The time has come for blood to spill
10-02-2013, 02:19 AM
TAURIG vs. OZZ for POPPY Round 1
Ozz: 6 for clarity- Watch your spelling, grammar, and wording. You want your post to flow and be easy to read; avoid excessive full stops. You also fail to mention what side Ozz attempts to approach from, what way she tilts her head etc. (you did mention her head tilt in the summary, but you need to put this in your post!) 10 for powerplaying. nothing of note 3 for defenses. ears against her head, tail out, eyes narrowed. I did not count her grip on the shoulders as a defence, it?s more of a back-up upon her attack. 4 for attack. A fairly realistic attack, however it?s hard to picture when you do not tell us your exact angle. Also excessive biting at the scruff is only going to cause pain, especially when all she hopes to do is tear skin- it will not disable Taurig in any way. 10 for injuries.First round Round one OZZ Total: 33/50 TAURIG: 8 for clarity- Your post is easy to read, however you need to be particular with your attacks ?reaching for the closest piece of skin? just won?t make the cut, you need to back up your reasoning with where he aims to grasp and how it would be possible. 10 for powerplaying. None noted. 9 for defenses. Ears flat, hackles raised, rolled shoulders, equally spread limbs, tail aligned with spine, chin tucked, narrowed eyes, gripping toes, jaws open ? awesome work! 5 for attack. Looking to slam right shoulder into Ozz?s lower chest, to disorientate (I can?t see this allowing him to pin her, only that it would throw her weight backwards), jaws open and reaching for closest flesh. 10 for injuries.Shallow skin cuts to the nape. First round. Round one TAURIG Total: 42/50 Round 2
OZZ: 5 for clarity- I really struggled to understand a lot of your post, you should pay more attention to the fluency of your writing, and make sure you always proof read. I?m not going to go through and list everything purely due to the volume of misunderstandings I had- watch your grammar and wording closely, or judges can misinterpret! 6 for powerplaying. ?lowering her head as she pushed her weight onto his head.? You can not presume Taurig didn?t move away from her contact. ?Ozz pushed her head towards his face as he latched onto her side.? Taurig did not intend to latch and hold, and could have well let go by now. 6 for defenses. narrowed eyes, tail tucked, abdomen tense, ears pinned, toes spread/gripping, shoulders ?scrunched? (we prefer rolled or forward). 5 for attack. An attack to the eye is a strong attack, however I don?t think it was the greatest opportunity for her to attempt this due to the pairs angles. The kicking of the back leg did not earn you any points as it is slightly unrealistic in the sense that canines limbs are not very flexible behind, and it is also very hard for her to aim for such a small area (being his forelimbs). 7 for injuries. Bruised right armpit and lacerations on her ribcage. Round two OZZ Total: 35/50 TAURIG: 9 for clarity- I think there was confusion between you two with your angles? Ozz Aims for his left eye but Taurig says it hits his right cheek. I?m only deducting one point here as I believe this may have been a fault on Sei?s behalf. Your post was otherwise clear, however you should mention the intentions of your attacks- is it purely for pain? What else would a neck-bite achieve? Where on the neck does he hope to hit? 9 for powerplaying. Ozz says his bite hits at her side/ribs, but Taurig says it hits her Underbelly. 7 for defenses. Eyes Narrowed, ears pinned, knees bent, toes spread, claws digging for traction, tail tucked, rolled shoulders, jaws open and ready. 6 for attack. A bite to the neck and attempted stomp on her toes, I don?t think his toe stomp would have connected considering it was a kick and not a stamp. 8 for injuries. Scratches to the right cheek. This could have potentially done more damage, keep this in mind. Round two TAURIG Total: 39/50 Round 3
OZZ: 8 for clarity- More clear this time, but you fail to mention the goals of your attacks? ?and she went to get a hold on him? ? where? Why? What does she hope to do other than ?hold him? in this unknown area? EDIT: I have noticed only now that she had locked onto his shoulder, however the clarity was still poor, hence why I found it very easy to miss. 4 for powerplaying. A lot of potential powerplay here. ?As she tasted the blood within her mouth? careful here, you need to say which attack she was tasting the blood from or it can be mistaken for her recent attack, which is what I presumed. Also ?Her body curled around him?, you need to give Taurig time to move. To be safe, say ?attempted?. Taurig also does not try to get her shoulder, he tries to get her neck. Though the biggest issue you had here was ?her right forelimb pressing on his chest?, Taurig didn?t get the chance to say she had connected or not. 6 for defenses. Toes splayed, narrowed eyes, ears pinned, shoulders rolled, balanced weight, tail tucked. 5 for attack. A bite to the shoulder is a decent attack. You were not awarded points for her attempted push at his chest, it is a slightly awkward and unlikely angle, and canines do not bare enough strength in the forelimbs to be able to push another away (especially one larger). 5 for injuries. Deep wound on the right shoulder. Round three OZZ Total: 28/50 TAURIG: 9 for clarity- Clear, however you lost a point for what I believe to be verging on excess movement. You say he drops his shoulder away before Ozz can hit her mark, I like that you allowed her to hit (just not on target) but I?m still not convinced he could judge her potential attack and react to it that quickly. 10 for powerplaying. None noted 7 for defenses. Chin tucked, eyes narrowed, ears flattened, knees bent, toes spread, limbs even, shoulders rolled, tail tucked. (several of these were all related to balance) 4 for attack. Throwing his weight forward suddenly, to attempt to barrel into Ozz. Where? 8 for injuries. Skin scathes on upper shoulder. Round three TAURIG Total: 38/50 Totals:
OZZ: 96/150 TAURIG: 119 + 2 (duty) = 121/150 And the winner is...
TAURIG! OZZ must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Poppy remains a member of Tortuga. Damage:
OZZ- Ozz? deep lacerations to her shoulder and side/ribs will take approx. two (2) OOC weeks to heal. They may be prone to scarring and Ozz will be subject to temporary lameness for the duration of her healing time. TAURIG- Mild lacerations sustained to the shoulder and face will take approx. one (1) OOC week to heal. Taurig has won the challenge and Poppy will remain within Tortuga, Ozz may not challenge for her again during this thread or in the immediate future. Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Good job guys! You both did really well. Sei I suggest you practice spar more and take into account what suggestions you are given, I say this only because I struggle to understand the clarity of your posts and the suggestions of others can help you to improve. Also, learn the basic defences and learn to incorporate them into your posts. Wolf great work, but don?t be afraid to use more aggression in your attacks- you will score better. Awesome defences! <3 Yumps - By [YUMPY]
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