let the ravens gather
10-14-2014, 05:20 AM
CHRYSEIS v NATALYA for DOMINANCE Round 1
CHRYSEIS: 8 for clarity. -2 what angle is she approaching Natalya's right side? ; -2 where on Natalya's right side is she aligned with? The shoulder? hip? middle? 10 for powerplaying. - 10 for defenses. +1 for each of the following: Eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, head level with spine, chin tucked toward throat, tail straightened, legs spread evenly, legs bent slightly, toes splayed, shoulders rolled forward 5 for attack. +1 for chest striking Natalya's shoulder, +3 for bite to right side of Natalya's upper neck, +1 for right forepaw slamming into Natalya?s right paw 10 for injuries.First round Round one CHRYSEIS Total: 43/50 NATALYA: 3 for clarity. -1 for confusion on how her foot landed on the ground when there hadn?t been an attempt to raise it up, -1 for not specifying which paw she was trying to trip (there is a front and back left paw), -1 how does stepping to the left lessen the directness of Chryseis's attack?, -1 how does lifting back on two legs lessen the blow? Natalya is now on two legs while Chryseis is on three so it's more likely that Nat would be the one thrown off balance, -1 what damage was done by the bite? she's also extending her neck to headbutt Chrys, it's unlikely that no damage was done, it's not armor it's flesh, -1 what part of her right foreleg is she trying to ram into Chryseis?, -1 Where on Chryseis is she hoping to ram her leg into? the wrist? the elbow? the middle? 8 for powerplaying. -2 for excessive movement; fights happen in short spans, be succinct. It's unlikely Nat could manage all that movement before Chrys finished all her attacks. 10 for defenses. eyes narrowed, spread legs, spread toes, bent legs, leaned forward slightly, shoulders rolled forward, chin tucked toward neck, ears pressed against skull, tail straight behind her, hackles raised 3 for attack. +1 for pushing her own weight into Chryseis? shoulder, +1 for ramming forehead into the area where Chryseis? neck meets her right shoulder, +1 for attempt to trip Chryseis by hitting her left paw 10 for injuries.First round (minor bruising to right shoulder, bite to the right side of her neck.) Round one NATALYA Total: 34/50 Round 2
CHRYSEIS: 7 for clarity. -2 what angle is Chryseis in relation to Natalya? I thought they were still head on but as I read I'm suddenly not sure, is she twisting in some way? -1 what portion of her chest is she trying to push into Nat? the upper? the whole of her chest? 9 for powerplaying. -1 not attempting to shake her head, this movement could be countered/stopped by Natalya 9 for defenses. -1 for not attempting to readjust balance after being thrown back by Natalya, +1 for readjusting wright after lifting left forelimb , +1 for curled tail for balance, +1 eyes narrowed, +1 ears pinned, +1 hackles raised, +1 head level with her spin, +1 chin tucked to protect throat, +1 shoulders rolled forward, +1 legs spread, +1 toys splayed 4 for attack. +3 for aiming to rise up and drape her left forelimb across Natalya's shoulders while her right also tries to wrap around her neck, shaking her head to inflict more damage to her scruff, +1 for aiming to put pressure on the right front side of Natalya's neck 7 for injuries. -2 for severe bruising to chest, -1 moderate bruise across her neck Round two CHRYSEIS Total: 36/50 NATALYA: 5 for clarity. -2 "she attempted to twist her head" which way is she twisting her head?, -1 what angle is Natalya at in relation to Chryseis, if you're opponent doesn't specify you have the right to do so. Again I want to say they're facing straight on but the fact that I'm assuming rather than knowing means there's a clarity issue, -2 how much damage was done by Chryseis shaking her head? 10 for powerplaying. 8 for defenses. Eyes narrowed, ears flattened against skull, legs spread wide and weight balanced, limbs bent slightly, toes splayed into the dirt, tail even with her spine, hackles raised, shoulders rolled forward 5 for attack.+3 biting at lower portion o Chryseis? chest, +2 aiming to push Chryseis over 7 for injuries. -3 for torn scruff Round two NATALYA Total: 35/50 Totals:
CHRYSEIS: 79/150 NATALYA: 69/150 And the winner is...
Chryseis! Natalya must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
CHRYSEIS - Severe bruising to chest and moderate bruising to neck. NATALYA - Minor bruising to right shoulder, severe bite to the right side of the neck. Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Saffie - Solid fight, I'd just keep focusing on being clear about positioning as that seems to be what cost you the most points here. For Raii - Great fight! I'd mostly work on clarity and being more concise, especially with regards to movement and positioning relative to your opponent. Also please note this is my first judging and was a tricky one to judge, so please don't be hesitant to contact me if you have any questions or concerns! <3 - By [Nyx]
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