VOODOO vs LURID for PACK CHALLENGE
ROUND ONE
VOODOO:
WRITING
9/10 for Power Play:
- -1 make sure you attempt to close the distance between you and your opponent
6/10 for Clarity:
- -1 what angle is Voodoo attacking Lurid at?
- -1 how does Voodoo move to line her shoulder up with Lurid's chest?
- -1 what is Voodoo's damage intent with the shoulder slam?
- -1 what is Voodoo's damage intent with the bite? Is she going for a grip or just damage?
4/10 for Attacks:
2/5 for Defenses:
10/10 for Injuries:
Status
4/12 for Experience:
- +1 Beginner Fighter
- +3 Intermediate Healer
4/5 for Health:
VOODOO’s round one total: 39/62
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LURID:
WRITING
9/10 for Power Play:
- -1 "Once she had the woman in her jaws she would shake her head violently" if/then statement
7/10 for Clarity:
- -1 how did Lurid move so that Voodoo's shoulder slam hit her shoulder and not her chest?
- -1 "and moved her left paw a step" which left paw?
- -1 "raising up just a bit on her back legs as she with the force she used" It's not clear what this motion is trying to illustrate
2/10 for Attacks:
2/5 for Defenses:
10/10 for Injuries:
- first round
- moderate bruising to left shoulder
- scratches to left shoulder
Status
10/12 for Experience:
- +6 Master Fighter
- +4 Advanced Intellect
4/5 for Health:
LURID’s round one total: 44/62
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ROUND TWO
VOODOO:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
5/10 for Clarity:
- -1 I don't follow how Voodoo is attempting to move them into a T position, especially as Voodoo would be more on Lurid's right instead of left based on previous attacks.
- -1 where along Lurid's body is Voodoo trying to form this T? I don't follow their positioning.
- -1 what motion does Voodoo intend to use with her paw swipe to unbalance Voodoo?
- -1 " force her left shoulder and body forward aiming" what other part of her body is she pushing forward?
- -1 what is the damage intent for her bite? Does Voodoo want to just cause damage or is she going for a hold?
4/10 for Attacks:
- +1 paw swipe
- +1 shoulder throw (at such close range it won't do as much damage against a solid target)
- +2 bite
5/5 for Defenses:
10/10 for Injuries:
Status
4/12 for Experience:
- +1 Beginner Fighter
- +3 Intermediate Healer
4/5 for Health:
VOODOO’s round two total: 42/62
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LURID:
WRITING
9/10 for Power Play:
- -1 there's a bit too much movement. Lurid moves to her right and then is moving to her left at the end of the post. You need to make room for your opponent to react
6/10 for Clarity:
- -1 whose right is Lurid moving toward? 'Her' could apply to either of them
- -1 Its not clear how Lurid avoided the paw swipe
- -1 how did Lurid avoid the shoulder throw?
- -1 Lurid's motion to the left isn't clear. Is she stepping to the left, pivoting, etc.?
3/10 for Attacks:
- +2 headbutt
- +1 maim force
5/5 for Defenses:
9/10 for Injuries:
- -1 light bruising to left shoulder (judge deduction from unaddressed attack)
Status
10/12 for Experience:
- +6 Master Fighter
- +4 Advanced Intellect
4/5 for Health:
LURID’s round two total: 46/62
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ROUND THREE
VOODOO:
WRITING
10/10 for Power Play:
7/10 for Clarity:
- -1 " swing her body to the right" make sure to specify whose right when they are facing different directions
- -1 "Aiming to push her body into Lurid’s left side." not sure if this is positioning related or an attack?
- -1 its unclear where on the left front leg Voodoo is aiming for
3/10 for Attacks:
5/5 for Defenses:
9/10 for Injuries:
- -1 light bruising to right cheek
Status
4/12 for Experience:
- +1 Beginner Fighter
- +3 Intermediate Healer
4/5 for Health:
VOODOO’s round three total: 42/62
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LURID:
WRITING
8/10 for Power Play:
- -1 "Should she be successful, she sought to topple the girl and pin her to the ground" if/then statement. Keep your intent limited to the initial attack. If going for a grip say you're going for a grip. Don't bother with what happens next until you actually get that grip.
- -1 "Should she not be successful in her attacks" watch these should, if/then kinds of statements. Since we don't know how this is going to go it can create confusion. For example I can't really count those defenses as they are a 'maybe'. Maybe they'll happen maybe they won't.
5/10 for Clarity:
- -1 how is she moving to the right? side stepping? Jumping? pivoting? its not clear.
- -1 "Snatching her leg back as" you need to specify which leg she's snatching away
- -1 make sure to specify where damage is occurring. Where are the scratches on her left forelimb?
- -1 what damage was done to her hind paw? If you don't specify your opponent can infer the severity and the judge will as well during judging
- -1 how is she moving to try and sit on Voodoo?
2/10 for Attacks:
1/5 for Defenses:
7/10 for Injuries:
- -1 minor scratches on left foreleg
- -2 moderate bruising to hind right paw
Status
10/12 for Experience:
- +6 Master Fighter
- +4 Advanced Intellect
4/5 for Health:
LURID’s round three total: 37/62
Totals:
VOODOO: 123/186
LURID: 127/186
And the winner is...
LURID! VOODOO must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
VOODOO:
- -1 light bruising to right cheek
LURID:
- moderate bruising to left shoulder
- scratches to left shoulder
- minor scratches on left foreleg
- moderate bruising to hind right paw
- By Lunarcat7
