BIRNA vs EHRGEIZ for SPAR
ROUND ONE
Birna
CLARITY |
- All clear.
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Total: 10 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen.
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
Head aligned with spine, tail aligned with spine, chin tucked, shoulders rolled, hackles raised, limbs spread equal distance apart, weight evenly distributed, toes spread, claws in ground, eyes narrowed.
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 slam to neck + severity
+ 1 chest slam
+ 4 bite to ear and eye, + for severity and grip
+ 2 paw slam + severity
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Total: 9 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
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Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 49/50
Ehrgeiz
CLARITY |
- “As his jaws sought out their target, his hind legs coiled and prepared to shift his weight forward. His right forepaw would strike out toward her left forepaw, hoping to pin it down and fracture the toes. His left forepaw would lift and reach toward her right foreleg, trying to wrap his paw around the middle of her foreleg, hoping to drag her into his jaws and interfere with her movement.” You didn't make up his balance for rearing up, or attempt to rear up at all. You shifted his weight to the front, so in my mind he should be laying flat out on his neck. -2
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Total: 8 |
POWERPLAY |
- There is a lot of movement in your second paragraph. Like, a TON of movement. You have to give your opponent enough time to react to your initial movement, but you changed your position just about three times in just one paragraph. You've got to be careful with that, that's a big no no. Try to think about it like a turn based video game fight, you can only move a certain amount before the enemy gets a chance to attack. No button spamming in fighting. XD -3
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Total: 7 |
DEFENSES |
Legs bent, legs spread equal distance apart, toes spread, claws in ground, ears pinned, chin tucked, shoulders rolled, hackles raised, tail aligned with spine. ('head low' wasn't specific enough to count as aligning the head with the spine)
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Total: 9 |
ATTACK |
+ 4 bite to neck + severity
+ 1 paw slam – points for clarity
+ 0 leg grab – points for clarity
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Total: 5 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
- (Moderate bruise to right shoulder)
- (Severe punctures on left ear)
- (Mild lacerations on top of head)
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Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 39/50
ROUND TWO
BIRNA
CLARITY |
- “She felt his left paw wrap around her right foreleg equidistant between the wrist and the elbow and she shifted her weight evenly back to her hind legs, tail flaring back as she let him pull her into his eager jaws for she desired the same thing.” Did her paw leave the ground? If so is she now rearing up? You did shift her weight to her back legs, but there is no mention of trying to rear up a bit. That makes me think that her limb is just sliding forward, but I'm unsure. -2
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Total: 8 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
Hackles raised, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, chin tucked, head aligned with spine, tail aligned with spine, shoulders rolled, legs bent, legs spread equal distance, toes spread.
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 shoulder into jaws + maim attempt
+ 4 bite to forehead + severity
+ 1 arm wrap
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Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
- 1 Mild bruise to chest
- Severe lacerations to right shoulder (damage pending)
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Total: 9 |
Total for Round Two: 44/50
Ehrgeiz
CLARITY |
- “...he felt her teeth come down on his head...” Where on his head? -2
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Total: 8 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
Legs equally spread, toes spread, claws in ground, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, head aligned with spine, tail aligned with spine, hackles raised, shoulders rolled, chin tucked.
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 1 neck strain
+ 1 leg wrap
+ 1 paw slam to shoulder
+ 4 bite to neck + grip
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Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
- 1 Mild muscle strain in neck
- 4 Severe punctures on head
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Total: 5 |
Total for Round Two: 40/50
ROUND THREE
Birna
CLARITY |
- All clear.
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Total: 10 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen.
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
Weight evenly distributed, claws in ground, tail aligned with spine, head alined with spine, chin tucked, shoulders rolled, hackles raised, legs bent, ears pinned, eyes narrowed.
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 1 shoulder slam
+ 1 chest slam
+ 4 bite to neck + grip
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Total: 6 |
INJURIES |
- 4 severe lacerations to right shoulder
- 1 mild bruise to right shoulder
- 3 moderate punctures to right side of neck
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Total: 2 |
Total for Round Three: 38/50
Ehrgeiz
CLARITY |
- All clear
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Total: 10 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
Legs set equal distance apart, legs bent, toes spread, claws in ground, tail aligned with spine, hackles raised, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, face snarling, shoulders rolled.
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 worsening damage
+ 1 shoulder slam
+ 2 paw slam + severity
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Total: 5 |
INJURIES |
- 1 mild bruise to right side of chest
- 2 moderate bruise to right shoulder
- 3 moderate puncture wounds to right side of neck
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Total: 4 |
Total for Round Three: 39/50
Totals:
BIRNA |
49/50 + 44/50 + 38/50 = 131/150
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Ehrgeiz |
39/50 + 40/50 + 39/50 = 118/150
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And the winner is...
BIRNA |
Ehrgeiz must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out.
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Damage:
BIRNA |
- All healed by now
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Ehrgeiz |
- All healed by now
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Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
LUNARCAT7 | There isn't ever much to tell you, haha. Good fight!
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SHADOWED | Good job! You really surprised me with this fight, you did VERY well! Just need to watch being more specific on some points.
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- By [Evelyn]
