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09-01-2014, 10:04 PM
RENTARO v MORGANA for DOMINANCE ROUND ONE
RENTARO ----- clarity -- 8 out of 10 ; ?The beasts canine's aiming to her snout to the bridge at a straight forward angle. Hoping to cause an intense amount of pain.? There are serious grammar errors here that effect the clarity of the attack. It is rather confusing and took me a few times to try and understand what he is trying to do. powerplay -- 10 out of 10 ; none seen defences -- 9 out of 10 ; +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 ears pinned, +1 eyes narrowed, +1 legs bent, +1 toes splayed, +1 claws dug into earth, -1 abdominal muscles tightened (Should be all muscles tightened, not just stomach. That does little to aid in fighting), +1 shoulders rolled, +1 scruff scrunched, +1 neck tucked (careful on your wording there, ?Head tucked downwards within his attack to protect his throat?) attack -- 1 out of 10 ; +1 bite to the bridge of her nose. Lost points here for not listing how severe the bite would be and for clarity injuries -- 10 out of 10 ; first round. round one RENTARO total --- 38 out of 50 MORGANA ----- clarity -- 9 out of 10 ; ?Teeth grazed the top of her ashen muzzle ... the contact was brief but enough to draw blood.? How severe was the bite? Minor, moderate, or major? -1 powerplay -- 10 out of 10 ; defences -- 5 out of 10 ; +1 ears tucked, +1 toes splayed, +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 eyes narrowed, +1 scruff scrunched attack -- 2 out of 10 ; +2 bite to the right shoulder and shaking, points taken away from the conditional injuries -- 8 out of 10 ; first round ? Minor? Bites to muzzle -1 light bruising on shoulder -1 round one MORGANA total --- 34 out of 50 ROUND TWO
RENTARO ----- clarity -- 7 out of 10 ; ?The man took a step back to left relative to himself as her teeth grabbed hold just above his sternum.? A bit confusing here, not sure where he is going. Grammar my friend! -1 ?As she began to shake her head back and forth a shiver of pleasure pulled down his spine fur and skin being irritatingly pulled off to reveal blood.? How severe is the bite? Did it tear? -1 ?His right leg trying to lift and hook her left leg in an attempt to slam it into her toes.? Is he hooking her leg here, or slamming on her toes? -1 powerplay -- 9 out of 10 ; ?His right leg trying to lift and hook her left leg in an attempt to slam it into her toes.? Front leg or back leg for both wolves? -1 defences -- 8 out of 10 ; +1 eyes narrowed, +1 shoulders rolled, +1 scruff scrunched, +1 toes spread, +1 claws in earth, -1 abdominal muscles tightened (Again does nothing to defend yourself), +1 weight evenly distributed, +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 legs bent attack -- 3 out of 10 ; +2 for bite to shoulder and severity, +1 for leg hook/paw slam. Points lost for clarity issues injuries -- 8 out of 10 ; -2 for bite to shoulder and shake damage. Should be a moderate bite and most likely will scar. I know that you put it in your notes, but it needs to be in your post. round two RENTARO total --- 35 out of 50 MORGANA ----- clarity -- 10 out of 10 ; Mostly clear powerplay -- 7 out of 10 ; ?teeth aiming to sink into a most vulnerable area on any wolf. The soft lower under belly? This is a highly unlikely attack, both wolves are the same height and she would have to be laying on her belly to bite at his belly. -1 ?he just may end up with quite the glorious scar from this. A sharp pain ignited within her as his teeth cut into the skin above the right shoulder blade? How deep did he bite her? Is it mild, moderate, or major? His attack was aiming for deep, yet you did not say how it hit. -1 You cannot avoid attacks, ever. It says in the fighting rules that if an attack is avoiding, that it automatically lands and that the judge decides the severity. -2 defences -- 6 out of 10 ; +1 ears pinned, +1 eyes narrowed, +1 lips snarled, +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 toes splayed, +1 scruff scrunched, attack -- 1 out of 10 ; +1 for attack to belly, points lost for lack of realism injuries -- 3 out of 10 ; -1 for minor bites to muzzle, -1 for minor bruising to shoulder, -3 major puncture wounds to top of shoulder, -2 for bruising to toes (decided by judge) round two MORGANA total --- 27 out of 50 ROUND THREE
RENTARO ----- clarity -- 9 out of 10 ; ?As those teeth sank into the flesh a mild giggle left his throat involuntarily. Her head shaking would only last for a moment? Again, how severe is this wound? -1, powerplay -- 8 out of 10 ; ?his jaws would open at a right angle straight for the right side of her neck just between the jaw and right shoulder.? Has to be attempted -1, ?Hoping that his chest would also ram into her right leg and make her lose balance.? How did he attempt this? Did he ram forward? Jump forward? -1 defences -- 10 out of 10 ; +1 toes splayed, +1 abdominal muscles tightened (this time I counted it because he was trying to defend himself from her bite), +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 ears pinned, +1 lips snarling, +1 scruff scrunched, +1 shoulders rolled, +1 eyes narrowed, +1 toes splayed, +1 claws dug into earth. attack -- 3 out of 10 ; +2 for bite to side of the neck, more points for potentially major wound, +1 for shoulder ram, points lost for pp injuries -- 6 out of 10 ; -2 for moderate shoulder bite, -2 for moderate stomach bite round three RENTARO total --- 27 out of 50 MORGANA ----- clarity -- 9 out of 10 ; ?surprising shift of weight slammed into her right side,? Did she take damage from this? If so, how much? -1 powerplay -- 6 out of 10 ; ?the women would boomerang back upon the male as that head lowered? How did she move back towards him, in what way? -1 Way too much movement in your attack, jumping back, trying to bite hus muzzle, pull his head down, trying to slam her right side into his body and slamming on his left paw is a lot in one go and doesn't give your opponent much time to react -3 defences -- 8 out of 10 ; +1 lips snarling, +1 eyes narrowed, +1 ears pinned, +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 scruff scrunched, +1 toes splayed, +1 weight distributed evenly, +1 legs bent attack -- 3 out of 10 ; +1 bite on muzzle, lost points for pp and no damage was tried, +1 body slam, lost points on pp and no pending damage, +1 paw slam for pp and no pending damage injuries -- 1 out of 10 ; -1 for minor bites to muzzle, -1 for minor bruising to shoulder, -3 major puncture wounds to top of shoulder, -2 for bruising to toes (decided by judge), -2 moderate bruising to right side (decided by judge) round three MORGANA total --- 27 out of 50 ROUND FOUR
RENTARO ----- clarity -- 8 out of 10 ; ?Shoulders rolled inward as her right paw went upward to try and slam into his left he aimed forward to bit into the middle of her forelimb.? This is very confusing, its hard to tell his attack and hers apart. -1 ?To help with his attempt at throwing her balance off and trying to regain his own at the straight angle.? I'm not sure what's going on here, what is Ren trying to do? -1 powerplay -- 9 out of 10 ; ?Her jaws skimming the surface of the right side of his face feeling the skin tear open in a wound? How severe is this wound? -1 defences -- 8 out of 10 ; +1 ears flattened, +1 eyes narrowed, +1 shoulders rolled, +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 toes splayed, +1 for adjusting for tripod state, +1 scruff scrunched, +1 legs bent attack -- 3 out of 10 ; +1 bite to forelimb, lost points on clarity, +2 for shoulder slam to throat injuries -- 4 out of 10 ; -2 for moderate shoulder bite, -2 for moderate stomach bite, -1 for minor bite to cheek (determined by judge), -1 for minor bruising to side (determined by judge) round four RENTARO total --- 32 out of 50 MORGANA ----- clarity -- 9 out of 10 ; ?as she found her right front limb within the males maw? Did he bite into her flesh? How severe? -1 powerplay -- 8 out of 10 ; ?and to free her limb from his maw? This has to be attempted -1 ?would bite down and then pull backwards in an effort to both throw him off balance but to cause puncture and tear wounds as well? Conditional attack -1 defences -- 6 out of 10 ; +1 eyes narrowed, +1 ears tucked, +1 toes splayed, +1 weight balanced, +1 tail aligned with spine, +1 legs bent attack -- 1 out of 10 ; +1 for bite on right side of neck and pull back, loss of points for not determining severity and conditionals. injuries -- 0 out of 10 ; -1 for minor bites to muzzle, -1 for minor bruising to shoulder, -3 major puncture wounds to top of shoulder, -2 for bruising to toes (decided by judge), -2 moderate bruising to right side (decided by judge), -2 for moderate bites on forelimbs round four MORGANA total --- 24 out of 50 TOTALS
RENTARO -- 132 out of 200 MORGANA -- 112 out of 200 AND THE WINNER IS...
Rentaro! Morgana must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. DAMAGE
RENTARO -- Moderate bite on right shoulder with take 5 OOC days to heal, no scar, moderate stomach wound will take 5 OOC days to heal and will scar, minor bite to right cheek will take 3 OOC days to heal and will not scar, minor bruising to his right side will take 3 OOC days to heal MORGANA -- Minor bites on muzzle will take 3 OOC days to heal and will not scar, minor bruising to her shoulder will take 3 OOC days to heal, major puncture wounds on top of her shoulder will take one OOC week to heal and will scar, moderate bruising to right side will take 5 OOC days to heal, moderate bites on forelimb will take 5 OOC days to heal and will scar. NOTES
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) For Riv -- Okay guys, to be honest this was a very difficult fight to judge. You lost a lot of points on clarity and on not determining how hard he was biting, as well as not stating how much damage you took from each hit. Watch powerp playing and come up with a bit more various attacks. But you really need to watch clarity, that is what really killed you here. For Kayi -- You also lost a lot of points here for clarity and power playing. You had the same problems, you need to state how much damage you take and how much you are trying to to inflict. While it is ultimatly up to your opponent, it makes it a lot easier. Watch your conditionals, which is saying ?if this lands than this? But yeah, this was a difficult fight guys. I can't wait to see how you two get better, you do have the makings of great fighters! judging by [ Evelyn]
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