I condemn Thee[May]
07-01-2013, 01:43 PM
May v Tavros for Tortugan Sparring Round 1
TAVROS: 9 for clarity- would?ve liked a little more description of his position/movement to start the fight off 10 for powerplaying. 4 for defenses. while doing in slower might make dodging easier, it shouldn?t be the only defense mentioned, and multiple defenses are needed 5 for attack. If the attack isn?t being given at full speed, it can?t do as much damage< br> 10 for injuries.First round Round one TAVROS Total: 38/50 MAY: 10 for clarity- 10 for powerplaying. 4 for defenses. stabilizing isn?t much of a defense, but with her size, realistically it works, however, multiple defenses are needed 10 for attack. < br> 10 for injuries.First round Round one MAY Total: 44/50 Round 2
TAVROS: 10 for clarity- 10 for powerplaying. 4 for defenses. obviously, his defense didn?t work all the way, but was still a good dodge, however multiple defenses are needed 8 for attack. not entirely sure if this attack counts as separate and new for this round or just finishing off the one from the last round. 9 for injuries. none serious scratches Round two TAVROS Total: 41/50 MAY: 9 for clarity- a few typos made it a bit difficult to read, the attack was alittle unclear 10 for powerplaying. 8 for defenses. 9 for attack. though a tad unclear, still a powerful attack 8 for injuries. counting for her wound to the shoulder Round two MAY Total: 44/50 Round 3
TAVROS: 10 for clarity- 10 for powerplaying. 6 for defenses. have to give a low score here, his ?defense? is putting himself right in the target zone and, with the size difference, it probably wasn?t the smartest move 8 for attack. not sure how possible the attack is, but it certainly would be powerful if landed 6 for injuries. it?s a pretty serious attack landing on his chest and not much is said about it Round three TAVROS Total: 40/50 MAY: 9 for clarity- would?ve liked more description in places 10 for powerplaying. 4 for defenses. not much is given (also, with regards to the ?ears? part, any defense or attack that isn?t described in the main body of the post can?t be put into the sum-up at the bottom) 6 for attack. though the attack will be powerful if landed, it lacks detail, exact target and intent 9 for injuries. superficial scrapes, nothing serious Round three MAY Total: 38/50 Round 4
TAVROS: 8 for clarity- probably had something to do with punctuation, but clarity dropped a lot here 10 for powerplaying. 4 for defenses. no defenses can be listed that aren?t in the main body of the post, 10 for attack. he?s making a good call in a tight spot 8 for injuries. non serious but painful cuts, could?ve easily been serious though, if just slightly deeper/moved Round four TAVROS Total: 40/50 MAY: 10 for clarity- 10 for powerplaying. 4 for defenses. not really using defenses, other than keeping herself planted, she?s letting him keep wounding her shoulder, but at her size and in her position, it works 10 for attack. excellent attack, very dangerous and easily executed from her position 5 for injuries. Tavros is still being allowed to bite into her shoulder, and though it?s a non vital area, should the fight continue it would hamper her movement and strength considerably Round four NAME Total: 40/50 Totals:
TAVROS: 159/200 MAY: 166/200 And the winner is...
MAY! Tavros must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. (Advice: that last move was an endgame, unless Tavros wants to take extra damage from it, he should submit there and then) Damage:
TAVROS - the gash in his cheek and the wounds near his eye will be rather painful, but will start scabbing and healing within the week (so long as he keeps them clean) The wounds to his chest are little more severe and will hamper his movement for a couple days at least, and perhaps take a month to heal completely. MAY- Though the scratches on her nose will heal quickly and cause her no problem, that shoulder is going to keep her laid up for a couple weeks. It?ll be quite painful, and unless attended to a healer could become easily infected. Even if well healed, May will probably walk with a slight limp for the next month or so. (She might get a cool scar out of it though) Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Tavros I advise that you remember to use your size as your advantage. You?re obviously strong for a wolf of stature, and you inflicted some serious damage, but against a wolf like May it would?ve been wiser to use your speed and agility against her. For May While standing tall and taking punishment worked out alright in this fight, if the brawl had kept going, that shoulder might?ve given you some serious trouble. Be careful how much you let the other oppoeant get to you. For the Players Both of you did very well, and I tried to judge this based off of your own writing level/style and not off of what I might think as the ?perfect rp fighter? or some other such ideal. You two were closely matched and responded very well to eachother?s attacks. I heavily advise trying multiple attacks and defenses in your next matches, as each defense is only worth a few points each. You can always read other people?s spars/fights/challenges to get ideas. Well done to both of you! It was a privilege to judge this match. - By [CLASH]
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