- 2 " just in time to move to the left so her shoulder wouldn't knock him balance"" How did you dodge this? Side stepping? What? What's the damage? "Bruise" isn't enough.
- 2 "Her jaws would land just short of the mark" How? You didn't move at all despite scrunching your neck which would probably bring it closer to her jaws. Also, your scruff IS the fatty folds you scrunched up which is exactly where she was aiming.
- 2 "blood would trickle" How much damage? Mod, mild, severe?
+ 3 bite to face
+ 1 grip
+ 1 maim attempt
+ 1 paw stomp/pin
Total: 6
INJURIES
- 2 Moderate puncture to right foreleg behind elbow
Total: 8
Total for Round Two: 44 / 50
RAVINE
CLARITY
- Damage. You need to outline your damage. Was it moderate, severe, mild? Did she break open your entire face, or just make a few punctures? What happened?
- 4 Severe lacerations to face, worsened by shaking of head.
- 1 Welts to foreleg
Total: 5
Total for Round Two: 32 / 50
Totals:
CASCADE
46 + 44 = 90
RAVINE
31 + 32 = 63
And the winner is...
CASCADE
RAVINE must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out. Cascade's Maim is successful
Damage:
CASCADE
- Moderate punctures to right foreleg behind elbow - 1 OOC week
RAVINE
- Maim to face, severe scarring. Requires a healer. - 3 OOC weeks
- Minor welts to leg - 2 OOC days
- Moderate Lacerations to back of neck - 1.5 OOC weeks
Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
SECRET
Most of my notes are up above. Please make sure you fully outline your damage, how severe it is. You also missed a lot of points for lack of defenses! Try and get all 10. If you need help knowing what all the defenses are, please let me know. Keep trying.
