Wealth and Taste
08-21-2014, 10:24 PM
AURELIO v HARUKA for SPAR Round 1
AURELIO: 6 for clarity- What part of her legs is he aiming? -1, What part of her shoulder is he trying to hit? -1, What part of his shoulder is he using? -1, Is he trying to ram her shoulder after or during his bite at her legs? -1 10 for powerplaying. Notes 5 for defenses. legs spread and lowers, claws digging into ground, head lowered, eyes narrowed, ears pinned. (his scruff can?t be scrunched, a correct defense would be scrunched shoulders/neck, Im not entirely sure what you mean by ?tail would fold softly against his body?). 5 for attack. bite at her legs +3, ramming his shoulder into hers +2 10 for injuries.First round Round one AURELIO Total: 35/50 HARUKA: 9 for clarity- ?parallel position? I thought they already were parrell? -1, what side of his neck is she trying to bite? -1, 9 for powerplaying. ?mere inches between their bodies? -1 10 for defenses. legs bent, ears pinned, tail aligned with spine, head aligned with spine, shoulders rolled forward, chin tucked, toes splayed, claws digging into ground, hackles rose, eyes narrowed 5 for attack. bite to left portion of neck +3, slamming her left paw down on his right paw +2 (wolf claws are too dull to cause lacerations) 8 for injuries. minor bruised left shoulder -2 Round one HARUKA Total: 41/50 Round 2
AURELIO: 9 for clarity- ?turned almost parallel to him? I think you mean perpendicular, his first lunge at her would have put them parallel -1, 5 for powerplaying. ?he managed to pull it back out of his reaction? -1, ?he turned himself so that he was positioned face to face? -1, ?his lunge he would attempt to give her right front leg a swift bite to leave a mark to remember him by but nothing too severe and in the back half of his lunge, he would try to nip at her Achilles tendon? -2 (too much movement), ?he would probably end up standing a few feet away? -1 (again, way to much movement) 6 for defenses. legs spread, tail tucked, ear pinned, legs bent, neck scrunched, head lowered 6 for attack. bite to front leg +3, bite to Achilles tendon +3 5 for injuries. minor bite to left shoulder -2, bruised right paw -2 Round two AURELIO Total: 32/50 HARUKA: 8 for clarity- what part of his leg is she attempting to hook? -1, first you said she aimed to bite mid throat, then you said she aimed to bite his chest -1 9 for powerplaying. ?he ended up a foot away from her hindquarters? -1, ?bring them face to face, leaving a foot between them -1, ?standing half an inch to the left of him? -1 9 for defenses. ears pined, legs bent, toes splayed, claws digging into ground, legs spread equidistant, shoulders rolled forward, neck and tail aligned with spine, eyes narrowed 5 for attack. bite to mid throat +3, hooking his leg +2 7 for injuries. minor bruise to left shoulder -1, bite to front upper right leg -2 Round two HARUKA Total: 38/50 Round 3
AURELIO: 7 for clarity- ?avoid the bites to his chest only to get caught up in a few light ones towards the left side of his chest? she only tried to bite hime once -1, where exactly are the 4 puncture wounds? -1, he aimed to ram his head into her chest, yet you didn?t state where her bite landed? -1, 7 for powerplaying. too much movement of trying to ram her chest and bite her neck -1 too much movement of backing up away from her -1, ?rearing backwards until he was a feet away? -1 5 for defenses. lowered head, scrunching his neck, spread his legs, bending his legs, ears pinned 3 for attack. ramming his head to her chest +2, aimed bite at her neck +1 (full points not received because of too much movement) 3 for injuries. minor bite to left shoulder -2, bruised right paw -2 , puncture wounds to his left portion of chest -2 Round three AURELIO Total: 26/50 HARUKA: 8 for clarity- what part of his jaw is she trying to grab? -1, which way is she turning her head to bite his jaw? -1 10 for powerplaying. None seen 10 for defenses. weight balanced, toes splayed, claws dug into ground, legs bending, narrowed eyes, skull aligned with spine, chin tucking, shoulders rolled ward, tail straight and aligned with spine, hackles raising, muscles tensed 5 for attack. attempting to grab his lower jaw +3, attempting to slam her paw down on his left paw +2 6 for injuries. minor bruise to left shoulder -1, bite to front upper right leg -2, minor bruise across her chest -1 Round three HARUKA Total: 39/50 Totals:
AURELIO: 93/150 HARUKA: 118/150 And the winner is...
Haruka! Aurelio must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
Aurelio- bruised left shoulder 3 OOC weeks to heal, bruised right paw 1 OOC week to heal, pending bite to lower jaw Haruka minor bruise to left shoulder 3 OOC days to heal, bite to upper right left leg 5 OOC days to heal. Minor bruise to her chest 3 OOC days to heal Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Aurelio Remember all your defenses, and focus on my complex attacks. Also, try to avoid excess movement and PP in your posts For Haruka Focus on more complex attacks and watch out for power playing. - By [saffie]
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