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07-13-2014, 08:09 AM
Esti v Bass for Signy's Protection Round 1
Bass: 3 for clarity- -2 'strike her at her flank ' which flank? -2 which side did he try to knock her down with? -3 how did he aim to knock her down? Which of his paws? sides? Chest? Shoulders? in general this attack was not specific. -2 which shoulder did he try to bite? 7 for powerplaying. -3 'stepped with long strides, quickly carrying him to the attacker.' this presumes that its successful that he got towards his attacker, you need an attempt. 5 for defenses.+1 for each seen. 5 for attack. +3 for bite + 2 for trying to get her down to the floor. 10 for injuries.First round Round one Bass Total: 30/50 Esti: 0 for clarity- -4 'he plowed into her, sending her flying a good distance' Where did he plow into her? Also Plowed doesnt really make much sense. A good distance? Thats not very specific in a fight, how far? 4 meters? one meter? -2 which shoulder did he scrape? Where abouts on the shoulder? -2 'the other wolf was charging at her' head on? side on? -2 'aiming for his face, anywhere that would hurt,' you need to be specific, was it the top of his face side near the cheek? 6 for powerplaying. -2 'Esti jumped at him' You cant assume this happened. -2 'charged right back.' which assumes its successful, you should put attempts to charge back. 4 for defenses. +1 for each seen 3 for attack. +3 for bite 10 for injuries.First round Round one Esti Total: 23/50 Round 2
Bass: 6 for clarity- -2 'When the female came charging at him' front on? side on? -2 'attempted to sweep it under her legs' which legs? Front? back? Left? right? 8 for powerplaying. -2 'he stalked over to her' You cant assume, needs an attempt. 7 for defenses. +1 for each seen 2 for attack. +2 for sweep 8 for injuries. -2 for cut to nose Round two Bass Total: 31/50 Esti: 3 for clarity- -3 'he male spread his stance out above her.' Not once in Bass's fight post did he mention an attempt to go above her, merely to sweep his under her feet. -2 'throb of her shoulder.' which shoulder? -2 'use her curled force to launch herself' If she was in a curled position it'd be hard to go into a lunge to attack. 8 for powerplaying. -2 'male spread his stance out above her.' this is also powerplay since Bass didnt even mention an attempt to do this. 3 for defenses. +1 for each seen 3 for attack. +3 for bite 8 for injuries. -2 for bruising Round two Esti Total: 25/50 Totals:
Bass: 61/100 Esti: 48/100 And the winner is...
Bass! Esti must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Esti- All would have healed by the time i got to judge this. Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Evelyn Id say keep practising! Make sure you do atleast 3 attacks in one post to earn the points and atleast 8 defenses, feel free to pm me for help For Iko You need to practise on Clarity and powerplay. Make sure to put in an attempt with pretty much everything or else it counts as powerplay. Make sure you specify where your trying to aim. Watch the defenses to, pm me if you need help - By [Luisiana]
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