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Roviathin Acceptance Form



Evelyn

Loner
Fluffy Marshmallow

age
13+ Years
gender
Female
gems
123456941
size
Medium
build
-
posts
5
player
04-16-2016, 11:42 AM (This post was last modified: 04-16-2016, 11:43 AM by Evelyn.)
Thank you for your interest in joining our site!
There are just a few things I noticed on your profile that cause a little bit of confusion.
"Elegant eyes of both yellow on his left eye, and blue on his right eye..." "...causing him to be blind in his right eye, but lose his left eye." So you say that his left eye, but you still say what colour it is. If he doesn't have a left eye, you don't need to say what colour it is. ^^
"...even having three claw slashes on each side..." On each side of what? I know you say eye later on, but it might make a bit more sense if you say on each side of his face, or across each eye.

After those little things are fixed I will be happy to accept you!

My focus needs more focus.