Hard Luck Love (OLYMPUS)
07-04-2014, 12:07 AM
katja v virgil for svetlana ROUND ONE
KATJA ----- clarity -- 0 out of 10 ; where is katja in relation to virgil as she attempts to close the distance between them? is she approaching from head on, perpendicularly, etc? (-2) ?...she twisted to the side?? twisted to what side? (-2) ?...she pirouetted to face where her left shoulder had been? pirouetted in what direction? where is katja in relation to virgil now? (-2) it seemed kind of unlikely/awkward that katja would manage to pivot so easily while sitting (-1). which part of katja?s chest intends to impact which shoulder of virgil?s? (-4) what are katja?s intentions with her chest attack against vir?s shoulder? (-2) where exactly are katja?s claws seeking to grip virg? (-2) around which side of virgil?s neck are kat?s jaws extending? (-2) powerplay -- 3 out of 10 ; this was a lot of movement to make in one post. you have katja approaching virgil, sitting down, pivoting, and rearing back all in the span of seconds -- it is unfair to your opponent to make so much movement without waiting for their response to each movement (-5). ?...she pirouetted to face where her left shoulder had been? her left shoulder has not successfully been placed yet, perhaps virgil could pivot to cut this movement off (-2). defenses -- 8 out of 10 ; head lowered, tail out, chin tucked, shoulders rolled, neck scrunched, hackles raised, limbs bent, weight evenly distributed, widened stance, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, toes splayed. subtracted two points for failure to redistribute her balance as she rears back (one for each ungrounded limb). attack -- 4 out of 10 ; attempting to hit her chest against virgil?s shoulder (+1, subtracted points for clarity issues). attempting to wrap her forelimbs around virgil?s neck, claws seeking purchase (+1, not a very hindering attack as claws are dull and likely would do little damage). attempting to bite into the back of virgil?s neck where the skull meets the spine (+2, subtracted point for clarity issue). injuries -- 10 out of 10 ; first round. round one katja total -- 25 out of 50 VIRGIL ----- clarity -- 10 out 10 ; nothing of note. powerplay -- 8 out of 10 ; ?she hopes to pull the limb back, and then hopefully upwards, desiring to contort the right limb into an unnatural position?? minor conditional, the success of this attack depends on the success of virgil?s bite to katja?s right elbow (-2). defenses -- 10 out of 10 ; limbs spread evenly apart, weight distributed, toes splayed, nails gripping, limbs bent, tail out, hackles raised, shoulders rolled, head lowered, neck scrunched, chin tucked, jaws gaping, eyes narrowed, ears pinned. shifting balance as she rears back, no points deducted. attack -- 6 out of 10 ; attempting to slam her left hip against katja?s right (+1, it seemed unlikely to me that virgil would be able to forcefully slam her hip against kat?s without throwing her own balance). attempting to break katja?s right forelimb with a bite to the elbow (+3, point subtracted for pp issue, point added for attempted maim). attempting to bring her weight down upon katja?s back, just between the shoulder blades (+2). injuries -- 10 out of 10 ; first round, realistic full dodge used. round one virgil total -- 44 out of 50 ROUND TWO
KATJA ----- clarity -- 0 out of 10 ; which side of her hips were struck? what damage was done from it? (-3) from what point is katja perpendicular to virgil? you say from the ?previous position? but you need to actually specify (-1). in which direction does katja turn to counter virg? (-1) from what angle and where upon virgil?s muzzle does katja hope to grasp? is she seeking to meet virgil?s bite with a grip to her top jaw, grasp the entirety of both jaws? (-2) where upon katja?s back is virgil?s weight applied? (-2) what side of the chest does katja attempt to strike with her right shoulder? the chest is a pretty broad area (-1). powerplay -- 5 out of 10 ; it seemed unfair to me that virgil?s attempt to knock katja over with the hip-bump did not succeed since she timed it when katja was on two limbs and therefore less likely to retain balance, especially while bumping into katja from the side (-3). ?she was now turned with her front nearly perpendicular to her previous position?? this should be an intention of position (-2). defenses -- 10 out of 10 ; squared stance, weight distributed, limbs bent, toes splayed, nails gripping, tail out, hackles raised, shoulders rolled, ears pinned, eyes narrowed. attack -- 4 out of 10 ; attempted counter to virgil?s muzzle (+2, point deducted for clarity issue), attempt to strike the underside of virgil?s chest with her right shoulder (+2, point deducted for clarity issue). injuries -- 7 out of 10 ; pending damage from virgil?s bite, strained muscle in hip (-1), unspecified damage to right hip as a result of virgil?s hip-slam (-2, you stated injury in your ooc notes, but not the actual post where it counts). round two katja total -- 26 out of 50 VIRGIL ----- clarity -- 5 out of 10 ; it seemed awkward and unlikely that virgil would be able to move so much on her hind limbs so quickly, as katja had positioned herself perpendicularly to virgil?s shoulder and virgil would need to move backward and to her left in a short amount of time to get to her desired position (-3). which part of virgil?s chest seeks to slam into katja?s right side? the chest is a pretty broad area (-2). powerplay -- 8 out of 10 ; virgil?s skull shaking motion depends upon her bite landing, which is why i look to it as a minor conditional (-2). defenses -- 10 out of 10 ; limbs evenly spread, weight distributed, limbs bent, toes splayed, nails gripping, tail out, hackles raised, shoulders rolled, skull lowered, neck scrunched, chin tucked, jaws gaping, eyes narrowed, ears pinned. attack -- 8 out of 10 ; attempting to push her elbows into katja?s back (+2). attempting to throw her chest into katja?s right side (+2, point deducted for clarity issue). attempting to bite into katja?s spine, hoping to break the bones (+4, point added for maim attempt). injuries -- 7 out of 10 ; moderate lacerations to bridge of snout (-2), light bruise on lower middle chest (-1). round two virgil total -- 38 out of 50 TOTALS
katja -- 51 out of 100 virgil -- 82 out of 100 AND THE WINNER IS...
virgil! katja must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. as this was an ownership challenge, svetlana now belongs to olympus and her status as an olympus member may not be contested for another two ooc weeks. DAMAGE
katja -- light bruising to right hip, strained hip muscle (will take three ooc days to heal), pending damage from virgil's last round virgil -- moderate lacerations to bridge of snout (will take five ooc days to heal), light bruising to chest (will take two ooc days to heal). NOTES
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) i suck so hard at this part of the judging, but i guess all i have to say is be as detailed as you can possibly be! include angles, identify which side of your opponent you are attacking, elaborate on positioning -- whatever works. there was very minor powerplay in this fight so that's cool. defenses were cool too. cool. great. fab. good job. good night. judging by [ aly ]
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