Attempts
-1 “As soon as he got closer to the larger man...” This should have been attempted.
5/10 for Clarity:
Attack
-2 “...aiming to hit the lower part of his shoulder with the top part his own...” Right or left shoulders? State things plainly; even if the answer seems obvious, state it anyway just in case.
-1 “...to reach for the man's leg.” Which leg?
-1 “He parted his jaws to attempt to nip at the skin right above his sparring partner's elbow...” The outside of his elbow? Which elbow?
Positioning
-1 “Pyre attempted to head toward his opponent at a run...” How is he approaching him? Head on? From the side? More details are needed here
2/10 for Attacks:
+1 for shoulder throw
+1 for bite
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 for flattened ears
+1 for narrowed eyes
+1 for lowered head
+1 for tail level with spine
+1 for widened stance
10/10 for Injuries:
None!
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 beginner fighter
+1 for beginner intellectual
4/5 for Health:
-1 for being a loner
Pyre’s round one total: 37/62
ASHMEDAI:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
None seen!
10/10 for Clarity:
All clear!
3/10 for Attacks:
+1 for chest slam
+1 for grip
+1 for paw stomp
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 for ears flattened
+1 for shoulders rolled
+1 for chin tucked
+1 for hackles raised
+1 for bent knees
10/10 for Injuries:
-1 for scratches to left inner elbow
Status
6/12 for Experience:
+3 for intermediate fighter
+3 For intermediate intellectual
4/5 for Health:
-1 for being a loner
Ashmedai’s round one total: 48/62
ROUND TWO
PYRE:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
None seen!
8/10 for Clarity:
Damage
-2 What kind of damage did Pyre take from Ashemdai's successful attacks?
1/10 for Attacks:
+1 for head butting
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 for raised hackles
+1 for rolled shoulders
+1 for pinned ears
+1 for lowered head
+1 for tail leveled with spine
8/10 for Injuries:
-1 mild bruising to chest (damage assigned by judge)
-1 mild puncture wounds to scruff (damage assigned by judge)
Status
2/12 for Experience:
+1 beginner fighter
+1 for beginner intellectual
4/5 for Health:
-1 for being a loner
Pyre’s round two total: 38/62
ASHMEDAI:
WRITING
9/10 for Power Play:
Realism
-1 “The smaller man hit into Ashmedai's chest, not really inflicting damage on either of them.” I have a hard time believing a full force chest slam wouldn't cause some amount of bruising.
9/10 for Clarity:
Damage
-1 “The smaller man reared his head into Ash's jaw.” What damage did he take from it?
3/10 for Attacks:
+1 for grip
+1 for throw
+1 for shove with foreleg
5/5 for Defenses:
+1 for weight distributed evenly
+1 for narrowed eyes
+1 for bent knees
+1 for raised tail
+1 for raised hackles
8/10 for Injuries:
-1 for mild bruising to chest (damage assigned by judge)
-1 for mild bruising to lower jaw (damage assigned by judge)
Status
6/12 for Experience:
+3 for intermediate fighter
+3 For intermediate intellectual
4/5 for Health:
-1 for being a loner
Ashmedai’s round two total: 44/62
Totals:
Pyre: 75/124 Ashmedai: 92/124
And the winner is...
ASHMEDAI! Pyre must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
BOTH:
All healed by now!
Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
For both: Pretty much everything noteworthy is in my deductions above. Good fight, guys!
