VARDA vs ESAROSA for SPAR
ROUND ONE
Varda
CLARITY |
- “...attempt to ram her left shoulder blade into the the other woman's right shoulder blade with as much power and force...” Where on the shoulder blade? Side, front, middle? -2
- “...she attempted to grab a hold of her opponent's scruff with her canines...” Where on her scruff? How are her jaws placed? -2
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Total: 6 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
- Weight evenly distributed, limbs equal distance apart, hackles raised, head lowered, legs bent, eyes narrowed, ears back.
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Total: 7 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 bite -1 for clarity issue
+ 1 paw slam
+ 0 shoulder slam -1 for clarity issue
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Total: 3 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
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Total: 0 |
Total for Round One: 36/50
Esarosa
CLARITY |
- “Lastly, her right forepaw would raise, weight shifting to her other legs as she did so, attempting to slam it down on Varda's right forepaw, in hopes of fracturing the toes of the smaller woman's paw.” You already raised her right forepaw earlier, here “Esa managed to lift her right forepaw out of the way of the paw slam just in time, shifting her weight to her other three legs.” There is no mention of her right paw going back to the ground, and it would be too much movement if it was. -2
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Total: 8 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
- Shoulders rolled, legs bent, legs spread, toes splayed, claws in ground, hackles raised, chin tucked, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, head lowered
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 1 shoulder slam
+ 3 bite to shoulder
+ 0 paw slam -1 for clarity issue
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Total: 4 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
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Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 42/50
ROUND TWO
Varda
CLARITY |
- “There was a chance her trachea might have been damaged...” Was it damaged or not? All damage must be clearly stated, it is up to you as the player to determine all injuries within reason. -2
- There is a little too much movement in this post. Paw shifting, position change, rearing, slamming down. You have to give your opponent enough time to react. -2
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Total: 6 |
POWERPLAY |
- “During this time, Varda would shift her positioning...” Since Esarosa had bitten her shoulder, this movement needs to be attempted. All movement that directly effects your opponent need to be attempted. -2
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Total: 8 |
DEFENSES |
- Toes spread, claws in ground, legs spread evenly, legs bent, weight distributed evenly, eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, shoulders rolled.
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Total: 9 |
ATTACK |
+ 1 shoulder slam
+ 4 bite + hold attempt
+ 2 shove +1 for each paw
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Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
- 2 Moderate bruise to left shoulder
- 3 severe bruise to throat
- 4 severe lacerations to right shoulder
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Total: 1 |
Total for Round Two: 31/50
Esarosa
CLARITY |
- “...and a worsened bruise on her right shoulder blade.” Worsened to what? -2
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Total: 8 |
POWERPLAY |
- None seen
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Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
- Legs bent, legs spread, tail tucked, claws in ground, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, shoulders rolled, hackles raised, toes spread.
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Total: 9 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 shove +1 for each paw
+ 4 bite + grip attempt
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Total: 6 |
INJURIES |
- 2 moderate gashes (PS wolf claws don't inflict that much damage, ever. But because you stated it the damage was taken. Yes, dog claws to damage to humans but we are all fleshy. Wolves have layers of fur to get through and thicker skin.)
- 1 mild bruise to chest
- 3 severe bruise to right shoulder (decided by judge)
- 3 moderate punctures to jaw
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Total: 1 |
Total for Round Two: 34/50
Totals:
Varda |
36/50 + 31/50 = 67/100
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Esarosa |
42/50 + 34/50 = 76/100
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And the winner is...
ESAROSA |
Varda must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out.
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Damage:
Varda |
- All healed by now
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Esarosa |
- All healed by now
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Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
MILLIE | You did really well! Just watch your defences, and make sure that you are being specific about damage and the placement of attacks. I don't count snarling unless you state that it is to bunch up skin to further protect the eyes, otherwise it's not a very good defence.
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SHADOWED | Good fight! Same as about about the whole lip snarling thing. You made a few slip ups but we all do, haha. Just make sure you're not using the same body part to attack twice!
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TO BOTH | I am so sorry this took so long! I grabbed it on the 21st and actually finished it a few days later, but I kept forgetting and never got around to coding it up. I really do apologize, things have been crazy.
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- By [Evelyn]
