalon’s legs remained slightly spread and would not budge” So…she stopped? Weren’t you moving just now? What?
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Total: 6 |
POWERPLAY |
- 2 “and hold her there” You need to attempt or “hope” for these movements as well
- 2 Ignored paw stomp
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Total: 6 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 (eyes) + 1 (ears) + 1 (tail) + 1 (balance) + 1 (teeth) + 1 (hackles) + 1 (chin) + 1 (muzzle) + 1 (weight) + 1 (knees)
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 3 bite attempt
+ 3 crush
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Total: 6 |
INJURIES |
- 2 shallow bites to chest
- 2 minor fractures to back hind paw (you choose. Missed)
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Total: 6 |
Total for Round Two: 34 / 50
Totals:
LILLIE |
37 + 25 = 62 / 100
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AVALON |
43 + 34 = 77 / 100
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And the winner is...
AVALON |
LILLIE must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out.
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Damage:
LILLIE |
Moderate bruises to chest – 1 OOC week
Moderate Lacerations to neck – 2 OOC weeks
Moderate fractures to left foretoes – 1 OOC week
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AVALON |
Moderate lacerations to left shoulder – 2 OOC weeks
Minor scratches to chest – 4 OOC days
Shallow bites to chest – 1 OOC week
Minor fractures to back toes (you pick) – 1 OOC week
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Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
KEA | Please be wary of movement. You cannot do too much movement in one move, you must give your opponent time to react. Also, you must attempt your moves, and “hope” for certain conditions. By saying your tooth scrapes the bone, you are assuming it hits which is by powerplay. By “hoping” your tooth scrapes the bone, however, that is perfectly fine. Make sure you acknowledge every attack your opponent does, even if it misses or is unrealistic. Say that, say it missed. Don’t just ignore it because it gives your opponent or I the freedom to decide. Keep an eye on grips, as well. You can’t just tear away from a hold easily, it’s powerplaying your opponent either letting go or it’s entirely unrealistic. Thrash your head or something, rip from that grip! Don’t just..lift your head. Explain your movements as clearly as possible, everything counts and everything matters. And inch is only so big.
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DRAGON | Same as kea, watch your opponents attacks and RESPOND to them. Watch for realism of movements and attacks as well and be very specific where you are or what you’re doing. Be very specific where you want your attack to land, or it can be easily dodges or weakened.
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- By [Arin]
