let the ravens gather
09-23-2014, 09:48 PM
HELIOS v KATJA for OLYMPUS Round 1
HELIOS: 5 for clarity- where exactly to her right is he positions? -1, what sort of damage is he hoping to inflict by ramming her throat? -1, where at her right side is he stopping? -1, where on her shoulder is he trying to bite and what is he hoping to accomplish? -2 8 for powerplaying. there is no attempt to close the distance between them -1, you assume that she wont move when he stops at her right side -1 9 for defenses. knees bent, toes splayed, tail flat, eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, lips curled, head lowered, shoulders rolled forward 5 for attack. aiming to ram his shoulder into her throat +2, bite to her right shoulder +3 10 for injuries.First round Round one HELIOS Total: 37/50 KATJA: 7 for clarity- I cant envision how she is gripping his neck, are her legs on the left and right side, or the back of his neck and throat? -2, how hard is she throwing her weight forward? I know you said ?slam? but do you mean hard enough to cause a bruise? -1 9 for powerplaying. Not to sure how she could wrap her legs around his neck if he has a hold of her upper leg -1 9 for defenses. stance widened and squared, weight distrubted, knees bent, toes splayed, claws gripped the ground, tail raised to align with spine, head lowered, chin tucked, hackles raised, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, curled lips, rearing up onto hind legs -1 6 for attack. rearing up and attempting to wrap her front legs around his neck +2, bite to his scruff, near the base of the skull +3, attempting to thrust her weight forward and down to put pressure on his neck and add force to bite +1 10 for injuries.minor bruise to her chest, moderate bite to her upper front right leg (elbow). Round one KATJA Total: 41/50 Round 2
HELIOS: 5 for clarity- how severe the bite to the base of his skull? -1, did he receive any bruising for her slamming her weight forward? -1, where did her body strike his? -1, how hard is he pushing against her? -1, where is he pushing against her? -1 9 for powerplaying. strengthening his hold on her leg, minor powerplaying -1 2 for defenses. knees bent, head tucked. Defenses must be listed in the actual post, not the OOC notes 4 for attack. pushing himself forward +2, throwing his head back to attempting and strike her jaw +2 7 for injuries. moderate bite/tearing to the base of his skull -3 Round two HELIOS Total: 27/50 KATJA: 8 for clarity- how severe is the bite to her elbow? -1, how severe is the gash on her lip? -1, 10 for powerplaying. None seen 10 for defenses. eyes narrowed, brow and muzzle crinkled, ears pinned, hackles raised, hindlegs spread wide, toes splayed, claws digging into ground, tail flagged, shoulders rolled forward, scruff bunched, chin tucked 5 for attack. bite to the base of his skull +3, wrapping her forelegs around his neck +2 5 for injuries. severe bite would to her right elbow -2, severe bruise to the right side of her jaw -1, minor nick to tongue -1, gash to her right lip -1 Round two KATJA Total: 38/50 Round 3
HELIOS: 9 for clarity- where exactly on her leg is he triyng to bite? -1, 9 for powerplaying. ?jaws once more opening to latch onto the appendage? watch your wording -1 2 for defenses. head lowered, eyes narrowed, again you must write defenses into the post 5 for attack. attempted by at her right foreleg +3, throwing his weight into Katja +2 0 for injuries. severe puncture wounds at the base of his skull -3, moderate tearing of skin at the base of skull -2, minor puncture wounds to his neck -2, severe bruising to his skull (judge decision) -3 Round three HELIOS Total: 25/50 KATJA: 6 for clarity- You didn?t mention what happened to Helio?s grip on her leg when she fell -2, where exactly on his leg is she biting? -1, where exactly is she trying to kick on his leg? -1 10 for defenses. legs spread, weight distributed, knees bent, toes splayed, claws digging into ground, fore-claws gripping Helios, hackles raised, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, brows and cheeks wrinkled, tail leveled, shoulders hunched, neck bunched 6 for attack. attempted bite to his right foreleg +3, kicking his hind left leg +2 4 for injuries. moderate bruising to ribs -2, muscles strain -2, moderate puncture/tear (judge decision) on right foreleg -2 Round three KATJA Total: 33/50 Totals:
HELIOS: 89/150 KATJA: 112/150 And the winner is...
Katja! Helios must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Olympus now belongs to Katja. Damage:
HELIOS- severe puncture wounds at the base of his skull (1 ooc week), moderate tearing/puncture wounds of skin at the base of skull (5 ooc days), severe bruising to his skull (judge decision) (1 ooc week) KATJA- minor bruise to her chest (3 ooc days), severe bite to her upper front right leg (elbow) (1 ooc week), severe bruise to the right side of her jaw (1 ooc week) , minor nick to tongue(2 ooc days), gash to her right lip (3 ooc days) Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Lolaf Work on adding more details to your posts. Remember all your defenses, and add in more complex attacks. Its very important to remember to explain exactly where you are aiming/positioned, and what exactly you are trying to do. For Tea Just watched out for clarity and how you explain things. - By [saffie]
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