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06-19-2014, 06:56 PM

Bandit v Aislinn for Dominance



Round 1
Bandit:

6 for clarity- -2 struggled to follow your post. Bandit lept? Where did she intend to land? -2 ?She?d try to get her claws in contact with the woman?s left leg ? front of hind? Which of Bandit?s paws is she attacking with? One or both? Please specify. -2 ?she would try to push her down with all her weight ? how did she intend to push her opponent down? Though her bite or through her paws?

10 for powerplaying. none seen

4 for defenses. +1 for each seen

4 for attack. +2 bite to back of neck +1 an area of control +1 clawing at leg

10 for injuries.First round

Round one Bandit Total: 34/50


Aislinn:

9 for clarity- mostly clear

10 for powerplaying. -2 ?thrashing wildly as she attempted to pierce deeper into the flesh? Bandit didn?t mention thrashing in her post. -2 ?violently shook the bandit off before her teeth could sink deeper? you can?t assume she released her grip, you must attempt to throw your opponent off. -4 ?Catching the bandit off-guard, Aislinn slammed her weight into the bandit before her left leg flung the bandit a few feet away? you must attempt to do anything that relates or makes contact with the other character

5 for defenses. +1 for each seen

2 for attack. +1 slam +1 push with leg

10 for injuries.First round

Round one Aislinn Total: 26/50

Round 2

Bandit:

8 for clarity- -2 I struggled to follow what happened in your first paragraph

10 for powerplaying. none seen

4 for defenses. +1 for each one seen

5 for attack. +3 for bite to leg +2 for body slam

10 for injuries. none received

Round two Bandit Total: 37/50


Aislinn:

9 for clarity- -2 ?before tumbling to the ground in a cloud of dust ? who tumbled to the ground?

6 for powerplaying. -2 ?slamming the wolf off her side ? you must attempt to do this ?The wolf tumbled in a cloud of dust once more ? you cannot say how your attack affected your opponent, this is up to your opponent

1 for defenses. +1 for every one seen (you must redo your defenses in your post every round)

1 for attack. +1 for knocking down

7 for injuries. -1 bruising -2 clawed

Round two Aislinn Total: 24/50


Totals:


Bandit: 71/100

Aislinn: 50/100



And the winner is...


Bandit! Aislinn must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:


Bandit - None


Aislinn - Scratches that will take 1 ooc week to heal. Bruising will heal in a few IC days


Notes:



Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes

For Elisandra
Eli, you did a great job of attempting to do things. I would suggest you work on your clarity and your defenses. We look for 10 different defenses or more. If you like you can message me with questions! Some other things to note is we do prefer if you take damage from attacks, I didn?t dock you points on this this time.

For Millie
Millie, a few things to work on would be powerplaying. You need to use phrases like ?attempt? and ?try?. For example ?Bob attempted to throw his hip into Tim?s shoulder and push him away?. As well expand on your attacks a bit more. Go for a bite or a grab, try and trip your opponent rather then just shoving them away. Lastly defenses don?t carry on from your first post, you must reset them with each new round in your IC post. If you have any questions as well feel free to message me!


- By [Dione]