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03-16-2014, 08:24 PM
ROMAN v JAEGER for SPAR Round 1
ROMAN: 9 for clarity- Moderate detail with few grammatical errors. Attack lacking detail and specificity (-1) 10 for powerplaying. Allowance made for Jaeger to dodge, no mention of an attack sure to land. Intent clear without forcing an action one way or another. 4 for defenses. Chin tucked protecting her throat, tail raised for balance, weight distributed, ears pinned. 3 for attack. Subtly positioning herself before the fight (+1) Lungeing for scruff (+2)< br> 10 for injuries.First round Round one ROMAN Total: 36/50 JAEGER: 5 for clarity- Minor grammatical and continuity errors. Vague remarks about using legs for protection (-2) Vague attack description ?Any flesh near her scruff? (-1) No defense mentioned for how he can get close enough to retaliate without dodging her attack (-2) 8 for powerplaying. Assumes he was able to dodge her attack while delivering his own (-2) 4 for defenses. Elevated position, Forelegs positioned before stomach, Legs spread for balance, Chin tucked 2 for attack. Very vague attack, lacking detail.< br> 10 for injuries.First round Round one JAEGER Total: 29/50 Round 2
ROMAN: 8 for clarity- A bit chaotic and terse, lacking detail (-2) 3 for powerplaying. Assumed that she had caught Jaeger's paw (-3) Attempted to bite him twice within the same post (-2) Assumed she could grip him with her forearms (-2) 3 for defenses. Legs spread, Tail extended, Jaws open wide 3 for attack. Rearing up to meet him (+1) Aiming bite at scruff (+2)< br> 8 for injuries. Bite wound to scruff (-2) Round two ROMAN Total: 25/50 JAEGER: 5 for clarity- Moderate detail, indecisively aimed attack (-2) Does not mention left vs. right in attack or defense (-2) Uncertain positioning as motion progresses (-1) 10 for powerplaying. Well done noting the injured paw, as well as the attack on scruff. 2 for defenses. Attempt to push and off-balance, Legs splayed for balance. 1 for attack. Short and terse, vague. Attempted bite towards head/ear (+1)< br> 6 for injuries. Minor damage to paw (-1) Bite wounds to scruff (-2) Round two JAEGER Total: 24/50 Round 3
ROMAN: 5 for clarity- Unspecified aim in attacks and vague injuries (-3) Very vague wording, structure hard to understand, such as where her pain stems from (-2) 7 for powerplaying. Assumes a bite lands, despite not specifying where she aimed (-3) 3 for defenses. Eyes shut, Ears pinned, Tail lashing 1 for attack. Blind attack aimed towards jugular (+1)< br> 4 for injuries. Bite wound on head (-2) Minor grazing on ear (-1) Wound on scruff (-2) Minor bruising on shoulder (-1) Round three ROMAN Total:20/50 JAEGER: 6 for clarity-Lack of grammatical errors, yet choppy. Uncertain positioning (-1) Uncertain where his leg comes from, or how it will affect her without further harming his throat (-2) Still uncertain where his initial bite has landed (-1) 10 for powerplaying. Takes damage well, 3 for defenses. Legs spread for balance, Tail extended, Toes splayed 3 for attack. Further pressure on skull (+2) Shove to shoulder (+1)< br> 7 for injuries. Bite to neck (-3) Round three JAEGER Total: 29/50 Totals:
Roman: 81/150 Jaeger: 82/150 And the winner is...
Jaeger! Roman must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Roman- Moderate wounds to scruff and moderate wounds to scalp, minor nicks in ear. Jaeger- Minor damage to front right paw, moderate wounds to neck. Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Both posts consistently lack clarity when it came to describing where the attacks originated from and where they were meant to land. More points could also be found in the defense category! Make sure to refresh your defenses every round for an easy boost. - By [Fox]
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