Forge me in flames; Spar
07-06-2014, 05:21 PM
Ahmose v Motif for Spar Round 1
Ahmose: 0 for clarity- -3 did not specify which side or angle he approached motif at. -2 did not specify which angle he wanted to bite at -4 lack of clarity on where he was aiming to bite (eg, lower jaws attempted to land here, upper jaws attempted to land there) -2 did not specify which part of her chest he attempted to kick 8 for powerplaying. -2 kicking the chest isn?t a very realistic attack to go along with the bite 5 for defenses.+1 for every one seen. Hackles raised, muscles tight, face scrunched, jaws parted, knees bent, claws dug in -3 for not readjusting balance for lifted paw 3 for attack. +2 bite to shoulder +1 kick 10 for injuries.First round Round one Ahmose Total: 27/50 Motif: 0 for clarity- -4 not clarifying the damage done to her from Ahmose?s attacks (bite or kick) -2 not clarifying if his paw hit or not -2 not clarifying how she moved to attack (did she arch her neck, reposition herself at all)-2 to dig her claws into his paws would be extremely difficult even in a non fight situation 5 for powerplaying. -3 state all attacks you intend to do, not ?if attack a land then she will launch attack b?-2 you cannot assume that he released her shoulder enough for her to be able to roll them 5 for defenses. +1 for every one seen. Legs spread, claws, tail out, ears pinned, shoulder rolled, chin tucked, legs bent, hackles raised -3 for not readjusting balance for lifted paw 6 for attack. +3 bite to face +3 paw slam 10 for injuries.First round Round one Motif Total: 36/50 Round 2
Ahmose: 7 for clarity- -3 not clarifying the damage done from the face attack 6 for powerplaying. -4 not responding to the attack to his paw -2 no weight was being thrown against his side 5 for defenses. +1 for each seen. Face scrunched, balance repositioned, tail aligned, ears back, eyes narrowed 3 for attack. +3 bite to the face 5 for injuries. -3 ripped face -2 stomped paw Round two Ahmose Total: 26/50 Motif: 3 for clarity- -3 Ahm stated the damage done to his cheek already, it was not a graze -2 where did she aim to bite on Ahm?s neck? -2 how were her jaws angled and where did they intend to land? (upper jaw along his jugular? Other way around?) 3 for powerplaying. -2 ?move her head under the attack? must attempt to do this -3 ?his muzzle swung over her head to where her muzzle had been? you cannot assume that he allowed her to move this far -2 ?she would snap her head upwards then? you must attempt to do this 8 for defenses. +1 for each seen. Eyes narrowed, ears pinned, legs spread, toes spread, claws dug, tail out, hackles raised, neck scrunched 4 for attack. +3 bite to neck +1 attack to vitals 10 for injuries. None taken Round two Motif Total: 28/50 Round 3
Ahmose: 3 for clarity- -4 attempting a lot of movement with lunging and wrapping paws around her neck then attempting to throw her down and pin her -3 how is lifting himself off the ground going to give him the momentum to bowl her over? 7 for powerplaying. -3 did not state how he dodged attack to the throat or how he moved so she only got the tips of her teeth in 9 for defenses.+1 for each seen. Chin tucked, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, face scrunched, tail out, toes splayed and claws in the earth, hackles raised, hind legs parted, knees bent 5 for attack. +3 bite behind the ear +2 lunge forward 3 for injuries. -5 bite to the side of throat -2 bruising to paw Round two Ahmose Total: 27/50 Motif: 4 for clarity- -2 wolves do not have knees on their front legs, there is the elbow, ?shin?, then the ankle and knuckles of the paw -2 I don?t quite understand how she repositioned herself to get to the underside of his leg -2 why did her backside sway to her left? 6 for powerplaying. -4 did not dodge or respond to his attack of wrapping his paws around her and trying to shove her down 9 for defenses. +1 for each seen. Knees bent, weight spread, toes spread and dug into the ground, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, hackles raised, shoulders rolled, tail out, muscles tense 3 for attack. +3 bite to back of foreleg 7 for injuries. -3 cut to the forehead -3 bruising from landed neck grab and attempted throw Round two Motif Total: 29/50 Totals:
Ahmose: 80/150 Motif: 93/150 And the winner is...
Motif! Ahmose must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Ahmose - Sever bite to left cheek, will scar if not treated, will take 1 OOC week to heal, bruising to right paw with minor scrapes to webbing, Moderate lacerations to right side of neck will take 2 OOC weeks to heal , bruising will take a few IC days Motif - Moderate lacerations to left front shoulder will take 1 OOC week to heal, moderate bruising on mid chest from kick, moderate cuts to forehead will scar if not treated, will take 1 OOC week to heal, bruising around neck/shoulder area from leg grab, bruising will take a few IC days Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Mell Clarity and powerplaying were two big ones for you, make sure you respond to every attack and when you attack be as specific as possible. Detail which way your jaws are angled, where you want top and bottom jaws to lands, where on the shoulder you want it to land etc. Also counter attacks don?t count as defenses so you were docked there, but other then that it was a good spar, you did a good job of taking realistic damage!! Message me if you have any questons! For Sea We chatted on skype already about a bit of this, clarity was also an issue for you, be careful about not responding to attacks! As well even when you are moving the slightest bit you must attempt to do it all, give your opponent time to stop you if they like because it is very possible that they will. I sent you a full list of defenses already so other then that not much to say! Also feel free to message me with questions!! - By [Dione]
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