Brush The Dust Off My Sword

• -2 “At the last possible moment...” You must give your opponent time to react

• +1 for each seen to max of 10

• +2 for shoulder slam
• +3 for bite
• +1 for paw swipe

• First round.

LIAR:
2 for clarity:

• -2 “Dipping to his own left...” What do you mean by “dipping”? This is a very vague statement and it tells me almost nothing about what he's doing
• -2 “...her shoulder would miss his chest and collide with his shoulder.” Which shoulder and where on it?
• -1 “Aiming to let the lock happen, however to grasp his own left around hers and trip her.” What exactly ss he doing? Resisting her pull? Pulling back? Are they just holding hands?
• -1 “Body aiming to tilt to the left he’d start his attack.” Tilt how? Is he leaning? What does this accomplish and why is he doing it? More information is needed here!
• -1 “...thrusting his body forward his upper jaw aimed for just the top of her mid back.” I feel this is too vague. Right behind her shoulder blades? Further back? How much further?
• -1 “The male’s lower jaw aiming for just where the ribcage was on her body.” The wording here could be a bit better and it's more than a little confusing.

• -2 What kind of damage did he take from Surreal's shoulder throw?

• +1 for each seen to max of 10

• +1 for paw counter
• +3 for bite

• First round.

SURREAL:
9 for clarity:

• -1 “though his counter attempt to trip her was ultimately unsuccessful due to none of her weight being in that leg.” So what happened to it then? Did he pull it towards him? Are they just holding hands?

• -1 “...as she sought to drag his left foreleg toward herself...” Since this isn't a counter you need to attempt to keep a hold before you can try to use it in an attack.

• +1 for each seen to max of 10

• +2 for chest slam
• +1 for paw swipe
• +3 for bite
  +1 for grip
  

• -2 for severe bruising
• 0 for pulled hair

• -1 “...he felt her jaws slip just below his scruff.” How far below his scruff? Is she biting into the skin over his shoulder blades?

• -2 “All the while Liar would push forward into her...” This should have been attempted
• -2 “...he felt her jaws slip just below his scruff...” Surreal was aiming for the top of his scruff. If Liar moved in a way that would justify taking damage anywhere other than where your opponent intended you need to say so.
• -1 “As his left foreleg came out from underneath him...” Did he take any damage from this? If not, why not? Because this is an attack you need to say whether or not damage was taken even if, like in this case, not taking damage is perfectly acceptable.

• +1 “His ears still pinned to the back of his head...”
• +1 “Toes splayed out...”
• +1 “...his narrowed eyes...”
• +1 “...he tucked his chin...”
• +1 “...his scruff rolled forward...”
• +1 “...hackles raised...”
• +1 “...his abdomen muscles tightened...”
• 0 “His tail moved slightly to the right...” Is it still held out level with his spine or is it by his leg?

• +3 for bite
• +1 for kick

• -2 for severe bruising
• -2 for moderate punctures wounds to base of scruff

SURREAL:
9 for clarity:

• -1 “...vying to snap her right foreleg up and over Liar’s back...” Where exactly is she hoping to place it on his back?

• -3 “She sought to counter his attack with a thrust of her left shoulder towards the left side of his face...” By taking damage from this you're giving your opponent no choice but to accept your counter attack

• +1 for each seen to max of 10

• +3 for bite
  +1 for grip
• +2 for shoulder throw
• 0 for hook/pulling

• -1 for moderate bruising to chest
• -2 for moderate lacerations
• -2 for severe bruising

• -1 “He barely lifted above the ground but she took bits of flesh and fur with her...” I'm not sure what is happening here. Is Liar being lifted off the ground? Is Surreal's bite pulling free instead of gripping?
• -1 “Trying to topple him over he quickly slammed his lifted right leg onto the ground and...” Did you mean to say her?
• -2 “...so she could not get the grip she wished for.” Did her paw land at all? If so, where? Did it do any damage?
• -1 “His teeth digging into her left shoulder the top of his muzzle beginning to sprout pain from bruising...” How severe is that bruising?
• -2 “...attempting to ram up both his shoulders into his chest from underneath her...” Do you mean her chest? Where on her chest is Liar trying to strike?
• -1 “Liar would then tilt his head to the left, aiming his jaws for her soft underbelly just after the ribcage.” Where after her ribcage? At the end of her sternum? Along either side of her ribs?

• -1 “...his back the male would use his back right leg to take one step to his right and pull them into more of a right angle...” You can say that Liar took a step to the side, but you can't say the positioning he's hoping for is successful, you can only attempt it.
• -1 “...after his attempt to slam up to her...” Try not to say things like this. You have to give your opponent time to react; who knows, she might do something to prevent Liar from making this move.

• +1 for each seen to max of 10

• +2 for ramming
• +3 for bite

• -4 for severe bite wound to scruff (worsened injury from previous round)
• -1 for moderate bruising to muzzle (damage assigned by judge)

• Severe bruising will take 1 ooc week to heal
• Moderate bruising will take 3 ooc days to heal
• Moderate lacerations will take 1 ooc week to heal

• Severe bruising will take 1 ooc week to heal
• Moderate bruising will take 3 ooc days to heal
• Severe bite wound will take 2 ooc weeks to heal