-2 not sure how Greed is getting his shoulder at Marina's throat when you state they're directly head on. His shoulder would be lined up with hers. -1 for Greed's bite he'd need to tilt his head to his left to get at the right side of her face.
Positioning
Directions
Movements
Damage
9/10 for Attacks:
+2 shoulder slam +1 severity
+3 bite +1 maim +1 grip
+1 paw slam
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 each seen
10/10 for Injuries:
first round
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 beginner/fighter
+1 beginner/intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
GREEDS’s round total: 48/62
ACAPELLA:
WRITING
8/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
-2 watch assumptions regarding the 'last moment' you don't know that your opponent will let you get that close.
Excessive Movement
Realism
10/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
Directions
Movements
Damage
6/10 for Attacks:
+2 shoulder slam
+3 bite +1 grip
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 each seen
10/10 for Injuries:
first round
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 beginner/hunter
+1 beginner/intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
ACAPELLA’s round total: 46/62
MARINA:
WRITING
8/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
-2 make sure to pick one target, I know it gets tricky in a melee but its best to select your target and just let your opponent determine where it hits. Same goes for later on with "shoulder point into wherever she could get it." choose a target for the shoulder throw.
Excessive Movement
Realism
8/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
Directions
Movements
Damage
-2 I'm not sure what a 'mild' hold means and how Greed has a hold but yet she can still move her head.
7/10 for Attacks:
+2 shoulder throw
+3 bite +1 grip +1 maim
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 each seen
10/10 for Injuries:
first round - mild punctures to cheek, broken toe
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 beginner/fighter
+1 beginner/navigator
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
MARINA’s round total: 45/62
ROUND TWO
GREED:
WRITING
6/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
-2 I'm not sure how Greed could generate enough force to break Acapella's toes considering they're about the same height and build. -2 I'm not sure how relaxing the muscles are suppose to help lesson a blow in a fight
10/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
Positioning
Directions
Movements
General
7/10 for Attacks:
+1 paw stomp at Acapella
+3 bite +1 grip +1 maim
+1 paw stomp at Marina
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 each seen
6/10 for Injuries:
-2 moderate bruising to thigh
-1 light cuts to side
-1 light bruising to chest
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 beginner/fighter
+1 beginner/intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
GREED’s round total: 41/62
ACAPELLA:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
6/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
-2 I'm confused how her trying to get under his abdomen would push his back end forward
Positioning
-2 at what angle is she attacking him?
Directions
Movements
General
3/10 for Attacks:
+3 bite
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 each seen
10/10 for Injuries:
no damage taken
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 beginner/hunter
+1 beginner/intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack status
unhealed event status
unhealed fight status
ACAPELLA’s round two total: 41/62
MARINA:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
Attempts
Godmoding
If/Than Statements
Excessive Movement
Realism
4/10 for Clarity:
Attacks
-2 what part of her body is she pushing forward, I don't understand how she's trying to bowl him over.
Positioning
-2 which direction is she shifting her head? -2 " shifted towards the left" make sure you specify who's left
GREED! Greed's maim is successful. Marina must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Acapella and Greed are free to find new battle partners.
Damage:
1 ooc week - moderate bruising and mild lacerations
2 ooc weeks - severe bruising and moderate lacerations
3 ooc weeks - severe lacerations
Marina's broken toe will take 3 ooc weeks to heal.
