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04-11-2014, 01:33 PM

CHRYSANTHE v ALPINE for SPAR



Round 1
NAME: Chrysanthe

10 for clarity-

10 for powerplaying.

10 for defenses.

8 for attack. using her weight when colliding head on (+2), attempted bite on the side of his neck(+4), moving to swipe at his left leg to throw him off balance(+2)

10 for injuries.First round

Round one Chrysanthe Total: 48/50


NAME: Alpine

10 for clarity-

10 for powerplaying.

5 for defenses. low to the ground (+1), weight evenly distributed (+1), claws digging into the ground (+1), ears pinned (+1), using his head in an attempt to deflect bite to the neck (+1)

4 for attack. using his weight to shove Chrysanthe (+2), attempt to smack her muzzle with his head (+2)

10 for injuries.First round

Round one Alpine Total: 37/50






Round 2

CHRYSANTHE:

9 for clarity- some grammatical issues, some possible key words left out

10 for powerplaying.

9 for defenses. hackles lifted (+1), muscles tight (+1), shoulders scrunched forward (+1), eyes narrowed (+1), ears pinned (+1), stomach clenched +1), toes splayed (+1), back legs squared (+1), jaws open for attack (+1)

4 for attack. attempting to grab a hold of his left leg (+2), biting at the his throat (+2)

8 for injuries. bruising to the chest (-2)

Round two Chrysanthe Total: 31/50


ALPINE:

10 for clarity-

10 for powerplaying.

3 for defenses. weight spread (+1), body low to the ground (+1), claws gripping the ground (+1)

4 for attack. attempting to grab a hold of the ankle (+2), attempting to pull the same limb forward (+2)

8 for injuries. Bruising the chest/shoulder (-2)

Round two Alpine Total: 35/50



Totals:


CHRYSANTHE: 69/100

ALPINE: 63/100



And the winner is...


CHRYSANTHE! ALPINE must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:


CHRYSANTHE- Bruising to the chest/shoulder area, will heal in 5 ooc days


ALPINE- Bruising to his shoulder, will heal in 5 ooc days


Notes:



Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes

For Chrysanthe
Just a few grammatical issues that made parts a little confusing, but otherwise you?re defenses were great and so were your attacks☺

For Alpine
Be sure to include as many defenses as possible, you used some good attacks, but don?t be afraid to really go after your opponent even if it?s a friendly spar☺


- By [Saffie]