-1 Attacks
“...he sought to drive the entirety of his chest into her body...” - Where on her body?
0 Positioning
0 Directions
-1 Movements
0 Damage
9/10 for Attacks:
+1 for chest slam
+1 for shoulder throw
+3 for bite
+1 for grip
+1 for maim attempt
+1 for stomp
+1 for severity
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 tail aligned with spine
+1 for lowered head
+1 for flattened ears
+1 for narrowed eyes
+1 for raised hackles
10/10 for Injuries:
None this round
Status
4/12 for Experience:
+3 intermediate Fighter
+1 Beginner Intellectual
4/5 for Health:
-1 for minor injuries from previous fight
Greed's round one total: 48/62
ACAPELLA:
WRITING
9/10 for Power Play:
-1 Attempts
“...while still pushing the left front portion of her body into the male...” - The wording suggests that her push is successful
0 Godmoding
0 If/Than Statements
0 Excessive Movement
0 Realism
5/10 for Clarity:
-1 Attacks
“...she also attempted to throw some damage either into his chest right between his windpipe and his own left shoulder.” - Is she hoping to strike between his windpipe and shoulder or is the 'either' in this statement a typo?
-1 Positioning
“Swinging her entire body to her right so that when he whirled around they were facing each other head on.” - Greed was already attempting to place them head on. Swinging her body to the right would alter this positioning.
0 Directions
-0 Movements
-2 Damage
“Since she had taken two steps to the right she was able to avoid his full chest allowing her left front leg and shoulder to take the blow to protect her windpipe” - How much damage did she take?
“When she felt his left shoulder move to lift up his leg she pushed herself, along with her left shoulder forward to keep his foot slam from working” - How did this protect her paw from harm? Did she lift it when she pushed forward?
-1 General
8/10 for Attacks:
+1 shoulder throw (counter)
+1 shove
+3 for bite
+1 for grip
+1 for maim attempt
+1 for paw swipe
4/5 for Defenses:
+1 for spread toes
+1 for nails dug in
+1 for weight distributed
-1 Acapella's paw swipe negated this defense as she didn't redistribute her weight after raising her paw.
+1 for bunched skin
+1 for tail aligned
10/10 for Injuries:
Unspecified bruising to shoulder
Minor lacerations to scruff
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 Beginner Hunter
+1 Beginner Intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack wolf
Acapella's round one total: 43/62
ROUND TWO
GREED:
WRITING
8/10 for Power Play:
0 Attempts
-0 Godmoding
-0 If/Than Statements
-0 Excessive Movement
-2 Realism
Greed's elbow neck pinch thing strikes me as unrealistic. Wolf legs don't bend inwards in a way that would make this move feasible.
“Due to this, her paw would miss his and her attempted bite would hit the fatty part of his left foreleg close to his chest...” Wouldn't Greed rearing up cause Acapella's bite to land lower since she was biting downwards?
9/10 for Clarity:
-0 Attacks
-0 Positioning
-0 Directions
-0 Movements
-1 General
8/10 for Attacks:
+2 for bear hug
+1 for shove
+3 for bite
+1 for maim attempt
+1 for elbow neck pinch
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 for raised hackles
+1 for narrowed eyes
+1 for weight distributed
+1 for widened stance
+1 for tucked chin
7/10 for Injuries:
-1 for moderate bruising to left shoulder
-2 for moderate puncture wounds
Status
4/12 for Experience:
+3 intermediate Fighter
+1 Beginner Intellectual
4/5 for Health:
-1 for minor injuries from previous fight
Greed’s round two total: 45/62
ACAPELLA:
WRITING
7/10 for Power Play:
-1 Attempts
“...while pushing her upper half of her body forward into his chest...” This whole sentence reads as if she has already met with some success in this attack.
-0 Godmoding
-0 If/Than Statements
-1 Excessive Movement
One second she's stepping forward on her left hind leg to aid her shove and the next she's using that same leg in another attack
-1 Realism
For trying to push him over backwards while standing on one hind leg and attempting to hook one of his hind legs with her raised hind leg.
8/10 for Clarity:
-1 Attacks
“...looking to gain a grip and put her paws onto his chest.” - How exactly is she trying to get a grip?
-0 Positioning
-0 Directions
-0 Movements
-1 General
7/10 for Attacks:
+1 for grip with forepaws
+3 for bite
+2 for shove with upper body
+1 for leg hook
1/5 for Defenses:
+1 for skin scrunched around eyes
+1 for weight distributed
-1 for later moves that nullify this defense
10/10 for Injuries:
None taken this round
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 Beginner Hunter
+1 Beginner Intellectual
5/5 for Health:
pack wolf
Acapella’s round two total: 40/62
Totals:
GREED: 93/124 ACAPELLA: 83/124
And the winner is...
GREED! Acapella must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out and can no longer participate in the raid. Greed was successful in his attempt to completely blind Acapella. As this is Greed's second fight he is barred from getting into more fights.
Damage:
PLAYER1:
Bruising will take 1 ooc week to heal
Moderate lacerations will take 2 ooc weeks to heal
Acapella:
All bruising and lacerations will heal within 1 ooc week
The wounds to her eyes will take 3 ooc weeks to heal
