One time chance

Baldur v Sibelle for Spar Round 1 Baldur: 5 for clarity- -2 'He approached Sibelle nearly head-on,' what do you mean by nearly? how slightly to the right? enough to go shoulder to shoulder or shoulder to chest? -3 'bite onto the left side of Sibelle's neck, higher up and right in front of her left shoulder' this doesnt really make sense, you say higher up on her neck but then near her shoulder? The shoulder is nearer the lower part to the neck 8 for powerplaying. -2 'a bid to close the distance between the pair.' put in an attempt to be clear that he's trying and not assuming it's successful. -2 'He approached Sibelle nearly head-on, ' you cant assume where he is positioned against the opponent, its for them to decide. 10 for defenses. +1 for each seen 7 for attack. +2 for shove +3 for attempted grip to neck +2 for trying to unbalance sibelle with foreleg. 10 for injuries.First round Round one Baldur Total: 40/50 Sibelle: 1 for clarity- -2 'aim at the side of her neck. ' where abouts? Bottom or top etc. -3 'left side (front her POV) of his neck.' POV? You need to be clear so the judge can understand. Also which part of the left side of the neck, nearer the bottom? near the center? -2 it didnt really make sense how Baldurs leg got in front of her own when aiming for the back. -2 'just behind his shoulder blades, ' which shoulder blade? 8 for powerplaying. -2 'propelling her forward to meet the pale brute head on' you need an ' propels forward attempting to meet the pale brute head on' 10 for defenses. +1 for each seen 3 for attack. +3 for trying to grab neck 10 for injuries.First round Round one Sibelle Total: 32/50 Round 2 Baldur: 8 for clarity- -2 'behind her left foreleg' where abouts? At the top of the leg? bottom? 8 for powerplaying. -2 'tilted to the right so his lower jaw was facing toward her.' you need an attempt here as you cant presume where you are against the opponent. 10 for defenses. +1 for each seen 6 for attack. +3 for trying to get neck +1 for same area to try and worsen +2 for trying to knock her of balance 5 for injuries.-2 for bruising -3 for punctures to neck Round two Baldur Total: 37/50 Totals: Sibelle: 32/50 Baldur: 77/100 - By [Luisiana]

This was very late and judged for Lunarcat7 benefit only. No injuries or final notes needed. you both did very well here!