The rhythm's a little off
05-05-2014, 04:56 PM
S'alkrie VS Talvi Round 1
S'alkrie:CLARITY: 8 / 10 POWERPLAYING: 10 / 10 DEFENSES: 7 / 10 ATTACK: 7 / 10 INJURIES: 10 / 10 Round one S'alkrie Total: 41 / 50 Talvi: CLARITY: 9 / 10 POWERPLAYING: 9 / 10 DEFENSES: 8 / 10 ATTACK: 8 / 10 INJURIES: 10 / 10 Round one Talvi Total: 44 / 50 Round 2
S'alkrie: CLARITY: 7 / 10 POWERPLAYING: 9 / 10 DEFENSES: 5 / 10 ATTACK: 7 / 10 INJURIES: 8 / 10 Round two S'alkrie Total: 36 / 50 Talvi: CLARITY: 9 / 10 POWERPLAYING: 10 / 10 DEFENSES: 4 / 10 ATTACK: 7 / 10 INJURIES: 8 / 10 Round two Talvi Total: 38 / 50 Totals:
S'alkrie: 77 /100 Talvi: 82 /100 And the winner is...
Talvi! S'alkrie must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
S'alkrie - Light brusing to the jaw, shallow bite mark on the shoulder and possibly to the side of her neck from Talvi's last attack Talvi- Shallow graze on the top of her head and bite to the top of her scruff Notes:
Lui: I loved the attacks you used, but, especially for the first post, there was sometimes too much going on at once and it would get jumbled and hard to read. I'd also suggest actually putting every move of the fight into the post and not in brackets. Otherwise really good!Eldar: Only note I have is to pack in more defenses and play around more with the attacks. The only part that was a little hard to understand was Talvi's very last attack. Very good! Both: Very realistic first fight for the both of them and well writen, enjoyed reading it. If you have any questions let me know <3 -Shelby |