Dance in Blood and Fire; Claim Challange
11-12-2014, 07:05 PM
CRUCIFIX vs CATALEYA for FREEDOM OF SIBELLE Round 1
CRUCIFIX: 8 for clarity: ?...attempt to knash his teeth against her cheek..? Which cheek? -1 ?...attempted to jam his right paw over her left paw, attempting to dig his claws into the soft webs between her toes as he attempted to move his jaw to the right side of her and attempt to knash his teeth against her cheek, his motives would be to get a grip and rip flesh...? This is a bit of a run on, and the movement all happens quite fast. I feel like this gives Cat less time to react. -1 10 for powerplaying. None seen 10 for defences. eyes narrowed, ears pinned, chin tucked, head level with spine, tail aligned with spine, shoulders rolled, hackles raised, neck scrunched, legs spread evenly, weight distributed evenly. 4 for attack. +1 for cut to paw web, +3 for bite to cheek and grip attempt (points lost for clarity), 10 for injuries.First round Round one CRUCIFIX Total: 42/50 CATALEYA: 8 for clarity: ?He would launch himself forward, closing the distance between them, which she would allow briefly. Her haunches would drop briefly, before attempting to launch herself forward, aiming to meet him nearly head on.? How close did Crucifix land to her? Did she have enough room to leap forward herself? -1 ?his fangs sank into fat and skin, thanks to her defenses, not yet shredding muscle, puncturing her skin? How deep is it? -1 10 for powerplaying. None seen 10 for defences. eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, shoulders rolled forward, neck tucked, legs spread, legs bent, tail aligned with spine, toes spread, claws dug into earth. 7 for attack. shoulder to the windpipe +3, bite to the neck +3, paw slam +1 10 for injuries. moderate bruising to left front paw -1, moderate puncture wounds on upper cheek (decided by judge) -2 Round one CATALEYA Total: 45/50 Round 2
CRUCIFIX: 7 for clarity: ?His own forward thrust shoulders would hinder her attempts to put weight on his windpipe...? When did he thrust his shoulder forward? -1 ?...landing a bruise against his flesh.? How severe? -1 ?...against his left inner shoulder blade, digging into the tougher skin there...? Again, how bad is it? -1 9 for powerplaying. ?He howled when the pain hit him and bucked his upper body in an attempt to shake any of her upper body parts attached to him and loosen her hold on his injured left paw.? This means that you are assuming that Crucifix was able to tear out a chunk of her flesh, otherwise he would still have been holding on. -1 10 for defences. weight made up for tripod stance, ears pinned to head, shoulders rolled, tail aligned with spine, head aligned with spine, neck folded, hackles raised, made up for reared up state, eyes narrowed, toes spread, claws dug in earth 4 for attack. tearing at the neck +3 sweeping paw out from under her +1 3 for injuries. Broken toe on left paw -3, moderate bruising on other toes on left paw -1, moderate bruise on chest (decided by judge) -1, moderate lacerations to left shoulder -2, Round two CRUCIFIX Total: 33/50 CATALEYA: 8 for clarity: ?Pain continued to flare across her neck as his fangs sunk deeper into her flesh, shredding through fat and threatening muscle. He would tug, trying to rip chunks of flesh from her body, but he didn't use enough force, skin would tear, his fangs leaving jagged tears that would undoubtedly scar. ? How severe is this? Where is he biting deeper into? -2 10 for powerplaying. None seen 0 for defences. None listed 8 for attack. bite to left shoulder blade with hold attempt +4, attempt to bruise the chest +1, bite to the back of the neck +3 5 for injuries. moderate bruising to left front paw -1, severe puncture wounds on upper cheek (decided by judge) -3, slight bruising to left shoulder -1, Round two CATALEYA Total: 31/50 Totals:
CRUCIFIX: 75/100 CATALEYA: 76/100 And the winner is...
Cataleya! Crucifix must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Sibelle is not freed from Arcanum ranks Damage:
Crucifix: Broken toe will take 3 OOC weeks to heal, bruised toes will take 1 OOC week to heal, bruise on chest will take 1 OOC week to heal, shoulder wound will take 2 OOC weeks to heal and will lightly scar. (These are all from Saffie's last post date, which was October 29th, so the only thing that has not healed is the broken toe. Sorry for taking so long.) Cataleya: Bruising to left paw will take 1 OOC week to heal, tearing to upper cheek will take 4 OOC weeks to heal and will scar, bruise to shoulder will take 1 OOC week to heal. (Again, from October 29th so only the tear will not be healed) Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here) Notes For Sea: Careful with not saying how much damage you are taking from the hits, you are losing a lot of points there. Also, try some more complex attacks and don't forget that you can have up to three attacks per post! Good solid defences, but you lost most of your points from not saying how much damage you took. For Saffie: Same with you for not saying how much damage you took, careful with that. You lost a lot with not having your defences listed in your last post, just make sure to look over before you post! Otherwise good attacks, nice and solid along with powerful. Great fight you two. - By [Evelyn]
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