-1 “Seifer would linger a yard or two to his...” That's a fairly large distance to be iffy on.
-1 “...he would side step three times to his own left as he charged forward.” Moving to his left would put their right sides together
0 “(attempting to get his left shoulder to Skaelingr's left hip) Be careful when using parenthesis in fights. There's some debate as to whether or not they should be treated as ooc notes for the player. If that is the case whatever is in them probably can't or shouldn't be used in the judging.
-1 ”Skaelingr's claws would cut down the side of right left shoulder instead...” Which shoulder?
-1 “...cutting down the length of his side...” Which side?
-1 “Sin tore himself away with an attempt to swing his hind end to his own left to bring them to an uneven T.” More info is needed here. How he he hoping to line them up? Chest to ribs? Chest to hip?
-1 “Sin tore himself away with an attempt to swing his hind end to his own left to bring them to an uneven T.” By doing this he would be swinging his bum towards Skae, and with only three paces separating them (which you say is a space small enough for Skae's attacks to still land) I can't see Sin being able to move like this, unless he intends to brush his bum across Skae's side.
-1 “...top fangs sliced down his thigh...” Which thigh?
-1 ”...as he then sought to reach forward with his left foreleg...” How does this work if he's facing away from Skae?
-1 “...towards the inside of the tiger's left hind foot, and hook his paw around it...” Is he just hooking it? If so, how will than unbalance his opponent?
-1 “...jaws lunged to his left in an attempt to bite at Skaelingr's left side, an inch behind the ribcage.” Where behind the ribcage vertically? He's up against a tiger; that's a really big area.
10 for powerplaying.
None seen!
10 for defenses.
+1 for each seen to max of 10
3 for attack.
0 for dirt slinging (ineffective attack)
+1 for paw hook
-1 for lack of realism related to positioning
+3 for bite
+1 for grip
-1 for lack of realism related to positioning
10 for injuries.
Moderate lacerations to shoulder
Moderate lacerations to side (damage assigned by judge)
Moderate lacerations to thigh
Sin's round one total: 33/50
ROUND TWO
SKAELINGR: 9 for clarity:
-1 “...his upper body would arc sharply to his own left as he sought to follow Sin's rotating hind end. Skælingr hoped to bring them back into parallel alignment with his left side a few inches from Sin's left side.” If Sin is facing away from Skae and Skae moved to his (Skae's) left then the placement would be Skae's left side to Sin's right side. To move along Sin's left side also wouldn't put them left to left with their current positioning. This isn't your fault, it's easy to see that a directional mistake was made in Sin's previous post, but without an ooc note confirming this from your opponent I have to use what it written to make my deductions not what is understood.
9 for powerplaying.
-1 “He felt the canine's left foreleg sweep behind his right hind leg...” Sin was reaching for Skaelingr's left hind foot, not his right
10 for defenses.
+1 for each seen to max of 10
10 (actually 11) for attack.
+3 for bite
+1 for worsening damage
+3 for clawed swipe (left forepaw)
+1 for severity
+3 for clawed swipe (right forepaw)
+1 for severity
8 for injuries.
-2 Moderate lacerations to left side
Skaelingr's round two total: 46/50
SIN: 3 for clarity:
-1 “Off to the right, Seifer was circling as he drew nearer, readying to pounce.” These movements should have been attempted
-1“Off to the right, Seifer was circling as he drew nearer, readying to pounce.” What/who is he circling?
-1 “...the massive paw shoving his back end to the ground with bruising...” What's the severity of that bruising?
-2 “...jaws gaping as he sought to bite the same spot he had previously bitten, attempting to worsen the damage behind the lower rib cage. ...” This should have been restated in its entirety
-1 “...beneath the tiger starting from the soft belly...” Where on his soft underbelly?
-1 “...and dragging his claws back towards them...” What is “them”?
8 for powerplaying.
-1 “Seifer would shoot forward, coming in from behind Skaelingr's right at a slight angle.” This should have been attempted.
-1 “...as the smaller feline skidded to a sudden halt right behind Skaelingr...” This should have been attempted.
10 for defenses.
+1 for each seen to max of 10
6 for attack.
+3 for bite
+1 for worsening
+2 for companion's attack – flipping his paw over and pulling towards himself has a lot less power than hooking his claws in and pushing
3 for injuries.
-3 for severe bite wound to left thigh
-1 for moderate bruising to back (damage assigned by judge)
-2 for moderate lacerations to back
-1 for light scratches
Sin's round two total: 30/50
Totals:
Skaelingr: 96/100 Sin: 63/100
And the winner is...
SKAELINGR! Sin must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
Skaelingr:
His moderate lacerations will take 2 OOC weeks to heal
Sin:
His severe bite wound will take 3 OOC weeks to heal
His moderate lacerations will take 2 OOC weeks to heal
All bruising will take 3 OOC days to heal
Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
For Lunar: You are absolutely terrifying with a tiger. 14 attack points in one round? Hot damn xD
For Dragon: You definitely lost the most points in clarity and most of that had to do with positioning. With so much happening it's easy to get confused. My advice to you would be to keep your character's movements as simple as possible...and use hand puppets – that's what I do! XD That might sound silly, but I swear it helps! Better luck next time!
