This ball and chain
10-23-2014, 07:46 PM
VALENTINE v EMPYREA for DOMINANCE Round 1
VALENTINE: 8 for clarity- where exactly is he positioned along her right side? Perpendicular? -1, what does he hope to accomplish by driving his shoulder into her? -1 10 for powerplaying. None seen 10 for defenses. hackles raised, lips curled back, eyes narrowed, ears pined, weight centered, stance widened, head lowered, chin tucked, shoulders rolled forward, knees bent 5 for attack. driving his shoulder into her upper right shoulder +2, but to the top of her neck +3 10 for injuries.First round Round one VALENTINE Total: 43/50 EMPYREA: 7 for clarity- not sure how she could step to left and he miss her, if they aren?t head on -2, again im not sure how his bite landed so low without a clear picture of their position -1 7 for powerplaying. your entire attack depends on whether or not he releases her -3 10 for defenses. eyes narrowed, lips crinkled, ears pinned, head lowered, chin tucked, hackles raised, shoulders rolled forward, knees bent, legs spread, toes splayed, claws dug into the ground, tail aligned with her spine 6 for attack. bite to his jugular +4, slamming her paw down on his paw +6 10 for injuries. moderate bite to her scruff Round one EMPRYEA Total: 40/50 Round 2
VALENTINE: 9 for clarity- Not sure he?d be able to reach under her to grab her left leg, if hes on her right side -1 9 for powerplaying. not sure he?d able to reach under her with their height different -1 10 for defenses. ears pinned, hackles raised, eyes narrowed, tail lifted, lips pulled back, shoulders rolled forward, toes splayed, knees bent, chin tucked, weight distributed 7 for attack. strike her jaw with his shoulder +1, ramming his chest into her nose+1, hooking his foreleg around her left foreleg +1, bite across her face/right eye +4 5 for injuries. heavily bruised toes on his left forepaw -2, moderate bite to his left upper chest -2, mild abrasions to the pads of his injured toes -1 Round two VALENTINE Total: 40/50 EMPRYEA: 5 for clarity- not really sure how she could reach his humerus -1, I have no idea what the ?axis? is -1, im not sure if they are parallel or not -1, not sure how she would strike his elbow while he has a hold of her neck -2 5 for powerplaying. Striking ?anywhere? forces your opponent to take damage -1, not sure how she would strike his elbow while he has a hold of her neck -2, if an attack isn?t possible because of your position, then you shouldn?t try it -2 10 for defenses. legs spread, eyes narrowed, lips curled, ears pinned, head lowered, chin tucking, hackles rose, shoulders rolled forward, knees bent, toes splayed, claws digging into ground, tail lifted 6 for attack. trying to strike his humerus with her shoulder +2, bite to his jugular +4 6 for injuries. heavy bruise to her jaw -2, moderate bite wound to her upper neck -2 Round two EMPRYEA Total: 32/50 Totals:
VALENTINE: 83/100 EMPYREA: 72/100 And the winner is...
Valentine! Empyrea must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Damage:
VALENTINE- moderate bite the left upper portion of his chest (1 ooc week), heavily bruised toes (5 ooc days), mild abrasions to his paw pads (3 ooc days), EMPYREA- moderate bite to her scruff (1 ooc week), heavy bruise to her jaw (5 ooc days), moderate bite to the back of her neck (1 ooc week) Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Starry Being clear on your position in relation to your opponent is very important, not being clear had ruin the entire post if the judge cant picture it. Also remember to take realistic damage from your opponent. If you are going to use technical terms that aren?t commonly used, please explain, its not fun having to go on a hunt to find out where you are talking about. For Lazuli Just remember to be clear on where exactly you intend to strike your opponent. - By [saffie]
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