-2 where on the throat is she aiming for? Near the jaw? Further down?
-1 if Avalon is moving her head to the left she'd be seeking the right side of Mercy's face
Total: 7
POWERPLAY
-2 Don't forget you need to attempt to close the distance between you and your opponent.
-2 Avalon is directly facing Mercy, how is she getting her shoulder to Mercy's throat? Is she offset slightly? Is she twisting? Neither of these movements can work as you state she is also trying to slam her chest perfectly into Mercy's in the next line simultaeously.
Total: 6
DEFENSES
+1 each seen
Total: 10
ATTACK
+2 shoulder slam -1 powerplay (see pp note on positioning)
+1 chest slam
+3 bite +1 grip attempt
+1 paw slam +0 maim attempt (they're so close in size and Avalon would not have the momentum/power necessary to break the toes)
Total: 7
INJURIES
- First round
Total: 10
Total for Round One: 40/50
MERCY
CLARITY
-1 Avalon would already be past it if the tree were to Mercy's right
Total: 9
POWERPLAY
-2 There's a far bit of movement going on for being in that close of proximity. To end up in an L shape would take more than a few steps and then you also have the stepping backward as well.
-1 "reached for Avalon's left shoulder, trying to keep her chin as close to her chest as possible to protect her throat" The act of reaching undoes the tuck
Total: 7
DEFENSES
+1 each seen
Total: 10
ATTACK
+3 bite +1 grip
+1 paw slam +0 maim attempt (they're so close in size and Mercy would not have the momentum/power necessary to break the toes)
+1 shoulder slam
Total: 6
INJURIES
first round
Total: 8
Total for Round One: 42/50
ROUND TWO
AVALON
CLARITY
-2 did Mercy succeed in getting her grip?
-2 where on Mercy's neck is she seeking to lay her paws? More toward the head or shoulders? This can make a big difference in how Mercy is able to respond and the kind of leverage Avalon has.
Total: 6
POWERPLAY
-2 It might be how it's worded but again it feels like to much movement, she's stopping herself from crashing into the tree, pivots, charges forward then rears up again all in close proximity.
-2 you need to give your opponent time to respond to your first set of attacks. she is already trying for a chest slam, she would have to pull back to shove again
Total: 6
DEFENSES
+1 each seen
-1 you did not readjust Avalons weight and balance when she reared up
Total: 9
ATTACK
+1 arm wrap
+1 chest slam
+2 elbow to the neck with weight and strain (-1 for clarity issue)
+3 bite +1 grip attempt
+0 for shove, see pp note
Total: 7
INJURIES
-0 mild bruising to right hip [3 ooc days to heal]
-2 moderate lacerations to left side of chest [2 ooc weeks to heal]
Total: 8
Total for Round Two: 36/50
MERCY
CLARITY
-2 Avalon is still above her if she were to raise 4 feet off the ground straight up she'd likely collide with Avalon's chest. Is she pulling back in someway to avoid being hit? Avalon is also probably closer than a four foot distance so I'm not quite sure what to do with this snippet of text.
-1 "As Mercy moved upwards into her rear" I'm not sure what to do with this xD I'm not even for sure whose rear we're talking about
-1 "Not holding back, she aimed for the underside of Avalon's neck" This was a bit confusing at first she's aiming for the underside of Avalon's neck then for Avalon's face.
Total: 5
POWERPLAY
-2 again remember that fights move quickly and your characters are in close proximity, also that Avalon is pushing down with her arms so even if Mercy isn't in reach she is coming down fast meaning it's unlikley that Mercy has the time to duck, push her forlimbs forward, pull them back and then spring up.
Total: 8
DEFENSES
+1 each seen
Total: 9
ATTACK
+3 bite +1 grip
+1 arm wrap
Total: 5
INJURIES
-1 moderate bruising to neck or minor lacerations to face [1 ooc week to heal][judges deduction due to pp considerations]
Total: 9
Total for Round Two: 36/50
ROUND THREE
AVALON
CLARITY
-2 Did Mercy successfully get a grip. It seems to me she did but based on the counter I'm going to say that she caused lacerations but failed the grip. Make sure to be specific about what parts of your opponents attacks are successful and which ones aren't. I need to know if Mercy's jaws snapped shut over air, fur or fully on Avalon's neck.
-2 A counter occurs before an attack and as you already have Mercy's bite landing it can't be countered and throws the damage and results received into question
-2 how does Avalon stop her forward momentum? Remember her upper body is going forward and she was trying to shove and slam into her opponent, how does she correct for this?
-2 where on Mercy's neck is she hoping to lay her right arm? Again whether it is near the head or shoulders will greatly change Avalon's leverage
Total: 2
POWERPLAY
-2 "She aimed to bite down as hard as she could. In the process, she hoped to push Mercy's head down and twist it to her (Avalon's) left and potentially put Mercy's neck in a strained and awkward angle. " The second part of this attack is entirely dependent on the bite succeeding and isn't directly part of the bite itself.
-2 Watch the movement! Remember you had her pulling back in the first part of your post but now her momentum is carrying her forward again?
-2 moderate lacerations to underside of upper neck [2 ooc weeks to heal]
Total: 8
Total for Round Three: 30/50
MERCY
CLARITY
-1 "She attempted to pull her own left limb towards her left," front or back limb?
-2 How is she shifting her weight to her left? Is she balancing just on one leg? The way the post is written makes it seem like both of her front legs are off the ground so balancing on one leg doesn't seem a very strong position.
Total: 7
POWERPLAY
-1 Mercy would likely need to do more than just tuck her chin to avoid the bite
Total: 9
DEFENSES
+1 each seen
Total: 10
ATTACK
+3 bite +1 grip
+0 paw wrap, Mercy is up on two legs and off balance while Avalon is on three it is very unlikely she'd be able to overbalance Avalon from this position
Total: 4
INJURIES
-2 moderate lacerations to left side of muzzle [2 ooc weeks to heal]
Total: 8
Total for Round Three: 38/50
Totals:
AVALON
Total = 106/150
MERCY
Total = 116/150
And the winner is...
MERCY
Avalon must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out, and Mercy's maim is successful
Damage:
NOTES
Doing something a bit different because as you all know I am a slow judge and this took my whole Saturday just about. You will see the deductions and healing times above as well as fight notes. Good work guys! This was a pretty exciting fight, very close! You both have been doing this long enough I don't really have anything in particular to add other than make sure to watch how much movement your characters are doing when they are in such close proximity.
