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03-23-2014, 06:34 PM

?owyn v D?gmar for Practice



Round 1
?owyn:

8 for clarity- what direction did she lunge? how are they positioned?

9 for powerplaying. try not to line up future attacks, they only confuse the other player

6 for defenses. 6 viable defenses, 1 point each

5 for attack. +2 forepaw shove, +3 bite to the shoulder

10 for injuries.First round

Round one ?owyn Total: 38/50


D?gmar:

9 for clarity- good angles, make sure to specify attacks as listed below

10 for powerplaying. Notes

6 for defenses. six viable defenses, 1 point each

4 for attack. is this a bite to the area above the knee? not clear, only 2 points for that. +2 for the shoulder thrust

10 for injuries.First round

Round one D?gmar Total: 39/50

Round 2

?owyn:

9 for clarity- again, she's aiming for the molaris - but with what? her teeth, shoulder? make this clear.

10 for powerplaying. Notes

6 for defenses. six defenses, one point each

5 for attack. +2 shoulder attack, +3 muzzle attack

6 for injuries. -4 broken rib

Round two ?owyn Total: 36/50


D?gmar:

10 for clarity- Notes

10 for powerplaying. Notes

6 for defenses. six viable defenses, one point each

6 for attack. +4 bite to the jaw, +2 front limb grasp

5 for injuries. -2 bruising on shoulder, -2 strained muscles, -1 lacerations

Round two D?gmar Total: 37/50


Round 3
?owyn:

7 for clarity- there was almost no detail given in your attack, I know it's the last round but don't get lazy.

10 for powerplaying. Notes

7 for defenses. seven viable defenses, 1 point each

4 for attack. +2 each attack

8 for injuries. -2 lacerations

Round three ?owyn Total: 36/50


D?gmar:

10 for clarity- Notes

10 for powerplaying. Notes

6 for defenses. six viable defenses, one point each

4 for attack. +3 bite, +1 extra point for attack on previously injured area

6 for injuries. -2 lacerations, -2 bruising

Round three D?gmar Total: 36/50


Totals:


?owyn: 110/150

D?gmar: 112/150



And the winner is...


D?gmar! ?owyn must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:

Due to the post-date of this judging, it's really not practical for me to give you injuries because they would have worn off by now. If you decide upon lasting injuries that's fine by me - but that's up to ya'll.


Notes:



Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
You both did really well on this fight, and it was a narrow victory! Work on incorporating a few more defenses, being really really specific, and not making it sound like you're writing a scripted fight. It was a little robotic to read lines like "she kept her defenses from the last round". Wolves don't know about the rounds ;)



- By [Andy]