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Loner
Healer

age
3 Years
gender
Female
gems
0
size
Small
build
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01-02-2016, 02:46 AM (This post was last modified: 01-05-2016, 08:49 AM by Tealah.)
Sorry if some of these seem nitpicky my inner editor went kinda crazy tonight.

Guide Book:

01. Getting started
  • "by posting a plot threads" - Unfortunately I don't think something can be both singular and plural at the same time
edited

02. General rules
  • "While this mark may be used for thick language" - Never heard it called thick language before, may be a turn of phrase I'm unfamiliar with, if so please disregard (Posting rules)
This was meant in the context of "excessive" and has been changed to reflect that.

03. Character creation
  • "A lawful good character will do whatever is necessary to ensure that the greater good is benefited." - Just awkward wording here. (Character Alignment- Lawful good)

04. Packs and Alphas
05. Fighting & Judging
  • "So. If my wolf Bob challenges Gary [...]" - I believe the period was supposed to be a colon (Spars, Disputes and Maiming challenges)

That's as far as I got before bed started calling for me, I will pick this up again at a later point so long as someone else doesn't beat me to it.
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