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11-24-2013, 07:20 PM

AZALEA v JET for SEIGE



Round 1
Azalea:

4 for clarity. What angle did she approach from? How did she plan to sever the tendon, using her jaws? Where did she plan to attack on his hind leg, exactly?

8 for powerplaying. ?jaws would stayed locked after biting down,? you can?t assume it will land.

8 for defenses.Knees bent, tail tucked, hackles raised, narrowed eyes, ears back, paws gripping, shoulders forwards, jaws ready.

3 for attack. Single bite to the right hind limb (+3)

10 for injuries.First round

Round one Azalea Total: 33/50


Jet:

6 for clarity. Some of your lines are confusing; you say Azalea hits the ankle, but then he lifts his foot after feeling her teeth, then puts it back down- is he pulling out of her grip? You say later she still is holding him, however I can?t imagine him succeeding in lifting his foot whilst Azalea had a hold. ?cause a lethal bite to her face,? what side of her face?

6 for powerplaying. ?the action of his hind leg lifting in that motion that caused her intended attack to miss her target,? I feel as though you are suggesting he lifted his limb up in expectation of her attack, he wouldn?t have been able to react fast enough, and you also mentioned earlier he didn?t see her approach- watch realism! ?his jaws would open wide to cause a lethal bite to her face,?do not assume.

9 for defenses. Ears pinned, tail tucked, chin tucked, eyes narrowed, hackles raised, shoulders rolled, muscles rigid, toes splayed, jaws agape

6 for attack. Pointed toes to the left eye (+2), bite to the eye and jaw (+4)

10 for injuries.First round- skin deep cuts on right hind limb.

Round one Jet Total: 37/50


Totals:


Azalea: 33/50

Jet: 37/50



And the winner is...


Jet! Azalea must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. She is now knocked out of The Siege. Jet?s attempt at maim was declined, due to the poor clairty of intentions, and no ooc agreement having been made.

Damage:


Azalea- Pending: should the toe-kick land, Five OOC Days to heal. Should the bite to the face land, 10 OOC days to heal.


Jet- Lacerations to right hind limb, some mild lameness during healing period and will take 10 OOC days to heal.


Notes:



Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Trynx, incorporate more complex attacks and watch clarity.

Drake, be careful of your PP! Also a note that the damage you attempt to deal to Surreal will be void, you cannot continue to damage a character after a fight unless you are given permission by the player.




- By [Yumpy]