KO Your Ass
06-28-2014, 11:06 AM
Hati v Sin for Spar Round 1
Hati: 6 for clarity- -2 at what angle was he coming at sin? -2 where abouts on his shoulder was he trying hit? 5 for powerplaying. -2 ' jaws flashed immediatly toward the left side of sins neck.' You cant assume it was on his left side withought an attempt. it should be- ' attempts for jaws to flash immediatly'... so on. -3 for ' left paw hooked around the front of sins forelegs' you cant assume that he actually got the foreleg. 10 for defenses. +1 for each seen 5 for attack. +3 for trying to hook on forelegs, -1 for the powerplay. +3 for bite. 10 for injuries.First round Round one Hati Total: 36/50 Sin: 2 for clarity- -2 Where abouts of hatis chest did he try to hit? -2 where abouts on sins head did hati get Nearer the top of the head, side of it, closer to his eyes? -2 ' strive to grasprasp elsewhere upon his opponents scarred visage.' you need to be more specific then that. -2 ' sharpened claws would curl inwards, attempting to dif into the creatures skin.' where abouts? 10 for powerplaying. None seen! 10 for defenses. +1 for each seen 6 for attack. +2 for attempted shove to chest, +2 for attempted hold on muzzle, + 2 for trying to push weight onto opponent. Some 10 for injuries.First round Round one Sin Total: 38/50 Round 2
Hati: 3 for clarity- -2 ' attack slid along his skin' where abouts? -2 ' twisting head slightly' left or right? -2 'whipping his blood slick head back around.' to where? -1 the last sentence was rather confusing to understand. 10 for powerplaying. none seen! 10 for defenses. +1 for each seen 5 for attack. +3 for attempting to bite sins neck +2 for attempting to throw sin to the ground 6 for injuries. -2 for bruised chest and -2 for shallow gashes on top of muzzle Round two Hati Total: 34/50 Sin: 6 for clarity- -2 it was rather difficult to understand, especially in the last paragraph. -2 'snaked forward in an attempt to grasp hatis head.' snaked how? did he angle his head, push up slightly to grab it, twist left or right? 8 for powerplaying. -2 ' sin would twist his right shoulder inwards while pushing upwards to bring their bodes closer' Dont assume/ 10 for defenses. +1 for each seen 5 for attack. +2 f0r attempted push to keep them close/ +2 for attempt to grasp haties head +1 for trying to worse is successful 7 for injuries. Lacerations -3 Round two Sin Total: 36/50 Totals:
Hati: 70/100 Sin: 72/100 And the winner is...
Sin! Hati must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Hati- Bruising and mild cuts sin- Bruising and mild wounds Notes:
Try to watch clarity, you need to be very specific Notes For Tea You need to make sure you do multiple attacks to gain points, thats what let you down the most. Watch powerplay also, dont assume. By putting in an attempt can make all the difference! For Sasuke Watch Clarity! You need to be a lot more specific, you where good at not powerplaying so much and i congratulate you for that! - By [Luisiana]
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