-2 I didn't see anything to indicate that they were 3 feet apart or any note that this distance was agreed on.
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
5/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
-2 how is Amachi bringing her foreleg down on Mercy's paw? Is she sort of bending down? Did she lunge? -2 What part of the foreleg is she using to try and hit Mercy's paw? There's a good foot or so of space it could affect the force she applies.
Positioning
Directions
Movements
-1 make sure to rebalance your weight when lifting a limb
Damage
6/10 for Attacks:
+1 shoulder throw +1 maim attempt
+1 …foreleg hit?
+3 Bite to muzzle
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
none
Status
3/12 for Experience:
+2 Novice/Fighter
+1 Beginner/Intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Amachi’s round one total: 42/62
MERCY:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
8/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
-2 how is she redirecting damage from Amachi's attack if she's just standing there? Is she leaning or something?
Positioning
Directions
Movements
Damage
6/10 for Attacks:
+1… shoulder out? xD
+1 paw slam
+3 bite +1 grip
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
Severe bruising to left shoulder
Status
6/12 for Experience:
+5 Expert/Fighting
+1 Beginner/Hunting
4/5 for Health:
pack status
Loner
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Mercy’s round one total: 45/62
ROUND TWO
Amachi:
WRITING
6/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
-2 what happened with Mercy's bite attempt? You need to address it even if you mean for her to miss completely
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
-2 it seems like a lot of movement to me for Amachi to charge and in the short span of 3 feet manage to rear up in time to avoid the bite
Realism
8/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
-2 how has her movement displaced Mercy's attack? with her arms around Mercy's neck she's still easily in biting range.
Directions
Movements
General
6/10 for Attacks:
+2 arm wrap
+3 bite +1 grip
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
list injuries (even first round, deductions beginning second)
Status
3/12 for Experience:
+2 Novice/Fighter
+1 Beginner/Intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Amachi’s round two total: 43/62
MERCY:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
10/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
Directions
Movements
General
6/10 for Attacks:
+3 bite +1 grip
+2 forelimb wrap
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
Severe bruising to left shoulder
Status
6/12 for Experience:
+5 Expert/Fighting
+1 Beginner/Hunting
4/5 for Health:
pack status
Loner
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Mercy’s round two total: 51/62
ROUND THREE
Amachi:
WRITING
8/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
-2 you have a jaw attack for Mercy's right cheek then another for her ear
Realism
10/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
Directions
Movements
General
4/10 for Attacks:
+3 bite +1 grip
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
8/10 for Injuries:
-2 moderate bite to left cheek
Status
3/12 for Experience:
+2 Novice/Fighter
+1 Beginner/Intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Amachi’s round three total: 43/62
MERCY:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
10/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
Directions
Movements
General
7/10 for Attacks:
+3 bite +1 grip +1 worsening damage
+2 forelimb wrap
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
8/10 for Injuries:
Severe bruising to left shoulder
-2 moderate bite to right side of face
Status
6/12 for Experience:
+5 Expert/Fighting
+1 Beginner/Hunting
4/5 for Health:
pack status
Loner
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Mercy’s round two total: 50/62
Totals:
AMACHI: 128/186 MERCY: 146/186
And the winner is...
MERCY! AMACHI must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage: (too old to worry about healing times really, sorry about that)
