-2 if you go with an exact distance you should both agree on it and leave a note for us
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
-2 watch the movements with the feint and be specific, three feet is a tiny distance, not a lot of room for feints
Realism
6/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
-2 how is he moving to position himself to hit her throat? -2 what sort of angle is he at?
Directions
Movements
Damage
6/10 for Attacks:
+2 shoulder throw
+3 bite +1 grip
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
list injuries (even first round, deductions beginning second)
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 Beginner/Fighting
+1 Beginner/Intellect
4/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Liar’s round one total: 36/62
Aures:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
10/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
Directions
Movements
Damage
7/10 for Attacks:
+2 shoulder throw +1 maim attempt
+3 bite +1 grip
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
list injuries (even first round, deductions beginning second)
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 Beginner fighter
+1 Beginner Intellect
4/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Aures’s round one total: 48/62
ROUND TWO
Liar:
WRITING
8/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
-2 "he then attempted to tug her leg towards his left." your opponent decides whether or not your attack is successful
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
0/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
-2 how is his back where her face was? Is he sliding under her? -2 "her back right leg started snaking essentially" I don't know what you mean by snaking -2 I'm really lost in your positioning in the final paragraph, there's a lot of movement with the stepping and pivoting and I just can't follow it
Directions
Movements
-2 also if he is still going forward how is the attack displacing? Make sure you're specific with your movements. -2 "he raised his back left leg and attempted to snake it" I really don't know what you mean by "snake" it. Is he just hitting it? Is it a swipe?
General
5/10 for Attacks:
+3 bite +1 grip
+1 paw…. snaking?
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
slight bruising on right side
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 Beginner/Fighting
+1 Beginner/Intellect
4/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Liar’s round two total: 34/62
Aures:
WRITING
5/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
-2 need to attempt this "the woman then bringing her body to face his right side and bringing them into a T formation"
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
-2 "Not only that, but she would keep going, reaching for the man's other hind leg as well" That seems like an awful long way to reach for me
Sportsmanship
-1 I didn't see a category for this. Even though I understand how frustrating it can be the catty comments in the first paragraph were unnecessary and go beyond what the judges consider IC personality.
4/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
-2 "She would seek to snake her paw around his left ankle and attempt to drag it towards her." what limb?
Directions
Movements
-2 you've lost me in how she's mirroring him but raising her leg at the same time, it'd be hard for her to pivot her hind end and kick with it at the same time -2 I'm still a bit lost on how she is 'trapping' his right hind leg
General
8/10 for Attacks:
+2 kick +1 maim attempt for eye
+1 shoulder throw
+3 bite +1 grip
5/5 for Defenses:
list valid defenses up to five
10/10 for Injuries:
list injuries (even first round, deductions beginning second)
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 Beginner fighter
+1 Beginner Intellect
4/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
Aures’ round two total: 38/62
Totals:
Liar: 73/124 Aures: 86/124
And the winner is...
AURES! LIAR must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
