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The Judge · 03-06-2014, 02:15 PM

SIX v ZAJIA for MAIM / DOMINANCE

Round 1

SIX:

8 for clarity- A short but generally clear post, with a few grammar issues. (-2)

6 for powerplaying. no time was given for your opponent to react to the charge (-1), no angle or approximate distance was given from which direction Six was coming from or what part of Zajia's chest she wanted to hit (-2), wrapping her paws right after her attempted slam is a lot of movement with no reaction time for Zajia (-1)

7 for defenses. tail aligned with spine, ears flat, eyes narrowed, knees bent, lips curled, neck tucked, hackles raised,

6 for attack. slamming with chest(+2), wrapping legs around shoulders(+1), biting at right ear(+3) 
10 for injuries.First round

Round one SIX Total: 37/50

ZAJIA:

7 for clarity- Some phrases don't make sense, creating some clarity issues. (-2) The post could have been more detailed. (-1)

0 for powerplaying. Zajia is much smaller than Six, without moving against her charge, she should be affected somehow and should have taken damage to her chest (-3), you can not assume that your attacks hit, there was no attempt to use her right paw (-2), as Zajia didn't move against Six's attacks, there's no reason for the injuries to her ear to be so slight (-2), you don't mention Six's attempt to get her legs wrapped around Zajia's shoulders (-2) , you need to specify how much damage was done to Zajia's ear - how deep are the wounds? Is she missing flesh? Is it torn? Ripped apart? (-2) br>
6 for defenses. chin tucked, on all four paws, knees bent, tail out, eyes squinted, ears back

4 for attack. batting with right paw (+1), biting at throat (+3) 
10 for injuries.First round

Round one ZAJIA Total: 27/50

Round 2

SIX:

7 for clarity- Some grammar and clarity issues (-2) The post could have been more detailed (-1)

7 for powerplaying. You need to specify the injuries to Six's shoulder - how deep is the wound? How much is it bleeding? (-2), you don't specify which leg is raised over Zalia's shoulder? (-1)

6 for defenses. knees bent, tail aligned with spine, ears flat, hackles raised, eyes slit, lips curled,

5 for attack. bite to Zalia's ear (+3), attacking damaged area (+1), pushing down with her leg for leverage (+1) 
7 for injuries. bite wound to neck (-3)

Round two SIX Total: 32/50

ZALIA:

6 for clarity- "the claws... digging into her skin" Six never attacked with her claws (-2), this post could have much been more detailed (-2)

2 for powerplaying. Zajia is much smaller than Six, she can not get her onto her back by simply pushing against her (-2), you can not position your opponent without it being pp"would use the new position to her benefit in pinning her to the grounod" (-3), you can not have your attacks auto hit without it being pp "jaws clamped around Six's neck" (-3)

2 for defenses. paw returned to the ground, weight shifted

4 for attack. pushing with her left side(+1), biting at Six's neck (+3) 
6 for injuries. harshly torn ear(-3), scratches to shoulder (-1)

Round two ZAJIA Total: 20/50

Round 3

SIX:

8 for clarity- Some minor clarity issues, but a generally clear post. Better on the detail with this one.

5 for powerplaying. don't assume the amount of bloodshed from your opponent (-2), no attempt made with the snap for Zajia's ear (-1), you need to elaborate on damage done by yout opponent (-2)

7 for defenses. ears flattened, hackles raised, tail aligned with spine, eyes slit, knees bent, claws digging into ground, lips curled

4 for attack. bite to Zajia's ear (+3), bite to injured area (+1) 
6 for injuries. Bite to neck (-3), off balance (-1)

Round three SIX Total:30/50

ZAJIA:

7 for clarity-missing a lot of detail. (-3)

4 for powerplaying. six was never pinned (-3), your attacks must be attempts "she would crunch down hard on her collarbone" (-3)

3 for defenses. paws on the ground, tail aligned with spine, knees bent,

3 for attack. bite to Six's neck / throat (+3) 
6 for injuries. ear split in two, minor maim (-4)

Round three ZAJIA Total: 23/50

Totals:

Six: 99/150

Zajia: 70/150

And the winner is...

Six! Zajia must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:

Six- No major injuries taken.

Zalia- missing half of her right ear.

Notes:

Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Wolves don't have collarbones! Other than that, both of you could use more defenses in your posts - and although short posts are fine, be sure to be clear with directions, angles, injuries and intentions regardless of the length. Be careful of how you word your attacks, PP got you both quite a bit during this fight. If you have any questions send me a message here or on skype!

- By [Serendipity]

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