SEVEN NATION ARMY
10-29-2013, 05:04 PM
MIDNIGHT vs. LOVA for SIEGE Round 1
MIDNIGHT: 5 for clarity. There are lots of ?she?s and ?her?s in your post that confuse who you are referring too; I know it?s hard, but sometimes it?s best to go by names even if your char doesn?t know them. Also be more specific with where you are biting/attacking. ?turn her body so that it lay at right angles to the dames own?- you are getting the hang of specifics, but where is her head? Is she at the shoulder of Lova, or the rump etc? Also a lot going on in your post and found it tricky to pin-point attacks. 10 for powerplaying. nothing of note 2 for defenses. Lowered chin over throat, tense muscles - Just listing defences in your summary does not account for them in your post! 6 for attack. Worsening damage to nape, single attack to the right shoulder. 7 for injuries. Moderate bite wound to the shoulder. Round one MIDNIGHT Total: 30/50 LOVA: 6 for clarity. Where on her right leg did she aim? And was it the foreleg? Watch your post flow. 7 for powerplaying. ?making an inch deep wound?- Midnight never specified this! 9 for defenses. 4 for attack. Single attack to the right forelimb? 6 for injuries.Worsened damage to scruff, bite wound to shoulder. Round one LOVA Total: 32/50 Totals:
LOVA: 32/50 MIDNIGHT: 30/50 And the winner is...
LOVA! Midnight is now knocked out of The Siege. Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) This was a 2 point difference and it absolutely kills me- very hard when people are evenly matched haha. But it shows that you both did well! Wanderer, I don?t doubt that you would have won if you had put your defences into your actual post; it was what gave you your loss, which is a real shame. Seimei you are improving, just make sure you keep an eye on your PP and Clarity. Good defences! - By [YUMPY]
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